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When living is more important than life.3 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A very emotional appeal to masses to not forget those less fortunate ... although it is a bit difficult to discern more from the meaning, I feel there is a bigger picture hidden here... Your sprinkling of rhyme throughout your offering is a great addition... :) Thank you for sharing... :) Yvette
most wont admit --> most won't admit
acquainted with flees! --> acquainted with fleas!
Now you anger at --> Now you're angry at
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A very emotional appeal to masses to not forget those less fortunate ... although it is a bit difficult to discern more from the meaning, I feel there is a bigger picture hidden here... Your sprinkling of rhyme throughout your offering is a great addition... :) Thank you for sharing... :) Yvette
most wont admit --> most won't admit
acquainted with flees! --> acquainted with fleas!
Now you anger at --> Now you're angry at
Comment Written 22-Jun-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This tells what happens and what you experience living is more important than life; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
Typos:
the missed,while the (the missed, while the)
if there voices were (if their voices were)
we know most wont admit (we know most won't admit)
branded like live stock! (branded like livestock!)
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This tells what happens and what you experience living is more important than life; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
Typos:
the missed,while the (the missed, while the)
if there voices were (if their voices were)
we know most wont admit (we know most won't admit)
branded like live stock! (branded like livestock!)
Comment Written 19-Jun-2020
Comment from Earl Corp
I've read and reread this , and I'm ashamed to say I didn't get the gist of your poem. Did you mean to use "fleas" instead of fleas? Your poem rhymed, and I like rhyming poems.
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I've read and reread this , and I'm ashamed to say I didn't get the gist of your poem. Did you mean to use "fleas" instead of fleas? Your poem rhymed, and I like rhyming poems.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2020
