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Celtic Roots

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Autobiography of an oldest son lost in a family

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Comment from Pam (respa)
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-A very good image,
notes, and story, Jim.
-The introduction really sets
the tone for the piece, and you
must have been mortified.
-She had the right idea, but
certainly did use the right approach,
in my opinion. Words are very hurtful,
and you show the result as time goes
on, and you keep feelings inside.
-The inner dialogues were compelling,
as well as your experience at your
mother's grave, and learning how to forgive.
-I am glad your inner child didn't give up, either.
-I also understand your desire to achieve
perfection; I think it sets us up for failure,
for I have come to believe there is no
such thing as perfection.
-I love your ending line, and how you
came to this point in your life.
-This is beautifully written, and I imagine
there are many people who can relate to it.
-I wish I had a 6th star to put on this.


 Comment Written 20-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
    Pam, I do very much appreciate your thorough reading and comments. I will savor the intention of a virtual six-stare review, have a magnificent day.
reply by Pam (respa) on 21-Jun-2020
    You are very welcome, and you have a great day, too.
Comment from sibhus
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A well written piece that really held my interest. I can empathize with Jimmy and salute his discipline to better himself, financially as well as emotional. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 21-Jun-2020
    Sibhus, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this chapter addition. I am extremely grateful.
Comment from Gloria ....
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I wouldn't necessarily call this teacher a mentor, perhaps motivator because she deliberately set out to embarrass you in front of your fellows. It was an ignorant thing for her to say, but sadly that kind of ignorance was more common than it should have been and perhaps that negative attention did motivate a few students and now we've gone too far the other way.

Just a few tense changes along the way in your write, here is an example of one. ... snickers and jeers until Mrs. Judd calls - should be called the children back to order.

This is a fine example of success leading the way and hopefully not at too great an expense.

Excellent biographical non-fiction and I am sure you have many experiences to relay in this challenge of growing up.

Much enjoyed this and keep going. :)

Gloria


 Comment Written 19-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2020
    Gloria, thank you! Judd certainly was not a mentor for me but she was a motivator for certain. I am proud to say I had two teachers in a span of 16 years of education that did become mentors and for them, among a handful of others, I am eternally grateful. I review the tense throughout thank you!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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I read this chapter and I recognize my own childhood in some of your lines, and yet you manage to find the power to forgive and move on. I still fight some of those demons.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
    Iza, my heart wrenches tightly for you but knowing also that you became the wonderful, breathing, gift to all those who have come across your being Iza!
reply by Iza Deleanu on 19-Jun-2020
    Thank you so much, Sir. Have a blessed day
Comment from Melodie Michelle
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What a nice story and such nice characters that intertwine perfectly together;-)

If I had to change anything it would be the background, maybe black would suit it better?

EXCELLENT job! Thanks for sharing;-)
Blessings;-)

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
    Melodie, thank you!
reply by Melodie Michelle on 19-Jun-2020
    ;-)
Comment from roof35
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This is rather tough to read until you get to the end--thank goodness for the end. It is very well written and tells the story emphatically. One can feel the anguish of an underprivileged child.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 19-Jun-2020
    roof35, Life is what it tosses at you, I had a grat many mentors that smoothed the terrain growing up. I wouldn't change one millisecond of the past.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing your struggle with us. As a teacher myself, I am shocked that a teacher would say that in front of the entire class. Your writing technique is very good.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
    Barbara, thank you, I post honest, hard to read at times truths, to help people see that words and actions matter even mores o you young ears. thank you for your validation on this work.
Comment from estory
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I think it's an interesting essay about motivation and social acceptance, the delicate balance within the self between wanting to fit in, being angry at not having what others have, and doing something about it. There's that tremendous pressure from all around us to succeed, on society's terms, on cultural terms. This piece raises all kinds of questions of how motivation takes shape, where it takes us, and how, whether the ends justify the means. Important questions. estory

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
    estroy, every lesson was unmeasurable and every lesson is one I would never exchange, life is all about living forward, only one person can set immovable obstacles that it the person is the reflection in my own mirror..
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
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This is a lovely and strong story chapter of great struggles and overcoming them. I am proud of that child. A boy with his spunk will go far in his life. Perfectly wonderful!

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
    Rebecca, Me Also! Every lesson was unmeasurable and every lesson is one I would never exchange, life is all about living forward, only one person can set immovable obstacles that it the person is the reflection in my own mirror..
reply by thaities, Rebecca V. on 18-Jun-2020
    That was a spectacular piece of writing!
Comment from Jacob David Collins
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Funnily enough I had a teacher called Mrs Judd and I remember her being stern and strict as well. I'm glad that she had a positive impact on your life, even though it may not have seemed like that at the start. I enjoyed reading your piece.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2020


reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
    Jacob, I am also very pleased.