My Small Boat
A Journey73 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Bednar
The journey seems more like a purposeful, yet questioning quest - darkness, no wind, just kind of drifting. The ending of the last stanza seems to hint toward heaven, but one can be falsely lured.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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The journey seems more like a purposeful, yet questioning quest - darkness, no wind, just kind of drifting. The ending of the last stanza seems to hint toward heaven, but one can be falsely lured.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2020
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Kind of you to review this one, Margaret - especially as it's off the money now. I appreciate your comments and support. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from livelylinda
Tony: beautiful! Depth, ambitious wording, lots to make the reader think. Is it Heaven or is it hell . . . a question I have asked myself a few times when life wasn't treating me so well. You and your family keep safe. linda
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Tony: beautiful! Depth, ambitious wording, lots to make the reader think. Is it Heaven or is it hell . . . a question I have asked myself a few times when life wasn't treating me so well. You and your family keep safe. linda
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2020
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Thanks very much for taking the time to review my poem, Linda. If there is an afterlife and if it is anything like this one, there'll be a good measure both of heaven and hell in it. Their connection is too great to be ignored. I appreciate your award of a sixth star.
You keep safe, too. It sounds as though things are pretty bad in the US at the moment.
Comment from Hopeful2
Not too intimidating, offering a rating on an accomplished poet and novelist from my lowly ranks as a beginning writer on this site! I enjoyed the pace and flow of the poem, relaxed, wondering; and I liked the appeals to the senses of sight and sound and soul. The twist at the end was a surprise after sensing all along until then that this was a journey toward heaven. Thanks for sharing your writing; I hope I can learn from you.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Not too intimidating, offering a rating on an accomplished poet and novelist from my lowly ranks as a beginning writer on this site! I enjoyed the pace and flow of the poem, relaxed, wondering; and I liked the appeals to the senses of sight and sound and soul. The twist at the end was a surprise after sensing all along until then that this was a journey toward heaven. Thanks for sharing your writing; I hope I can learn from you.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you for taking the time to review my poem. Much appreciated. Welcome to the site. I hope you find what you are looking for here. I know that in the few years I've been on it, my writing has developed considerably because of the friendship, support and advice of other members.
Comment from Laelsa
I was pulled in.... until the last line. If it were to be Hell, you would not be using words such as calm, caress, or sweet. It kind of threw me as you paralleled opposites. Beautiful ryhthm throughout.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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I was pulled in.... until the last line. If it were to be Hell, you would not be using words such as calm, caress, or sweet. It kind of threw me as you paralleled opposites. Beautiful ryhthm throughout.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review, Laelsa. I guess that one person's concept of heaven is another's concept of hell!
Comment from TPAC
A delightful array of views, enticing viewpoint compelling in imaginative thinking, explosive ideals captivating to my interests. All stated in my given views of this particular write.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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A delightful array of views, enticing viewpoint compelling in imaginative thinking, explosive ideals captivating to my interests. All stated in my given views of this particular write.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for taking the time to review my poem and for your supportive comments. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Bill Pinder
Interesting, But it doesn't seem to be a glimpse of heaven or hell. It sounds like it comes down to how the person reacts to it. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Interesting, But it doesn't seem to be a glimpse of heaven or hell. It sounds like it comes down to how the person reacts to it. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Bill. I suspect we all make our own versions of heaven and hell depending on how we react to circumstances that life presents.
Comment from ImaginosBuzzardoDesdinova
If nothing else, she seems to be a charmed ship. I would guess Heaven if not someplace similar. But Hell, just like the Devil, can appear pleasing to the eye, so let's just hope that it really is Heaven that's caught the attention this time.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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If nothing else, she seems to be a charmed ship. I would guess Heaven if not someplace similar. But Hell, just like the Devil, can appear pleasing to the eye, so let's just hope that it really is Heaven that's caught the attention this time.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much for your review and wise comments. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Love the aura of existing in that realm between reality and nothingness.... yes, that voice does call across the abyss, but, in answer to your final question, whose voice is it? And was it but our own loneliness to begin with and we're on our own out here...? Love this one, Tony, because it invites the imagination to wander beyond where you leave us! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Love the aura of existing in that realm between reality and nothingness.... yes, that voice does call across the abyss, but, in answer to your final question, whose voice is it? And was it but our own loneliness to begin with and we're on our own out here...? Love this one, Tony, because it invites the imagination to wander beyond where you leave us! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thanks very much for stopping by to review my poem, Yvette. Much appreciated. I enjoyed reading your comments about the underlying ambivalence. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Sylvia Page
And, from the void, there comes a voice
Most musical; a small, sweet noise.
Diminishing, it disappears,
A glimpse of heaven--or of hell?
Definitely it's a glimpse of heaven. So where did your little boat land? Not hell I hope.
Very good imagery in this beautiful poem.
Best wishes, Tony.
Sylvia
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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And, from the void, there comes a voice
Most musical; a small, sweet noise.
Diminishing, it disappears,
A glimpse of heaven--or of hell?
Definitely it's a glimpse of heaven. So where did your little boat land? Not hell I hope.
Very good imagery in this beautiful poem.
Best wishes, Tony.
Sylvia
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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I'm delighted that you thought this poem worthy of a sixth star, Sylvia. I think we all interpret heaven and hell slightly differently and it was a description of this ambivalence that I was aiming for. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This is such a beautiful poem, and the picture is perfect with it. The first two lines are so well crafted, I've read them several times, and will remember them when, at night, I too go on a journey of "a different kind."
I sometimes long for the calmness you describe in these verses and as I picture the boat sailing and surrounded by silence, I wish I were there! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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This is such a beautiful poem, and the picture is perfect with it. The first two lines are so well crafted, I've read them several times, and will remember them when, at night, I too go on a journey of "a different kind."
I sometimes long for the calmness you describe in these verses and as I picture the boat sailing and surrounded by silence, I wish I were there! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for your review, Louise, and for your generous comments. I'm delighted that you were able to identify with my poem. All good wishes, Tony
