Grandpa's Watch
Life lessons for a wise man.43 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are engaging, interesting, clear and creative. This is
a beautiful tribute to your Grandpa. The descriptive words this author
used conveys to me he is passing on the tradition of "Grandpa's Watch".
Great poem and message! Have a great week!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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The author's words are engaging, interesting, clear and creative. This is
a beautiful tribute to your Grandpa. The descriptive words this author
used conveys to me he is passing on the tradition of "Grandpa's Watch".
Great poem and message! Have a great week!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Harmony. thank you very much!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a lovely story, and it was nice to know that same story and watch was being shown and told to another generation. I like stories like that. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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That was a lovely story, and it was nice to know that same story and watch was being shown and told to another generation. I like stories like that. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Sandra, thank you! Gifts treasured for a lifetime and generations are special indeed!
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Beautiful image and a very interesting tale in a poem. Yes, life indeed isn't a bed of roses. You've written well.
In this line: "and start his tellin' me that life was not," "his" is redundant, and wouldn't be of great use. Omitting it entirely would make the line read fine to the reader.
This line: "it takes demanding work," should end with a full stop not a comma.
My very best wishes in the contest.
Cheers!
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reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Beautiful image and a very interesting tale in a poem. Yes, life indeed isn't a bed of roses. You've written well.
In this line: "and start his tellin' me that life was not," "his" is redundant, and wouldn't be of great use. Omitting it entirely would make the line read fine to the reader.
This line: "it takes demanding work," should end with a full stop not a comma.
My very best wishes in the contest.
Cheers!
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Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
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Precious Owuamalam, very good catch! I am grateful.
