Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

The natural animal sounds of nature I can put up with at night, it's the manmade noise that I cannot stand. You made me smile here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. I like quiet when i sleep, doesn't help that my partner insists on the tv going whist asleep. The things we do for love!!

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend


Nice entry for the Cinquain Poetry writing prompt contest. It seems like you followed the rules of the contest well.

The poem is kind of scary..I live it :)

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.

Excellent

What a lovely heartfelt poem! It is easy to read and understand, and I felt the sounds of thankfulness all the way through. Wonderful! Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork and
presentation.
-The syllable count is good.
-Effective imagery describing
all of the sounds around you
while you are trying to sleep.
-A good concluding line, too.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Much appreciated.

reply by Pam (respa) on 14-Jul-2020

You are welcome.

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Ooh, spooky. I think a poem like with remind many of those childhood nights alone when we swore that every little sound meant something, and every creak of a floorboard was someone coming closer, and the worst was the dead silence that followed.

Well done.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Much appreciated

Comment from Debra White

Excellent

Hello :)
An observation I'm sure we can all relate to at times!
Everything does seem so much louder when you're trying (and failing) to get to sleep...
I love the desperation in the final line - an effective use of those last 2 syllables.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

I'm with you. I must have complete silence when I sleep. Poor me and poor you. It's hard to go camping. Sending you my best today as always, and best for the contest,
Sal xo

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks for your review. It's amazing the noises you hear when you don't want to. Hope you're staying safe.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

LOL!! Love the mood and the 'build up' you are able to convey with this one in such a limited format - great job! ;) I would only suggest either lightening your background or your text as it is really difficult to read... :) Thanx for sharing and good luck! ;)

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks Yvette. Sorry about the difficulty in reading. Didn't realise the difference between computer and phone reading. Altered now.