Comment from tempeste

Excellent

Ciao Marco , I waited until your poem arrived in the voting booth to review it and give my vote...the first of many I hope!

First off I found your art choice eyes catching and it compliments well your beautiful poem ..

Some people have that mystery quality /vibe about them .. and it allures

... what puzzles , excites , kindles our curiosity, leaves us in awe ....is alluring ..

A smile ,a laugh , a scent of perfume can
capture our interest and make us want to know more about this person.

So we tend to start observing that special person more in detail ..

like the beat of her pulse in her graceful neck ..

This line is very sensual...and gets the reader s Imagination rolling ..

slender neck being kissed

Mona Lisa has the most famous enigmatic smile known in art .. it's ambiguous and it enchants and lures but I feel in a chaste way...if that makes sense.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020

Your comments and review are likely better than my contest entry(-; Regardless, you captured the essence of my poem. I 'visited' Mona Lisa in her Paris gallery. Her smile, indeed, did follow me across the room. Thanks for your vote too.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

This is so wonderful - her enigmatic smile lures me, opens the door to so many interpretations. Thank you so much for sharing and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Thanks Iza!

Truthfully, the smile would get me each time. From a male perspective, there are surely other interpretations (-;

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Aaaaah... what a lovely and alluring offering that entices the reader to imagine their own version of 'her' and 'her smile' (and other tempting attributes... wink, wink! ;) Well done and thanx for sharing -- good luck! ;)

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Yvette,

THANKS as always for your reviews of my poems. Personally, it was the smile that always caught my attention (& maybe some of those other attributes too) (-;

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

While there is nothing but sweet notes in this piece, I detect a menacing undertone which is in my opinion one of the emotions a skilled writer is able to achieve. That is showing with what appears to be completely the opposite. Excellent romance write.

Contest compliant with a great sensual imagery and I wish you much luck in the booth.

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Gloria,

I am not that sophisticated. There was no menacing thought in my thinking - just a simple romantic idea.

Obviously, readers have their own interpretations and that is what makes poetry so interesting.

Comment from Barnaby Wilde

Good

I really liked the picture your words have painted. Very elegant wording. I'm not sure if I'm a fan of all lower case, but maybe that fits the simplicity intended. I read it again and it flows. Very nice.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

hi Barnaby!

Thanks for your review and comments. My poetic style is never to write in upper case unless I use a proper noun. I like to keep it simple. Except for a squiggle or dash for my typical 5-7-5 poems, I rarely use any punctuation either.

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

That is an interesting turn of words that you use, "the beat of her heart
pulses through her graceful neck" it leaves me thinking of a heartbeat as something soft and gentle.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Mia,

You are right about how you describe your heartbeat. But it is still a very strong pulse that pumps through our arteries (-;

Thanks for your review and stars - all are appreciated.

Comment from Laurie Holding

Good

This was a lovely little read, all encapsulated in 20 syllables, just as your prompt instructed. Just goes to show that you don't need too many words to describe the feeling of being truly smitten! Well done.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Laurie,

THANKS for your positive review for this poem. I would favor a suggestion from you to improve the quality of this entry. I have no problem editing any of my posts when a reviewer offers a critical suggestion or word choice.

Comment from Bobby Cunningham

Excellent

Wow! This is a very good entry for the contest. The picture accompanying this poem is good. The actual writing is fantastic. Best of luck in the contest. Have a wonderful day.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Thanks Bobby and Millie for your review of this entry. My typical writing mode is 5-7-5, but I expanded this poem for this 20-syllable contest. My poetry wheelhouse does not include composing longer verses. While I read some, I rarely provide reviews for anything longer than 31 syllables even if I am a fan of the poet.

Stay safe. Keep healthy and your day will be a good one.