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Going Out

A 100-word story about sisters

16 total reviews 
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Yes, sometimes as children, when pushed away or told to stay out of the way, excitement and retaliation bubbles within us at any chance of crashing the culprit's party. "Did I say that?" Great job as always, and thanks for sharing. I wish I had a sixer.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
    Thank ou so much, Ric, for the great comments about GOING OUT and the virtual six. Rod
reply by Ric Myworld on 25-Jun-2020
    You are most welcome, RodG. I always enjoy your way with words, my friend!
Comment from Mia Twysted
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Does this mean that she will now get measles? What a cute little story. I like the way the child gets to have the last laugh in the end.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    Thank you, Mia. I am delighted you enjoyed my shortie and appreciate your response. Hopefully, neither sister will get the measles.
Comment from R. Hiland
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Thank heavens I never had a little sister. An older sister was bad enough. Easily inspired an early morning chuckle. Good day starter. Good work.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    I am so pleased I could start your day with a chuckle. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Ha ha ha, this is a fun story and the little girl had the last laugh! I enjoyed the suspense here in your funny tale and I think this could be a winner, a very entertaining 100 word dash, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    Thank you very much, Dolly, for your kind praise and encouraging review.
Comment from Patty Palmer
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What a little brat the little one is being this night feeling quite full of herself! LOL I love how at the end when she tells her sister that her boyfriend called a while ago, but she didn't tell her until just now that he has the measles and can't go out this night! Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    This story almost wrote itself, Patty. I am delighted you enjoyed the Brat?s antics. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Hello, anonymous,

Great entry for the
100 Word Story writing prompt contest. Good word count. I like the picture you used... Beautiful.

A very cute flash fiction about sisters. The little one got her big sister good. Nice job.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    Rockwell?s pictures make it easy for me. Thank you so much for your kind praise of my shortie, Gypsy.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This story of selfishness and narcism is perfectly adapted to the 100 word flash fiction format. A short time window is chosen for the story, so no-one is surprised or disappointed that not much happens. Indeed, it is a good well-rounded effort, until the obvious lie at the end.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much for sharing my short-short, Katherine, and your kind praise. Do you really think the Brat lied to her big sister?
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 23-Jun-2020
    No, I think the swain lied.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2020
    I never thought of that possibility, but it seems plausible.
reply by Katherine M. (k-11) on 24-Jun-2020
    I think the swain got his idea for the lie from the brat - young children are always full of illness and disease. It's an original way of getting rid of a girlfriend that's no longer wanted, and when I wrote obvious, I meant that the girl would realize all that when she came to think about it.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed reading it. Your led up to a great twist at the end. I love the art you chose and how you developed the characters of the sister. Thanks for sharing and best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
    Thank you very much for sharing my story, Jan, and your kind praise. The characters in Rockwell?s painting just spoke to me.
Comment from sibhus
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Great story, and it really fits the picture as well. Has nice little twist too that makes for a great entry for the contest. Impressive that you have create a complete story with good details in just a hundred words.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
    Thank you, sibhus, for your kind praise. Rockwell paintings always tell a story. This one spoke to me.
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
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This is an entertaining read that made us smile. Said he had the measles too funny. What a creative little story. We wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2020

reply by the author on 22-Jun-2020
    Thank you both for sharing my story. I am delighted it made you smile.