Comment from cdefan

Excellent

Exciting chapter! The action was very descriptive and kept me drawn through the entire chapter. I was hoping Dr. Crane would meet his end, but I'm sure you have plans for him soon. I hope either Jace's beast or Steven gives him what he deserves. You have me wrapped into your characters like they are real. Lol!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks so much, Nate! :)

Glad you enjoyed the chapter. I hope to keep you entertained and hooked to my characters. You make the difference.

Thanks for all your support!
Shana :)

Comment from CEO2020

Exceptional

I love the pictures. They make you feel the suspense of this thriller.

"As much as the Beast longed to sink his teeth into the human's flesh and rip out the physician's throat, something more important drove him forward. He dropped to all fours and bolted out of the room and made his way through a long corridor that led to the heart of the facility."

Awesome!

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020

Thanks Neal! :)

I appreciate the awesome review! Glad to hear from you. I'm on vacation out camping, so I'm late to get on FanStory since I'm relaxing more than writing. I'm looking forward to your new book!

Always your fan,
Shana :)

Comment from fm wright

Exceptional

Great non stop action.Your words are very straight to the point. I like the way you are clear on who is saying what, as well as who is doing what. You definitely keep to each character's personality. A nice overall read.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020

Thanks so much, Faye :)

I'm glad you felt like the chapter was clear and easily read. That's something I'm looking for. I sure appreciate the review and kind words.

Hugs!
Stay safe my friend,
Shana :)

reply by fm wright on 08-Jul-2020

You're welcome, my friend.
May you stay safe as well.
Hugs right back at you,
Faye

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

I love these episodic shifts, your almost "couple of"excerpt s give a little more insight to the rather diverse nature and the giftedness of the various characters of breed line and the Heaven connection. This is a marvellous episode, but a clever way you leave the ending open to titillate the reader. Beautifully written my friend Shana, blessings Roy
Typo : The gunfire finally cam to (a) halt.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020

Thanks so much my friend :)

Glad you enjoyed the chapter and thanks for catching my typo. You're the only one seeing those. Thanks goodness for you!
As I rewrite my stories, I feel like it needs more hope and prayers. It seems as though I have moved to a different place since I first started writing. My faith gets stronger and I want my characters to share it too. You have encouraged me all the way.

Thanks for being my friend and supporter!
Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 08-Jul-2020

Yes, and I think you will get even stronger than ever, I've watched you grow exponentially dear girl bless you

Comment from ngage

Excellent

Another thrilling and suspenseful chapter, Ms. Shana. I was hoping Jace's beast would get his revenge. Dr. Crane came close to ending. Maybe next time.
Hopefully the other crew can get Tessa out of there before it all ends up in more chaos
Great imagery and descriptive writing. It was very entertaining. Looking forward to reading more!

Nate

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020

Thanks Nate :)

I always look forward to hearing what you think of my chapters. Everyone's advice and motivation helps me more than you know.
Thanks for being there for me!

Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

What a heck of a chapter, well-written, extremely interesting, very suspenseful start to finish. And just when you think things are going to calm down for a bit the action ramps up, full-force again, lol. I look forward to reading more. I wish I had six to give but I'm already out.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020

Thanks so much, Mistydawn :)

So happy to hear you enjoyed the action. I was hoping it would give the reader some suspense. I really enjoy writing about Jace when he is in his Beast mode. He's not one to mess around with. LOL!

Thanks again!
Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This rewrite chapter is better, more realistic, organized plot development with more appropriate dialogues; curious ending; enjoyed the read; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020

Thank you, Alcreator :)

So thrilled you like the rewrite. It has been tasking to go back and change so many things, but in the long run, it will be such a better book when it's all completed.

Stay safe!
Thanks again,
Shana :)

Comment from Marjon van Bruggen

Excellent

Running and running and constantly under attack. But in the end it seems they were not really the ones the hybrids wanted. The beast! And just as they think they outrun the hybrids and are safe behind the door, they hear Jace's beast and decide to help him.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020

Thank you, Marjon :)

Yes, this is definitely a energetic chapter with all the hybrids and Jace's beast. I think there is a big battle coming ahead. LOL!
Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the review and words of encouragement. I do appreciate it!

Sincerely,
Shana :)

reply by Marjon van Bruggen on 08-Jul-2020

Welcome!