My Adopted Home
oh, how many barriers were overcome36 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A nicely written Tri-fall poem JLR about overcoming the barriers with a simple smile when moving to another country. Just in your second verse needed/acquired doesn't rhyme I wondered if 'wins heeded' would work for you.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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A nicely written Tri-fall poem JLR about overcoming the barriers with a simple smile when moving to another country. Just in your second verse needed/acquired doesn't rhyme I wondered if 'wins heeded' would work for you.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Valda, oops good thought I corrected this,
Comment from sherrygreywolf
Being unfamiliar with this format, I appreciate your author's notes. You seem to have followed all the requirements for the poem and your syllable count is spot-on. Good job.
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Being unfamiliar with this format, I appreciate your author's notes. You seem to have followed all the requirements for the poem and your syllable count is spot-on. Good job.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Sherry thank you/
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
Some of these lines don't make sense. The one about touching options is an example. 'Oft carefree' sounds foreced as well. I do like the sentiment of this poem.
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reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Some of these lines don't make sense. The one about touching options is an example. 'Oft carefree' sounds foreced as well. I do like the sentiment of this poem.
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Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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thanks
Comment from TommyWrites
Very good poem! I truly enjoyed it...it has this deep underlining to it, and yet it's light and hearty. I've read some of your other work, and I really like it. Best of luck with future writings.
TommyWrites~
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Very good poem! I truly enjoyed it...it has this deep underlining to it, and yet it's light and hearty. I've read some of your other work, and I really like it. Best of luck with future writings.
TommyWrites~
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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TommyWrites, thank you much!
Comment from RGstar
Love the wording...good poetic flow and ambiance...the only thing that riddled me was it seemed here, ''I try to smile at all
the youngsters
spinsters and miserly neighbor
the short and yes the tall
but tricksters
make me want to bang the tabor''
there seemed to be a negative of the various, including the young, which I couldn't quite understand , as if only the old made any sense....and the group which were quoted are all categorised in one negative bunch. Perhaps you could enlighten me a little of your meaning there.
Best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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Love the wording...good poetic flow and ambiance...the only thing that riddled me was it seemed here, ''I try to smile at all
the youngsters
spinsters and miserly neighbor
the short and yes the tall
but tricksters
make me want to bang the tabor''
there seemed to be a negative of the various, including the young, which I couldn't quite understand , as if only the old made any sense....and the group which were quoted are all categorised in one negative bunch. Perhaps you could enlighten me a little of your meaning there.
Best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2020
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RGstar, often the days of a old man relegated to the life in a primarily long retired neighborhood and no longer close to grandchildren is feeling sort of put on the shelf of life.
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You hang in there..plenty left....
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is an excellent poem with the perfect picture accompanying it. The rhyming is really good and unforced and the syllable count is consistent which allows this poem to flow effortlessly. A very clever and creative write.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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This is an excellent poem with the perfect picture accompanying it. The rhyming is really good and unforced and the syllable count is consistent which allows this poem to flow effortlessly. A very clever and creative write.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Thank you much, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Sally Law
I'm glad to be here, too. My French ancestors have been here since the 1600s, landing in Virginia and migrating to Soith Carolina and North Georgia, where I was born. I'm not so sure about my other family lines because I've been unable to trace them. I'm a preserver of history regardless of what I find. It is what is is and we are the richer if we learn from it and move forward. Sending you my best today as always for this marvelous poem,
Sally xo
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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I'm glad to be here, too. My French ancestors have been here since the 1600s, landing in Virginia and migrating to Soith Carolina and North Georgia, where I was born. I'm not so sure about my other family lines because I've been unable to trace them. I'm a preserver of history regardless of what I find. It is what is is and we are the richer if we learn from it and move forward. Sending you my best today as always for this marvelous poem,
Sally xo
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Sally, what a tremendous heritage! My oh my, Have a great week.
Comment from Janet Foor
How nice to read a poem from a grateful heart in this well written "tri-fall" form. It does not look easy and yet your have made it so.
Well done and stay well.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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How nice to read a poem from a grateful heart in this well written "tri-fall" form. It does not look easy and yet your have made it so.
Well done and stay well.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 06-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Janet, I thank you so very much! It was certainly a challenge, since I am much more comfortable with free verse.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
You appear to be a person who is both thankful and grateful for the blessings you have. You can take that inner happiness and bless others with a smile. Great!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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You appear to be a person who is both thankful and grateful for the blessings you have. You can take that inner happiness and bless others with a smile. Great!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Rebecca, yes and yes, I trust you as well!
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Thank you!
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, quick before other reviewers see your post you need to add some letters to several words.
Please go back to see that if you add an 's' to youngster it becomes youngsterS. Do the same for spinsterS , then they will both go with 'tricksters"in the last line. Add them in and read aloud and you will hear, what I mean.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Dear JLR, quick before other reviewers see your post you need to add some letters to several words.
Please go back to see that if you add an 's' to youngster it becomes youngsterS. Do the same for spinsterS , then they will both go with 'tricksters"in the last line. Add them in and read aloud and you will hear, what I mean.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020
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Suzanna, I reviewed you comment and while I only have one youngster near me and one spinster near me, I know many trickers soI did conform these reading to your suggestion for the LARGER WORLD. Have an awesome week.
