Comment from sibhus

Excellent

Love or stalking, there's such a fine line, ha, ha. Great story, it seems as if it could happen. Your done a great job of creating a complete story with just a few words. Good luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2020

Thank you taking the time to read one of my posts and for the very nice review. I appreciate the detail in your review and thanks for wishing me luck.
It was Love as they are now engaged...lol
Thanks again,
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Comment from Y. M. Roger

Good

A great offering for the contest! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)

Hiding behind my newspaper, but continually stealing looks. --> not a complete sentence...

but I'm not going --> but I wasn't going [wrong verb tense]

my stop too. --> my stop, too.

train and the skies --> train, and the skies

"You're breathtaking." I couldn't avoid it, and put my arm around her and kissed her. --> I couldn't avoid it. "You're breathtaking," I said as I leaned in and kissed her. [suggestion for clarity... feel free to ignore]

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020

I am honored you read one of my posts, and thanks for the nice review. I also appreciate the suggestions and corrections...I write for the fun of it. I was not a good student, but my English teacher would be impressed that I am trying to offer some posts.
Thanks again,
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Comment from January L'Angelle

Excellent

This is a very romantic story. I like this very much. The umbrella was a nice touch. I kept thinking that the story was so short that it wouldn't get much in there but so much was said. It was so well written that it all came together really well. Great job. -January L.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2020

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020

Thank you very much for reading one of my posts and for the very nice review. It is very nice to have a recognized reviewer take the time to read and comment.
Thanks again,
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