Porch Sitting- Pandemic Style
Porch sitting with friends during Covid-19 social distancing47 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very well-written, descriptive, and timely in its message. A
socially-distanced visit is better than no visit. I'm terribly preoccupied with the thought of my granddaughter's graduation--in just two weeks, though covid numbers are shooting up! Dare I go??! God, guide me!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Your poem is very well-written, descriptive, and timely in its message. A
socially-distanced visit is better than no visit. I'm terribly preoccupied with the thought of my granddaughter's graduation--in just two weeks, though covid numbers are shooting up! Dare I go??! God, guide me!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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If you can social distance with a mask on as well... go! Too much is being missed!
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I'm praying about it. THANKS
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Porch sitting with friends during Covid-19
Porch Sitting- Covid Style
by gramalot8
Hello, my friend,
Coronavirus pandemic is the same as covid19.
Great entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest...good rhyming scheme. The presentation is nice but I don't like pictures with words because it displaces the reader's attention to the picture away from the poem.
Well done. Good luck in the contest. Great topic we can all relate to.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Porch sitting with friends during Covid-19
Porch Sitting- Covid Style
by gramalot8
Hello, my friend,
Coronavirus pandemic is the same as covid19.
Great entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest...good rhyming scheme. The presentation is nice but I don't like pictures with words because it displaces the reader's attention to the picture away from the poem.
Well done. Good luck in the contest. Great topic we can all relate to.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your comments.
Comment from roof35
This is a light-hearted look at the virus which is welcome in this troubled time and you rhymed it, too. I would point out a typo just so you can fix it. You say worlds and I think you meant the contraction world is which would be typed as world's.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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This is a light-hearted look at the virus which is welcome in this troubled time and you rhymed it, too. I would point out a typo just so you can fix it. You say worlds and I think you meant the contraction world is which would be typed as world's.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you. I fixed it!
Comment from H. Darwin Reeves
Well said. You have struck a sensitive note with many who read this piece. We do miss the contact with other humans because we're social animals and thrive on companionship. This plague has awakened and reminded us of how much we miss things when they are no longer available. Thank you for posting this piece and for the reminder of treasured frienships.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Well said. You have struck a sensitive note with many who read this piece. We do miss the contact with other humans because we're social animals and thrive on companionship. This plague has awakened and reminded us of how much we miss things when they are no longer available. Thank you for posting this piece and for the reminder of treasured frienships.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you. It is a hard time. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from mermaids
Your words capture the current state of our country, social distancing and the missing of friends. Excellent use of words that adds cheer to the impact of the virus and how we can still manage to socialize.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Your words capture the current state of our country, social distancing and the missing of friends. Excellent use of words that adds cheer to the impact of the virus and how we can still manage to socialize.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Thank you. It?s a hard time for everyone! I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Gypsymooncat
While I did enjoy this poem for rhyme and flow, I found your use of exclamation marks a bit jarring. You don't need so many of them, as it takes away from the work just that little bit. One here and there is okay, but not too many. I hope this helps. Otherwise, I enjoyed this a great deal. Good luck in the contest xoxox
Okay, I'll point out others that could be taken out, but this is my opinion only. I'll put the ones I think need removing in brackets:
Hi, there, my friends,
it's sure been awhile(!)
I really miss seeing
your wonderful smile!
We're quarantined now,
while our worlds in a mess(!)
And we're kept far apart,
Wearing masks like the rest!
But... let's just suppose
we could meet once again.
Just you and me, pal...
Social distance ... friend to friend(!)
I'll meet you out front,
on my porch... in the shade(!)
And we'll share a cold drink
I have germlessly made(!)
Just a quick visit
I'll take what I can(!)
Until "THEY" come up
With a much better plan(!)
Covid-19 ...
What an unwelcomed guest(!)
It's played mighty havoc
from the East to the West!
But I promise, my friend,
when you come visit with me(!)
We'll be socially distant
and stay safe as can be!
So, please come on over(!)
My porch is the best(!)
For love, peace and comfort
from the Coronavirus pest!
You don't have to agree with me, but I felt that the bracketed ones were not necessary to keep the impact of what you're saying.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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While I did enjoy this poem for rhyme and flow, I found your use of exclamation marks a bit jarring. You don't need so many of them, as it takes away from the work just that little bit. One here and there is okay, but not too many. I hope this helps. Otherwise, I enjoyed this a great deal. Good luck in the contest xoxox
Okay, I'll point out others that could be taken out, but this is my opinion only. I'll put the ones I think need removing in brackets:
Hi, there, my friends,
it's sure been awhile(!)
I really miss seeing
your wonderful smile!
We're quarantined now,
while our worlds in a mess(!)
And we're kept far apart,
Wearing masks like the rest!
But... let's just suppose
we could meet once again.
Just you and me, pal...
Social distance ... friend to friend(!)
I'll meet you out front,
on my porch... in the shade(!)
And we'll share a cold drink
I have germlessly made(!)
Just a quick visit
I'll take what I can(!)
Until "THEY" come up
With a much better plan(!)
Covid-19 ...
What an unwelcomed guest(!)
It's played mighty havoc
from the East to the West!
But I promise, my friend,
when you come visit with me(!)
We'll be socially distant
and stay safe as can be!
So, please come on over(!)
My porch is the best(!)
For love, peace and comfort
from the Coronavirus pest!
You don't have to agree with me, but I felt that the bracketed ones were not necessary to keep the impact of what you're saying.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review. It is greatly appreciated!
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I also took out some of the exclamation marks. Thank you for the suggestion. Please review again.
Comment from Gloria ....
There's one thing for certain, this pandemic has resulted in some fine poetry.
Some great lines in your finely rhymed verse, and I was particularly fond of the what I imagined to be lemonade, was germlessly made.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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There's one thing for certain, this pandemic has resulted in some fine poetry.
Some great lines in your finely rhymed verse, and I was particularly fond of the what I imagined to be lemonade, was germlessly made.
Wishing you much luck with the Contest Committee.
Gloria
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review. It is greatly appreciated!
