My Small Boat
A Journey73 total reviews
Comment from Susan Larson
I love the image of this journey you take in your small boat into the sea of the unknown. I love your word pictures of silk caress, fractal space, and crystal shower. I felt myself traveling with you!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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I love the image of this journey you take in your small boat into the sea of the unknown. I love your word pictures of silk caress, fractal space, and crystal shower. I felt myself traveling with you!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thanks very much for your review, Susan. Kind of you to drop by to share the journey. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
Nice command of the musical and rhythmic effects in this traditional piece, and I found the ambiguity in the images really interesting. You create this impressionistic view of life and the afterlife here, in this voice that escapes deffinition. We don't know if it's God or the devil, if we are in heaven, or hell. A great comment on the human experience in general, I think. estory
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Nice command of the musical and rhythmic effects in this traditional piece, and I found the ambiguity in the images really interesting. You create this impressionistic view of life and the afterlife here, in this voice that escapes deffinition. We don't know if it's God or the devil, if we are in heaven, or hell. A great comment on the human experience in general, I think. estory
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thanks very much for these comments, estory—especially the ones about the musicality and rhythm. I think we quite often confuse heaven and hell!
Comment from Boogienights
Such a beautiful journey can only lead to heaven. Your words paint a very descriptive and lovely picture of a trip into the unknown. I could see it all in my minds eye. Thanks for sharing.
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Such a beautiful journey can only lead to heaven. Your words paint a very descriptive and lovely picture of a trip into the unknown. I could see it all in my minds eye. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for dropping by to review my poem, Boogienights, and for your very kind comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Debra White
Hello Tony,
What a beautiful poem.
The rhythm is so lilting, it feels like I am on your small boat with you!
You have utilised your poetic devices flawlessly and seemingly effortlessly.
Just perfect. A pleasure to read :)
Best wishes, Debra
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Hello Tony,
What a beautiful poem.
The rhythm is so lilting, it feels like I am on your small boat with you!
You have utilised your poetic devices flawlessly and seemingly effortlessly.
Just perfect. A pleasure to read :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for joining me on my little boat, Debra, and for fishing six stars out of the galaxy! Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Lulube
or is it what we fear to be, where we cannot see? or expect that life is just a fantasy? so many questions in ones mind, that sorrow overcomes the truth that none will be answered.
lulube
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or is it what we fear to be, where we cannot see? or expect that life is just a fantasy? so many questions in ones mind, that sorrow overcomes the truth that none will be answered.
lulube
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for dropping by to review my poem, Lulube, and for your observations. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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welcome
lulube
Comment from jake cosmos aller
loved this poem I like how you envision traveling through the stars as if on a boat being driven by cosmic wind and encoutering the voice of god at the end
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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loved this poem I like how you envision traveling through the stars as if on a boat being driven by cosmic wind and encoutering the voice of god at the end
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for dropping by to review my poem, Jake, and for your kind comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Urial
Hi Tony,
Excellent quatrain poem. I enjoyed the journey from the mind, I do that often. I like the assonance technique you use in the poem and the way you worked in the slant rimes in the 2nd, 3rd and 4th quatrains. The poem takes us with it along for the trip of wonder!
Peace be with you,
Urial
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Hi Tony,
Excellent quatrain poem. I enjoyed the journey from the mind, I do that often. I like the assonance technique you use in the poem and the way you worked in the slant rimes in the 2nd, 3rd and 4th quatrains. The poem takes us with it along for the trip of wonder!
Peace be with you,
Urial
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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I appreciate your comments, Urial, and the accolade of a sixth star. Thank you. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your intriguing picture selection and matching, color presentation. Thank you for allowing us to join you on your journey. I especially impressed by your "fractal space, a crystal shower" description. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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I admired your intriguing picture selection and matching, color presentation. Thank you for allowing us to join you on your journey. I especially impressed by your "fractal space, a crystal shower" description. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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I appreciate your comments, Joan, and the accolade of a sixth star. Thanks for pointing out phrases that appealed to you. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Vanna1
Good presentation. The poem is good. It is nice to fantasize sometimes. I would have added a bigger pause after "a journey of a" pause different kind. But it works good as is. But when I read it I added the pause for effect.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Good presentation. The poem is good. It is nice to fantasize sometimes. I would have added a bigger pause after "a journey of a" pause different kind. But it works good as is. But when I read it I added the pause for effect.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and advice, Vanna. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome
Comment from Mastery
Outstnding poetry, Tony. I like everything about it. It gave me the sense of floating into the great starlit beyond. Especially this part:
"Most musical; a small, sweet noise."
Wonderful write, my friend. :) Bob
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Outstnding poetry, Tony. I like everything about it. It gave me the sense of floating into the great starlit beyond. Especially this part:
"Most musical; a small, sweet noise."
Wonderful write, my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Thanks for this most affirming six-star review, Bob. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
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You are welcome, my friend. : ) Bob
