Lines, Lines, Everywhere Lines
The many lines we might see in one day.41 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
This was an interesting story in a poem, with a great descriptive imagery, visuals and flow. It looks like the victim died of the cocaine overdose, and that he was the relative of the narrator. And also appears that now that the victim was dead, she was free.
now free to go fishing
maybe find someone for kissing
but first, let's cast a line.
Thank you very much for sharing it with us.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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This was an interesting story in a poem, with a great descriptive imagery, visuals and flow. It looks like the victim died of the cocaine overdose, and that he was the relative of the narrator. And also appears that now that the victim was dead, she was free.
now free to go fishing
maybe find someone for kissing
but first, let's cast a line.
Thank you very much for sharing it with us.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Awww, no real connection between stanzas except they each tell of where we might find 'lines' and how many are in our lives every day. Thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from Lobber
Hi there,
an ambitious study in linear structures - glad you considered 27 the end of the line or else I might have made a bee-line to my freezer for more ice and another martini. - Lobber
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Hi there,
an ambitious study in linear structures - glad you considered 27 the end of the line or else I might have made a bee-line to my freezer for more ice and another martini. - Lobber
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thanks again for reading and yet another chuckle. LOL Linda
Comment from estory
I thought this was great. I've used a format very much like this myself in the past, and I think you did a great job creating all these little scenes where lines take their part in defining the experience of our lives. The yellow tape of the police line, the lines painted on the road we have to adhere to, the lines even for communion create this sense of order, real or imagined, that we have to follow in the course of life. I have a couple of poems very much like this in Patterns called Pieces and Waiting. Also in Fragmentation you may find Machines and Lights. I had a lot of fun with these. estory
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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I thought this was great. I've used a format very much like this myself in the past, and I think you did a great job creating all these little scenes where lines take their part in defining the experience of our lives. The yellow tape of the police line, the lines painted on the road we have to adhere to, the lines even for communion create this sense of order, real or imagined, that we have to follow in the course of life. I have a couple of poems very much like this in Patterns called Pieces and Waiting. Also in Fragmentation you may find Machines and Lights. I had a lot of fun with these. estory
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting, estory. This was fun to write and I could have gone on forever, it seemed, because I kept thinking of more 'line' lines! Keep safe. Linda
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yep, there are too many lines. We need a few of them, but others we could do without. The cokehead could have done with a few less lines of that, and paid more attention to the ones on the road. I think Tesla had the right idea when it came to power lines. There's a better way.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Yep, there are too many lines. We need a few of them, but others we could do without. The cokehead could have done with a few less lines of that, and paid more attention to the ones on the road. I think Tesla had the right idea when it came to power lines. There's a better way.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2020
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Thanks for reading, Cindy. Linda
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Linda, you do have a way with words, and your sense of humor is delicious.
I even signed up to be a fan, because of this post.
Just to think that you have been writing all these stories all this year, and may be last, and I never had a chance to review you, even once, to know you were writing on FanStory, makes me sad.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Dear Linda, you do have a way with words, and your sense of humor is delicious.
I even signed up to be a fan, because of this post.
Just to think that you have been writing all these stories all this year, and may be last, and I never had a chance to review you, even once, to know you were writing on FanStory, makes me sad.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Suzanna Ray: I have been on this site for . . .I forget how long but it has been 6 to 10 years. Before then, I was on Writing.Com for 5 to 7 years. These sites help one learn as you experiment with your own style. It is fun and makes one feel good when you are successful. Thank you for reading and commenting. Linda
Comment from prodigal
Signs signs everywhere are signs. Remember that song? The show weeds used to start with a song that said little boxes on a hillside. Boxes and signs and lines.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Signs signs everywhere are signs. Remember that song? The show weeds used to start with a song that said little boxes on a hillside. Boxes and signs and lines.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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prodigal, remembering the song, 'Signs, Signs, Everywhere is Signs, blocking up the scenery, wasting my time. Do this, don't do that, can't you read the sign.' Remembering this song is how I made up this title! I think the other song is, 'Little Houses make of ticky tacky that all look the same. Thanks for reading. Linda
Comment from ElPoetry001
Thousands of unseen communication waves flow around us. ( Radio waves, internet, cellphones, electrical waves.)
Your observations about the hardware, to aid us and guide us, made me think of all we do not see.
Ask the Microbiologist about the unseen viruses, on surfaces and in the air, it will make us all very paranoid.
Next, we are concerned as to the threat of someone crashing our grid.
Nowadays people have less in person communications than ever before in history. If we cannot bring people into our lives through our modern technology we will be isolated and at risk.
No street lights, no communication, chaos.
We need to consider all that you have said and what could happen if our systems go dead.
New communities are going to be organized in rural areas, self sufficiency will be the rule, protecting its members will be the plan.
Sorry for being a pessimist, but casual observations often get me thinking about all the potential problems that are being caused by the anarchists,
and mayors and governors that
lack initiative or strength of character to protect citizens.
Stay well.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Thousands of unseen communication waves flow around us. ( Radio waves, internet, cellphones, electrical waves.)
Your observations about the hardware, to aid us and guide us, made me think of all we do not see.
Ask the Microbiologist about the unseen viruses, on surfaces and in the air, it will make us all very paranoid.
Next, we are concerned as to the threat of someone crashing our grid.
Nowadays people have less in person communications than ever before in history. If we cannot bring people into our lives through our modern technology we will be isolated and at risk.
No street lights, no communication, chaos.
We need to consider all that you have said and what could happen if our systems go dead.
New communities are going to be organized in rural areas, self sufficiency will be the rule, protecting its members will be the plan.
Sorry for being a pessimist, but casual observations often get me thinking about all the potential problems that are being caused by the anarchists,
and mayors and governors that
lack initiative or strength of character to protect citizens.
Stay well.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Thank you, ElPoetry. I am generally aware of all those details you have mentioned. With the corona virus and political unrest alone, our country and the entire world is in distress. I'm 72 years of age and remember the Russian scare of the 1950's, racial unrest and the Vietnam War of the 1960's, the Cuban Missile Crisis, JFK's assassination, etc. Yet, I don't recall the depth of uncertainty and fear that I feel today. God help us! Thanks for reading. Linda
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Stay well
Comment from dragonpoet
I like this look at lines in our lives. There are so many. I agree 27 lines would make the poem long and boring. Maybe even 17.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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I like this look at lines in our lives. There are so many. I agree 27 lines would make the poem long and boring. Maybe even 17.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reading and commenting, Joan. Linda
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Don't mention it, Linda.
Joan
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello livelylinda,
Nice piece of poetry having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting various lines with their effects.
This stanza is particularly noteworthy:
"now free to go fishing
maybe find someone for kissing
but first, let's cast a line"
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Hello livelylinda,
Nice piece of poetry having captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end, and beautifully depicting various lines with their effects.
This stanza is particularly noteworthy:
"now free to go fishing
maybe find someone for kissing
but first, let's cast a line"
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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RP, thank you for reading and commenting. Linda
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Linda, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I liked how you looked at this topic in different ways, especially from the body being found to waiting in line for communion. A well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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I liked how you looked at this topic in different ways, especially from the body being found to waiting in line for communion. A well written piece. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Jacob, for your positive review. Linda
