Peppered Pond
a 12/517 total reviews
Comment from emmaysavage
This pom presents a beautiful word picture and the alliteration is effective. I'd like it if you would explore this further in a longer poem. The photo is just right
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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This pom presents a beautiful word picture and the alliteration is effective. I'd like it if you would explore this further in a longer poem. The photo is just right
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you, es
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 12/5 poem about the pond that is peppered with raindrops from above but have to withstand the onslaught for the sake of the fish inside needs food.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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A very well-written 12/5 poem about the pond that is peppered with raindrops from above but have to withstand the onslaught for the sake of the fish inside needs food.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Sandra
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, quite a mastery in this complicated contest requirements :"gentle, random raindrops pepper the placid pond
as famished fish feed" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest;
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Wow, quite a mastery in this complicated contest requirements :"gentle, random raindrops pepper the placid pond
as famished fish feed" Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest;
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Iza
Comment from roof35
Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. It appears you aced the twelve/five poem. This is very nicely done.
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Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. It appears you aced the twelve/five poem. This is very nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you, roof
Comment from estory
I thought all the 'p' sounds captured that sense of raindrops dripping into the pond in this piece. Interesting that the fish seem to be feeding on them. A feeling of being fed by heaven's hand, I guess. estory
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I thought all the 'p' sounds captured that sense of raindrops dripping into the pond in this piece. Interesting that the fish seem to be feeding on them. A feeling of being fed by heaven's hand, I guess. estory
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Cool reading, estory
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Loving the alliteration here and the sentiments of those raindrops and hungry fish, an atmospheric write flirting with my imagination, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Loving the alliteration here and the sentiments of those raindrops and hungry fish, an atmospheric write flirting with my imagination, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Dolly
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, what are the famished fish feeding on exactly? Is the rain stirring something else up because their seem. Something missing.
Your syllable count is good.
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Hmm, what are the famished fish feeding on exactly? Is the rain stirring something else up because their seem. Something missing.
Your syllable count is good.
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Fish on a diet.
