Mistakes
Poem about God 5/7/56 total reviews
Comment from Melodie Michelle
I see where you were going with your cute little poem, but unfortunately I found a big typo;-(
TYPO:
It reads like this: ("Just like any good
parent God allows me make
some silly mistakes")
It SHOULD READ:
"Just like any good parent, God allows me TO make some silly mistakes"
*** I added the word "TO" otherwise it wasn't making sense;-)
Next time be sure to go over it several times before submitting it for a contest my friend!
It's a great poem, when written correctly.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest;-)
May God bless you,;-)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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I see where you were going with your cute little poem, but unfortunately I found a big typo;-(
TYPO:
It reads like this: ("Just like any good
parent God allows me make
some silly mistakes")
It SHOULD READ:
"Just like any good parent, God allows me TO make some silly mistakes"
*** I added the word "TO" otherwise it wasn't making sense;-)
Next time be sure to go over it several times before submitting it for a contest my friend!
It's a great poem, when written correctly.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest;-)
May God bless you,;-)
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Wonderful entry for the
A Poem about God writing prompt contest. You stayed in topic and followed the rules well. The presentation is beautiful.
I love short poetry. Your 5/7/5 is very good with good syllable count and connection between lines. I like the idea of a God fatherly love.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Hello my friend
Wonderful entry for the
A Poem about God writing prompt contest. You stayed in topic and followed the rules well. The presentation is beautiful.
I love short poetry. Your 5/7/5 is very good with good syllable count and connection between lines. I like the idea of a God fatherly love.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Great review - thanks for sharing those sentiments zanya
Comment from TommyWrites
This is so true!
It's quick and right to the point. We DO make mistakes, and even so, he forgives and loves us. It's rather remarkable. Very good poem, and best of luck in the contest! (my votes on you!)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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This is so true!
It's quick and right to the point. We DO make mistakes, and even so, he forgives and loves us. It's rather remarkable. Very good poem, and best of luck in the contest! (my votes on you!)
Comment Written 02-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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And thanks again for these 6 twinkling stars zanya
Comment from Earl Corp
Since you had no syallbe or line restrictions why did you choose the format of three lines? The word parent could have fit on the first line with no problem. It would be easier to read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Since you had no syallbe or line restrictions why did you choose the format of three lines? The word parent could have fit on the first line with no problem. It would be easier to read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reading zanya
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello,
Top of the day to you. I like your 5-7-5 poem. Great imagery you used to reflect your message. Yes, God will forgive us 70 x 7 which is 490 times. He is better than our parents in forgiveness. I like this message. Well done. Happy writing:-) This is a lovely poem about God. Great title also.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Hello,
Top of the day to you. I like your 5-7-5 poem. Great imagery you used to reflect your message. Yes, God will forgive us 70 x 7 which is 490 times. He is better than our parents in forgiveness. I like this message. Well done. Happy writing:-) This is a lovely poem about God. Great title also.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks for a great review and sharing those ideas zanya
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You are welcome.
Comment from Michele Harber
What a clever poem. I enjoyed that you "made a mistake" (leaving out the word "to") in your expression of God (and parents) allowing you to make mistakes. I appreciated the idea that it's okay to make silly mistakes, and especially that you illustrated that by making one.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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What a clever poem. I enjoyed that you "made a mistake" (leaving out the word "to") in your expression of God (and parents) allowing you to make mistakes. I appreciated the idea that it's okay to make silly mistakes, and especially that you illustrated that by making one.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
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You're welcome.
