Tumbleweed
Spiritual 5/7/515 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
I learned a new word today: Mammon. Thank you. Your poem is succinct and made me really think. Tumbleweeds are not very well rooted, the first wind tosses them aimlessly about. So does that mean Mammon is bad for the spirit? I hope I got this one right. This is what I got from your poem. Excellent sentiment. Nice photo . Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I learned a new word today: Mammon. Thank you. Your poem is succinct and made me really think. Tumbleweeds are not very well rooted, the first wind tosses them aimlessly about. So does that mean Mammon is bad for the spirit? I hope I got this one right. This is what I got from your poem. Excellent sentiment. Nice photo . Good luck in the contest.
Cindy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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great review zanya
Comment from estory
What I liked about this was the hard hitting brevity of it, the compact intensity, and this wonderful image of money as the tumbleweed. A great, original image; I've never seen it before. But it captures that sense of the transient nature of wealth, the sense that it can come and go on the wind, disappear in a breath of wind. There's no substance to it. estory
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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What I liked about this was the hard hitting brevity of it, the compact intensity, and this wonderful image of money as the tumbleweed. A great, original image; I've never seen it before. But it captures that sense of the transient nature of wealth, the sense that it can come and go on the wind, disappear in a breath of wind. There's no substance to it. estory
Comment Written 25-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your use of the allusion invites the reader to scatter to look up the definition of mammon. This poem is a strong metaphor. I don't think greed and spirituality can co-exist. Well expressed.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Your use of the allusion invites the reader to scatter to look up the definition of mammon. This poem is a strong metaphor. I don't think greed and spirituality can co-exist. Well expressed.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for a great review zanya
Comment from Melodie Michelle
I liked your poem overall however a couple of things came to my attention.
First, the last line of the poem did not feel right to me, in my personal opinion;-(
("Spirit may linger long like
prickly tumbleweed")
To me, prickly tumbleweed is unsavory and it's just not wanted around at all and God's Holy Spirit is far from the same! He is warm and inviting even when He's getting onto us because He does it in love and is not unsavory at all!
Second, I would consider changing the background color from white because that is cold and uninviting. Maybe a warm color;-)
Thanxxx for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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I liked your poem overall however a couple of things came to my attention.
First, the last line of the poem did not feel right to me, in my personal opinion;-(
("Spirit may linger long like
prickly tumbleweed")
To me, prickly tumbleweed is unsavory and it's just not wanted around at all and God's Holy Spirit is far from the same! He is warm and inviting even when He's getting onto us because He does it in love and is not unsavory at all!
Second, I would consider changing the background color from white because that is cold and uninviting. Maybe a warm color;-)
Thanxxx for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
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Comment from BHWatson
The words of this poem feel good to say aloud. I appreciate the word choice and the sentiments. Materialism seems to dominate so much of our lives, as you say, like prickly tumbleweeds. Nicely done,
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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The words of this poem feel good to say aloud. I appreciate the word choice and the sentiments. Materialism seems to dominate so much of our lives, as you say, like prickly tumbleweeds. Nicely done,
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for a most encouraging review zanya
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a strong and powerful entry for the Spiritual writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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This is a strong and powerful entry for the Spiritual writing prompt. It should do well in the contest. I wish you the best of good luck!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for those positive comments zanya
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Unfortunately it is money that makes the world go round and so many chase it and never live long enough to enjoy their life, your words are poignant here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Unfortunately it is money that makes the world go round and so many chase it and never live long enough to enjoy their life, your words are poignant here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for sharing zanya
Comment from lyenochka
Very cool analogy - the desert plant, tumbleweed, goes roaming and everything would be stark and lacking life if materialism is reigning in our lives. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Very cool analogy - the desert plant, tumbleweed, goes roaming and everything would be stark and lacking life if materialism is reigning in our lives. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Great review zanya
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author of your spiritual poem about prickly tumbleweed
Is perfect example of the Holy Spirit will stay with those who have the Holy Spirit within their soul.
Gert
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Hello author of your spiritual poem about prickly tumbleweed
Is perfect example of the Holy Spirit will stay with those who have the Holy Spirit within their soul.
Gert
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
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You are welcome zanya
Gert
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the materialism that most people give more value to than their soul and their spiritual side end up with only prickly tumbleweed rolling around in the desert.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem about the materialism that most people give more value to than their soul and their spiritual side end up with only prickly tumbleweed rolling around in the desert.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks for reviewing zanya
