The Sifting Sands
A Retourne poem for Potlatch Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Such a beautiful reflection on life and the times we hold near both in sight and in memory -- too fast they do pass, my lady!! ;) Thanx for sharing your pen, Yvonne! ;) Yvette
P.S. Sorry so far behind -- 'downsizing' is more than a small ordeal!! I'll get there and caught up... soon? ;) :)
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Such a beautiful reflection on life and the times we hold near both in sight and in memory -- too fast they do pass, my lady!! ;) Thanx for sharing your pen, Yvonne! ;) Yvette
P.S. Sorry so far behind -- 'downsizing' is more than a small ordeal!! I'll get there and caught up... soon? ;) :)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Never worry about the time with me. I know how life gets in the way. lol. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Treischel
This is a wonderfully expressive Retourne poem that carries such lucid sentiment about life and time. It reads very well. The repeats transition beautifully to create a classic French version. Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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This is a wonderfully expressive Retourne poem that carries such lucid sentiment about life and time. It reads very well. The repeats transition beautifully to create a classic French version. Well done!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much for this! I appreciate it.
Comment from Bill Schott
This retourne, The Sifting Sands, has the proper formatting and reminds us that the travel through the narrows of the glass are a one way trip for the grains.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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This retourne, The Sifting Sands, has the proper formatting and reminds us that the travel through the narrows of the glass are a one way trip for the grains.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much, Bill!
Comment from Earthlover
This is a well written poem with many lines of truth. I really love the image and the color and style of the font, and it really makes the reader ponder on the meaning of life and how we live it during our short life span.
Thanks so much for putting this together for our enjoyment.
Earthlover
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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This is a well written poem with many lines of truth. I really love the image and the color and style of the font, and it really makes the reader ponder on the meaning of life and how we live it during our short life span.
Thanks so much for putting this together for our enjoyment.
Earthlover
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2020
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Thank you for such a lovely review!
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Happy to review it.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
Very nice descriptions going on here with references to both an hourglass and the way the sands have a 'constant passage' and how time can seem both slow and fast. Here are some other good lines:
what is allotted is a gift,
a life unique, unparalleled.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Very nice descriptions going on here with references to both an hourglass and the way the sands have a 'constant passage' and how time can seem both slow and fast. Here are some other good lines:
what is allotted is a gift,
a life unique, unparalleled.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I'm so glad you liked those lines. Thank you for telling me, and for reviewing this post. 8-)
Comment from Frank Jauregui
Blessings and thank you for the reminder, that life passes quickly, and it is only the good that we do or fail to do that will count for anything in the end. We need to guard against all things that "belie that life is short and swift".
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Blessings and thank you for the reminder, that life passes quickly, and it is only the good that we do or fail to do that will count for anything in the end. We need to guard against all things that "belie that life is short and swift".
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you for this great review.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
A few of us know the sand has almost done it's job. Our time is running out. It's a scary thought to know your time is about up and to wonder just how it will end. I hope I go to bed some night and someone comes to get me. LOL Maybe my Hubby or Mother. Perhaps my guardian Angel. He has taken good care of me. Good Job Yvonne. Like your poem. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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A few of us know the sand has almost done it's job. Our time is running out. It's a scary thought to know your time is about up and to wonder just how it will end. I hope I go to bed some night and someone comes to get me. LOL Maybe my Hubby or Mother. Perhaps my guardian Angel. He has taken good care of me. Good Job Yvonne. Like your poem. Nancy:)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I feel the same as you do. The sands have just about sifted for me. I've always said I want to live to be 102, and I have 25 more years. Think I'll make it? lol
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Good luck. I just want to be coherent and able if I stay to 92 which is what my two sisters have done. LOL
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I bet we make it! lol
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Retourne poem about the sitting sands through the hourglass representing our lifetime on earth that sitting through our fingers and before we know our time is done.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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A very well-written Retourne poem about the sitting sands through the hourglass representing our lifetime on earth that sitting through our fingers and before we know our time is done.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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And it seems so short, doesn't it? Thanks, Sandra.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You did a marvellous job with this form, great meter and end rhymes and I enjoyed the sentiment of passing time and how we should all enjoy and celebrate the time we have without complaint, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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You did a marvellous job with this form, great meter and end rhymes and I enjoyed the sentiment of passing time and how we should all enjoy and celebrate the time we have without complaint, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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I'm so glad. Time seems to fly by, doesn't? I wonder where it all went. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lovely Retourne poem Yvonne about the passing of time. At first one grain at a time then as we age it seems to rush through the bottle neck.
It's not a question of the span,
but how it's spent with care and class, - love those lines, lovely presentation.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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A lovely Retourne poem Yvonne about the passing of time. At first one grain at a time then as we age it seems to rush through the bottle neck.
It's not a question of the span,
but how it's spent with care and class, - love those lines, lovely presentation.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 27-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much. I'm so happy you liked that part, too. Yes, it seems the days, months fly by now. Remember when we were young and six months seemed an eternity? Blink of an eye now. lol
