Distant Tree
We learn a lot from nature.7 total reviews
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a lovely poem entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing prompt. I hope it does well in the contest.
I noticed one typo:
Wilting leaves fall to the ground.
Sad and lonely, the (they) turn to brown.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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This is a lovely poem entry for the Free Verse Poetry writing prompt. I hope it does well in the contest.
I noticed one typo:
Wilting leaves fall to the ground.
Sad and lonely, the (they) turn to brown.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for catching that. I have fixed it.
Comment from Edward Escobar
I like to visualize this verse as someone holding while during these early stages of many struggles within and out and I smile at the idea of that tree growing stronger within and out.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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I like to visualize this verse as someone holding while during these early stages of many struggles within and out and I smile at the idea of that tree growing stronger within and out.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Anne-Marie brison
excellent!!! awesome job!!!! and thanks sooo much for sharing!! incredible!! love it!! it is really very good and beautiful!! great job!! keep writing!!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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excellent!!! awesome job!!!! and thanks sooo much for sharing!! incredible!! love it!! it is really very good and beautiful!! great job!! keep writing!!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from roof35
You have a lovely poem about a tree and a lover's heart. I mention what I think are a couple of typos so you can fix them if you agree. 1) You say, "The turn to brown." I think you mean, "They turn to brown." 2) Next to last line, "A heart that," Perhaps you mean, "A heart's that." I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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You have a lovely poem about a tree and a lover's heart. I mention what I think are a couple of typos so you can fix them if you agree. 1) You say, "The turn to brown." I think you mean, "They turn to brown." 2) Next to last line, "A heart that," Perhaps you mean, "A heart's that." I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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I am so glad you liked it. Thank you for finding the errors.
Comment from royowen
We have some trees here in Tasmania, in the wild south-western corner of that island state, that have lived as much as 2,000 years, I wonder what they've gazed upon in that time. This a beautifully written metaphor for the incidence of life, thought of as important to us, the leaf, but not to God, although it can be. Well done Mia, blessings, Roy
Typo : The(y) turn to brown
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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We have some trees here in Tasmania, in the wild south-western corner of that island state, that have lived as much as 2,000 years, I wonder what they've gazed upon in that time. This a beautifully written metaphor for the incidence of life, thought of as important to us, the leaf, but not to God, although it can be. Well done Mia, blessings, Roy
Typo : The(y) turn to brown
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you for your review. I have fixed the error.
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Well done
Comment from Jacob David Collins
I thought this was a very atmospheric piece. I liked the imagery of the tree moving on, as we have to sometimes do in life when bad things happen. I did notice one typo, you've written: Sad and lonely, the turn to brown. Did you mean they turn to brown? A well written piece. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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I thought this was a very atmospheric piece. I liked the imagery of the tree moving on, as we have to sometimes do in life when bad things happen. I did notice one typo, you've written: Sad and lonely, the turn to brown. Did you mean they turn to brown? A well written piece. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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I have fixed the typo. Thank you for finding it. I am glad you liked my poem.
Comment from Mistydawn
Wow. What a powerful, moving, deep story/poem. It brought tears to my eyes. I love how you described the life of the tree and how you flawlessly compared it's fallen leaves to a broken heart. Your great word choice, description let me feel the pain, the sorrow of the scorned lover, the loss the tree feels over the fallen leaves. Your ending is perfect. It let the reader see there's light past the dark tunnel. Good luck with your contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Wow. What a powerful, moving, deep story/poem. It brought tears to my eyes. I love how you described the life of the tree and how you flawlessly compared it's fallen leaves to a broken heart. Your great word choice, description let me feel the pain, the sorrow of the scorned lover, the loss the tree feels over the fallen leaves. Your ending is perfect. It let the reader see there's light past the dark tunnel. Good luck with your contest.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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OMG! Thank you so much for the six stars. I am so glad that you like it.
