Ballad of the Bluebells
Life of bluebells83 total reviews
Comment from ElPoetry001
An excellent metaphor for the mind.
We must refresh our soul by closing our eyes and listening.
That filters the kaleidoscope of distraction.
The sense of smells allows us to enjoy Nature.
The only cost to us is " to pay attention."
See you in the garden.
Stay well.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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An excellent metaphor for the mind.
We must refresh our soul by closing our eyes and listening.
That filters the kaleidoscope of distraction.
The sense of smells allows us to enjoy Nature.
The only cost to us is " to pay attention."
See you in the garden.
Stay well.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much. My church property has such a garden and I find peace there. Linda
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Thank you
Comment from Fonda Little
My favorite part was, "listen carefully and hear tiny bells
playing delicate lullabies down in the dell
as they sway in the breeze
like small waves on the seas", because of the imagery you used! I could visualize it!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Psalm 34:15
New International Version
15 The eyes of the Lord are on the righteous,
and his ears are attentive to their cry;
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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My favorite part was, "listen carefully and hear tiny bells
playing delicate lullabies down in the dell
as they sway in the breeze
like small waves on the seas", because of the imagery you used! I could visualize it!
The Lord led me to this verse after I read this,
Psalm 34:15
New International Version
15 The eyes of the Lord are on the righteous,
and his ears are attentive to their cry;
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Fonda: I am happy that you appreciated this little poem and that it guided you to the Psalm. Keep safe Linda
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Linda, a very lovely poem with strong personification of the bluebells. Well rhymed in aabb form and nice use of simile in 'like small waves on the seas'. I've not seen this type of bluebell in England, but all forms are so lovely. Well done Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Hello Linda, a very lovely poem with strong personification of the bluebells. Well rhymed in aabb form and nice use of simile in 'like small waves on the seas'. I've not seen this type of bluebell in England, but all forms are so lovely. Well done Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2020
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Thank you so much, Dorothy, for reading and for such a positive review. I hope that it brought a minute of peace to you, as was my intent. Keep safe. Linda
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I really like this poem because of the topic, but the last line doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of it somehow. I love the imagery it presents, though. Very nicely done.
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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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I really like this poem because of the topic, but the last line doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of it somehow. I love the imagery it presents, though. Very nicely done.
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Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Amanda: thank you for reading and commenting. Linda
Comment from dragonpoet
Linda,
Perfect artwork chosen to illustrate this poem about the peace that the beauty of nature brings you. You use good metaphor and imagery.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Linda,
Perfect artwork chosen to illustrate this poem about the peace that the beauty of nature brings you. You use good metaphor and imagery.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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dragonpoet, thank you for reading and commenting. Linda
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You're welcome on both accounts, Linda.
Joan
Comment from zanya
A real sense of early Summer evoked here with these stanzas celebrating this tiny but beautiful flower - the bluebell-the first two lines set the tone in a very evocative manner
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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A real sense of early Summer evoked here with these stanzas celebrating this tiny but beautiful flower - the bluebell-the first two lines set the tone in a very evocative manner
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Zanya, thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts with me. Linda
Comment from Melodie Michelle
You have captured the day in the life of a single bluebell! Very descriptive and well thought out as well as being well written;-)
I would capitalize the first word of each paragraph but that's just a personal preference for me!!!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings;-)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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You have captured the day in the life of a single bluebell! Very descriptive and well thought out as well as being well written;-)
I would capitalize the first word of each paragraph but that's just a personal preference for me!!!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings;-)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Melodie: there are no paragraphs in poetry. I write mostly free verse which allows for a free hand without many restraints. When writing a story, of course, I use proper punctuation, etc. Because you prefer the commas does not mean every other writer must use them, too. Keep well and safe. Linda
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Well forgive me for being new and not realizing there are no paragraphs I'm poetry. Unless someone teaches you that, then you don't automatically know it do you?
I'm sure that if you use correct punctuation, you do not have anything to be concerned about them do you?
I never said that I prefer using commas and that others should use them too, just because I prefer them. I prefer them because it keeps everything from running together and I rarely use them, unless they belong.
I get a snippy tone from your reply and I just can't understand why;-) We are fellow poets who may could benefit from constructive criticism. I know I could and I can't take it in good humour because it does nothing but better my poetry. I so thank the poets here on FanStory for being so polite while offering me such wonderful suggestions on how I might could change a thing or two and my poem become more successful.
I appreciate you Linda! Have a wonderful evening;-)
God bless you;-)
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There's one more thing Ms. Linda - I went back to the original review and this was what I'd written. Nothing was mentioned of any commas, so where did that come from on your reply to my review? I was just curious!
Thank you for your time;-)
Comment from phill doran
Hello Linda
Thank you for posting this. A wistful and delightfully personal view of a small part of the canvas of spring.
You lines are odd lengths, (I assume by intention) but I think the reader can read past this and enjoy the rhyme, and the sentiment.
I wish you well with your writing.
Stay safe
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Hello Linda
Thank you for posting this. A wistful and delightfully personal view of a small part of the canvas of spring.
You lines are odd lengths, (I assume by intention) but I think the reader can read past this and enjoy the rhyme, and the sentiment.
I wish you well with your writing.
Stay safe
cheers
phill
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Phill, I do not write highly structured poetry. I prefer free verse because then I can write as the words come to me without too many restrictions. Keep safe and well. Linda
Comment from tfawcus
You have created a very restful atmosphere here with your word choices. The isolated lines stand out for emphasis - particularly effective in the first case. These wildflowers look very much like what are called 'harebells' in England.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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You have created a very restful atmosphere here with your word choices. The isolated lines stand out for emphasis - particularly effective in the first case. These wildflowers look very much like what are called 'harebells' in England.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Tony! The bluebells and harebells may be related! Linda
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This opens a nice story of life of ballads by bluebells; listen tiny bells play lullabies down in the dell as they sway in the breeze and reach for the sky and sleep at night and delight morning as blooming bluebells; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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This opens a nice story of life of ballads by bluebells; listen tiny bells play lullabies down in the dell as they sway in the breeze and reach for the sky and sleep at night and delight morning as blooming bluebells; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thanks for sharing this; keep writing. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2020
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Linda
