Comment from cdefan

Excellent

Wow.. this chapter is full of suspense and action! You definitely kept me interested all through the chapter. I really like how you have me rooting for the good guys. Knowing you, I know you'll put a great ending for your characters.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 06-Jul-2020

Thank you, cdefan :)

I really enjoy hearing your reviews. They are inspiring! Hope your holiday was fabulous! Stay tuned my friend.

Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from ngage

Excellent

Another action packed chapter. Love the description you gave on Apollyon's creature. He sounds terrifying. I didn't see anything you need to change. It kept me glued to every word. Great writing as always.

Nate

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thanks Nate :)

Glad this had you entertained. That's music to my ears my friend! Yah... Apollyon is very scary. I wouldn't want to run into him in a dark alley. LOL!

Thanks again!
Stay safe,
Shana :)

Comment from Ellen Boston

Excellent

I like the imagery in your story. It really brings everything together so perfectly.But It has a few incomplete sentences. Other than that it was a great story. Good work. Keep it up.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thank you, Ellen :)

Glad you enjoyed the chapter. I will go over and see where the sentences looked incomplete. Thanks for mentioning that. I appreciate it!

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

It's so good to see Jem praying, and knowing his brother will still be OK. You are very accomplished at these action scenes Shana. The way you put them together is an amazing compilation of imagery. It's so good to go Bach into the old episodes. Are they part of the previous books? Well done dear friend, blessings, Roy
Typo : 1 (blunt) Force. Brute? 2: When (he) saw Electra with a whip...

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thank you, Roy :)

I really want my characters to pray a lot because I think we all need more of that. I certainly do my share. We do need God in our lives and although my books are dark fantasy, it still needs faith. Some have scolded my for adding religion in my series, but I will always keep writing what I believe in.
This is part of a chapter in Sins of Chaos. I appreciate your praise and for catching my typos. You're awesome!

Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 24-Jun-2020

Don?t take any notice of them, I say a lot of prayers, if I see a situation, I mention it to God, He likes the contact.

Comment from Janilou

Excellent

An action packed chapter. I didn't see any errors. I found it a little difficult to follow the story, but that is only because I am jumping in at an advanced chapter! Your descriptions are vivid and the pace is excellent. It moves right along.
Nothing to suggest for corrections.
Well done,
Jan

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thank you, Jan :)

I love to hear the word action packed. Thanks you for mentioning that. There is a lot going on in the story, and yes, this is just a small part. I'm doing some rewriting in my books. It's always nice to get another eye on the story.

Thanks again,
Shana :)

Comment from fm wright

Exceptional

Spectacular fight scenes. Great descriptions of your characters and an ending whose climax leaves one waiting with anticipation for the next chapter.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thank you, Faye :)

So thrilled you liked the fight scenes. This used to be so difficult for me. Also, one of the reasons why I'm going back and rewriting. My first and second book lacks action and fight scenes. A male friend of mine said along time ago, "Why don't you have fight scenes?"
I told him, "Because I don't know how to write them."

I've spent many hours practicing and as time goes by... it gets better.

Thanks again!
Hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from Mistydawn

Exceptional

This was a very intense chapter from beginning to end. It's so well-written, has such great word choice that I could easily picture it in my mind as I read. I'm so glad Jem isn't dead, but Jace is right, the situation isn't looking too good. As always, I look forward to reading more.
Ps. I did tell you that I'm not normally big on sci-fi, supernatural fiction, right? But for for some unexplained reason, your story has me hooked.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thanks Mistydawn :)

Your review just made my stressful day brighter! I appreciate your kind words. You are the second person to tell me I have changed their mind about sci-fi and supernatural genres. Glad you've crossed over to our side. LOL!

You're the best!
Shana :)

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

I like this chapter, plan of actions and endeavour is on for controlling the unbridled Fury, I have enjoyed the fantasy poured Fury activities; well said, well done; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020

Thank you, Alcreator :)

I appreciate your support and kind praise. It puts a happy smile on my face after a gloomy day. You're the best!

Sincerely,
Shana :)