The Barbecue
Revenge is a dish best served ... hot?10 total reviews
Comment from AJ McCall
This would a killer horror short. And I'm glad I'm not eating anything right now because this sure made my stomach churn. His friends' will definitely taste the difference. Thanks for sharing this!!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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This would a killer horror short. And I'm glad I'm not eating anything right now because this sure made my stomach churn. His friends' will definitely taste the difference. Thanks for sharing this!!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Sometimes I write light and fluffy and sometimes I just go for the throat (no pun intended). Anyway, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my little super short, AJ. Have a great day.
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Your're welcome! And you too.
Comment from Margaret Bednar
Yikes, this is a gory 75 word flash fiction. A bit like Sweeny Todd. I do not know, but something makes me believe the smell would not be appetizing.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Yikes, this is a gory 75 word flash fiction. A bit like Sweeny Todd. I do not know, but something makes me believe the smell would not be appetizing.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my little short piece, Margaret. And I agree with you - I kind of doubt that the smell would be appetizing.
Comment from sibhus
This is awesome. I did not expect this at all. But isn't this every disgruntled employees fantasy. Maybe not, I'd blow the knee caps off of my idiot boss. Did I say that out loud. Anyway excellent entry for the contest, Sherry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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This is awesome. I did not expect this at all. But isn't this every disgruntled employees fantasy. Maybe not, I'd blow the knee caps off of my idiot boss. Did I say that out loud. Anyway excellent entry for the contest, Sherry. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thanks for taking the time to read and comment on my little short horror piece. And yes - you said that out loud - LOL!
Comment from Mastery
Hi Sherry. LOL Shades of the movie, "Texas Chainsaw Massacre" eh?
That was for homemade chili. You have a great flash fiction here. Can I suggest one change for more clarity and impact?
"Soon his friends would be feasting on meat like none they had ever eaten."
Try: Soon, he and his friends would feast on a most delicious and rare barbecue.
(add or subtract a word to make the 75 of course...I did not count yet. Good luck with it, Sherry. :) Bob
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Hi Sherry. LOL Shades of the movie, "Texas Chainsaw Massacre" eh?
That was for homemade chili. You have a great flash fiction here. Can I suggest one change for more clarity and impact?
"Soon his friends would be feasting on meat like none they had ever eaten."
Try: Soon, he and his friends would feast on a most delicious and rare barbecue.
(add or subtract a word to make the 75 of course...I did not count yet. Good luck with it, Sherry. :) Bob
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Bob, for taking the time to read and review my little horror short. I was actually thinking more Silence of the Lambs than Texas Chainsaw Massacre, but that works too. And I think I will go back in and reword that sentence, not quite like you suggested, but when I read over it, you were right; it needed some tweeking. Thank you for the suggestion. Have a great day.
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You do the same, my friend. : ) Bob
Comment from humpwhistle
As if this year's fourth of July barbecues weren't anemic already. Cannibalism? Yum. Evidently Brandon had something against his guests, too. Mmmm, this burger is great! What did you put in it?
Best of luck, sherrygreywolf.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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As if this year's fourth of July barbecues weren't anemic already. Cannibalism? Yum. Evidently Brandon had something against his guests, too. Mmmm, this burger is great! What did you put in it?
Best of luck, sherrygreywolf.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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LOL! Thanks, Lee, for taking the time to read and comment on my little short horror piece. But then again, maybe his "friends" are actually fellow employees who hate the boss, too. Just sayin' Have a great day, Lee.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like the theme, the taletelling, revenge best taken, barbecue hot served; enjoyed the read; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; wish you good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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I like the theme, the taletelling, revenge best taken, barbecue hot served; enjoyed the read; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this; wish you good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Alcreator, for taking the time to read and review my little short tale of revenge. Glad you enjoyed it and hope you're having a great week.
Comment from royowen
Talk about a surprise menu when having a barbecue, Roast boss. This is an excellent entry in this seventy five word contest, all the right ingredients for this contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Talk about a surprise menu when having a barbecue, Roast boss. This is an excellent entry in this seventy five word contest, all the right ingredients for this contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thank, Roy, for taking the time to read and comment on my short little tale. "Roast boss" - wish I'd come up with that - lol!
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh my goodness, not just burning fire here but murder also, a chilling write and you certainly socked this one to us with a vengeance, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Oh my goodness, not just burning fire here but murder also, a chilling write and you certainly socked this one to us with a vengeance, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Dolly, for taking the time to read and comment on my little story. Sorry, but I always love that little twist (no matter how gruesome) at the end. Have a great evening.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oh, no cannibals in disguise, not funny at all. No matter how much I like barbeque I will not try something like this. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Oh, no cannibals in disguise, not funny at all. No matter how much I like barbeque I will not try something like this. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Deb told me it was too gruesome, but gruesome was all that was coming to mind tonight - probably because I watched Silence of the Lambs earlier today. Oh well. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, Iza!
Comment from DeboraDyess
Remind me not to piss you off when we work together! Of course, you're usually the 'boss' in those situations, so I guess YOU better not piss ME off. lol
One thought
barn where, yesterday, he had walked
Good job on the story, sis but, as I told you earlier, GROSS! lol.
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Remind me not to piss you off when we work together! Of course, you're usually the 'boss' in those situations, so I guess YOU better not piss ME off. lol
One thought
barn where, yesterday, he had walked
Good job on the story, sis but, as I told you earlier, GROSS! lol.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Deb, for the catch. I'll fix it. Talk tomorrow!
