Comment from donnadiann

Excellent

Good alliterations for this poem. And nice simplicity tone and cheerfulness also. Photo effective for poem. Good imagery line...wind breeze cools slummer:)

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written it is short and I think more could be added but it is beautiful the presentation enhanced the work well I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from GarthL

Excellent

The desert does know how to take quick advantage out of any shower that may happen to encourage new growth and re-emergence of suspended life. Any wind where there is moisture will always cool things down due to the evaporation effect. Very well written in a syllable perfect succinct 5-7-5 form. LiveLove'n'Peace, Garth

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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reply by GarthL on 01-Apr-2013

Cheers ALD!!!

Comment from mauial

Average

Can't make head or tails out of what you are trying to state with this poem, excdept for the last line. Seems like it is something meant to be understood only by you.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from shy1250

Excellent

Color me ignorant; I just do not understand this one. Read it 6 times, and am as confused now as I was when I started. Would u mind messaging me with what you were trying to communicate? I hate feeling ignorant, and right now feel downright stupid! later and God bless, shy

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from closetpoetjester

Average

Ahem...who pray tell is "dear"??
Intentional punctuation? So, your first line means....what then?
Desert after shower!
Not sure its wise to start with a statement this bold. Might this have been better as the satori.
The middle line doesn't even sound like correct grammar.
I think I understand your point in a roundabout way
ie...the sands feel invigorated after a summer shower and the cheer flows...past the heat beneath the grains and then the third line is clearer with the moist breeze fanning summer..but this is so poorly written, it really makes a mockery of the 5/7/5 format...
I suggest just writing with your own flow and forget syllable count. I really feel this keeps tripping you up.
Along with telling your reviewers how to write reviews in your notes.
How bout YOU concentrate on the poetry writing and WE'LL do the reviews? Right?
It may improve what your posting if you worry LESS about the negative critique you are going to get. If you want to improve and learn anything here, say a prayer to God for a thicker skin and more quality ink in the nib.
Sorry, but I gotta be honest and write nothing BUT an original review.

Thanks

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"Sands after shower!
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat
Wind breeze cools summer."
this is a nice look at the upcoming summer. perfectly stated!
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

The message is clear and to the point. The passion of the writer is felt. The words bring the photo to life as the writer sums up the season using very few words.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from terry drake

Excellent

I see a walk along the beach in this senryu and it was well written. The images remind me of a hot summer day and the refreshing cool shower to wash the sand away.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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Comment from TishaS

Good

Very lovely poem about summer. Unique view of the season. I enjoyed this writing very much. I wish you well in all of your writing.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2013

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