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Kyrielle8 total reviews
Comment from Beverly A McBride
I liked this poem. Very timely. I liked the form, too. I may want to try it sometime. I loved the line, "we caroused in bars" and don't forget the no distancing at beaches and huge parties we had to go to....no wonder the numbers keep going up. Good job on this entry. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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I liked this poem. Very timely. I liked the form, too. I may want to try it sometime. I loved the line, "we caroused in bars" and don't forget the no distancing at beaches and huge parties we had to go to....no wonder the numbers keep going up. Good job on this entry. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Beverly.
Yes, it's a very old traditional form, originating in religious chants, I think. That repeating line would have been something like 'kyrie eleison' (Lord have mercy) - still heard during prayers in some churches.
And as you note, I didn't have space to list all the stupidities that keep driving the numbers up in the US. If they could just get rid of the one in the White House, that would be a good start.
Steve
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Your lips to God's ears...we gotta have some change soon! Thanks for the info!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello anonymous
Interesting entry for the Write a Kyrielle writing prompt contest. I agree with you. We are over 137,000 dead in the USA and Trump is more interested in his reelection and posing with cans of Goya beans. He is such a loser.
Well done. I like the rhythm of the Kyrielle form. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Hello anonymous
Interesting entry for the Write a Kyrielle writing prompt contest. I agree with you. We are over 137,000 dead in the USA and Trump is more interested in his reelection and posing with cans of Goya beans. He is such a loser.
Well done. I like the rhythm of the Kyrielle form. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Gypsy. That image of Trump smirking away behind his hill of beans is hard to shake.
Comment from Earl Corp
e you may compare our leader to Nero fiddling while Rome burned, I think you should probably know that The US Centre for Disease and Control Prevention (CDC) estimated that 150, 000 to 575,000 people died from (H1N1) pandemic virus infection in the first year of the outbreak in 2009.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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e you may compare our leader to Nero fiddling while Rome burned, I think you should probably know that The US Centre for Disease and Control Prevention (CDC) estimated that 150, 000 to 575,000 people died from (H1N1) pandemic virus infection in the first year of the outbreak in 2009.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Yes, that was world wide over one whole year. In the US over that year about 12,000
Looks like small change compared to the COVID toll of 137,000 in less than 6 months.
Thanks for taking the time to respond. I guess you can see I don't think much of Trump's handling of the pandemic and it may well be that the worst is yet to come with cases rising sharply across the southwest. Meanwhile he poses behind a stack of Goya products on the Resolute Desk...
It would be nice to know what you thought of the poem.
Comment from prodigal
Nero plays his fiddle, Bill Bar plays his games as the justice system burns.
Count the dead and dig more graves. Clever. Seems they really don't much want to count them here in the US.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Nero plays his fiddle, Bill Bar plays his games as the justice system burns.
Count the dead and dig more graves. Clever. Seems they really don't much want to count them here in the US.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Yes, the administration wants to undercount them. It's getting a little hard to ignore the virus when most people now know someone who has been directly infected and the refrigerated truck morgues are lining up again.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This poem represents so well the fear we all live - One hundred thousand lives have gone;
the Reaper grins; more souls he craves.
Our leader limply fiddles on...
Oh, count the dead and dig more graves.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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This poem represents so well the fear we all live - One hundred thousand lives have gone;
the Reaper grins; more souls he craves.
Our leader limply fiddles on...
Oh, count the dead and dig more graves.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for those kind words.
Comment from roof35
You followed the rules and penned a good "Kyrielle." I especially like your line, "Our leader limply fiddles on." I think many of us feel this way. We need more leadership at a federal level. This is nicely done.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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You followed the rules and penned a good "Kyrielle." I especially like your line, "Our leader limply fiddles on." I think many of us feel this way. We need more leadership at a federal level. This is nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thank you for that. I have never seen a leader turn a blind eye to a crisis as Trump has done.
Comment from emmaysavage
I like the refrain in this kyrielle. The fact that you use the first person gives it a presence and helps the reader identify with your main point. Good work!!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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I like the refrain in this kyrielle. The fact that you use the first person gives it a presence and helps the reader identify with your main point. Good work!!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks for the kind words.
Comment from Bananafish308
This is f*****g awesome! Excuse the expletive, but plain old "awesome" doesn't seem to do this poem justice. This is worthy of being published. You followed the criteria for a Kyrielle to a tee (I only know, because I carefully read the writing prompt guidelines :)).
Great cadence and rhyme to the poem. Loved the second stanza, perfectly captures the absurd reality of what is going on in too many places. Also love the line you chose for repetition. The simple finality to it succinctly describes the cruel reality of the consequences of our actions.
Well done!
Bill
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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This is f*****g awesome! Excuse the expletive, but plain old "awesome" doesn't seem to do this poem justice. This is worthy of being published. You followed the criteria for a Kyrielle to a tee (I only know, because I carefully read the writing prompt guidelines :)).
Great cadence and rhyme to the poem. Loved the second stanza, perfectly captures the absurd reality of what is going on in too many places. Also love the line you chose for repetition. The simple finality to it succinctly describes the cruel reality of the consequences of our actions.
Well done!
Bill
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Bill, for the thoughtful review and the sixth star.
I guess I need an outlet to get some of these thoughts and criticisms out there.
Mystery Author
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You're quite welcome, Myst, or should I say Steve, now that the contest is over. Congratulations on the 2nd place finish. Well deserved!
I know what you mean about the outlet.
Be well,
Bill
