O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Crystal Carey
Hi Alcreator, I feel like there may be to much punctuation in the poem. I pause after each punctuation mark because that is how I was taught to read poetry. Otherwise great job!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Hi Alcreator, I feel like there may be to much punctuation in the poem. I pause after each punctuation mark because that is how I was taught to read poetry. Otherwise great job!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from adewpearl
sands after a shower - I don't understand what the sands refer to - sands in a desert? sands at the beach?
what exactly is flowing?
wind breeze - why both words in a row?
Again, I truly get a feeling that you write from the heart, but I think you need more fluency in English to communicate what you are saying to your reader
Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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sands after a shower - I don't understand what the sands refer to - sands in a desert? sands at the beach?
what exactly is flowing?
wind breeze - why both words in a row?
Again, I truly get a feeling that you write from the heart, but I think you need more fluency in English to communicate what you are saying to your reader
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Deniz22
What think thee of Christ? Is he God's Son? Did He die for your sins? Did He rise from the dead? Do you love Him? He loves you.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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What think thee of Christ? Is he God's Son? Did He die for your sins? Did He rise from the dead? Do you love Him? He loves you.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from MM lives on :)
And yet another I wish you would have entered into a 5-7-5- contest.. Very well written throughout and your imagery was indeed a perfect fit. Thanks so very much for the notes
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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And yet another I wish you would have entered into a 5-7-5- contest.. Very well written throughout and your imagery was indeed a perfect fit. Thanks so very much for the notes
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
After reading these short lines I felt refreshed. Just looking at your picture and the words that match so skilfully gave me enjoyment - a refreshing experience. Thanks for author notes Giddy
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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After reading these short lines I felt refreshed. Just looking at your picture and the words that match so skilfully gave me enjoyment - a refreshing experience. Thanks for author notes Giddy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR REFRESHING REVIEW.
Comment from amahra
The first and last line seem to go to together; the middle line seems a bit off from the other two. Don't know if I'm to make the connection.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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The first and last line seem to go to together; the middle line seems a bit off from the other two. Don't know if I'm to make the connection.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR SUGGESTIVE REVIEW.
Comment from fairy77
That is excellent.It has been a cool summer.I'm still recovering from sitting outside LOL!This is a lovely haiku!well written!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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That is excellent.It has been a cool summer.I'm still recovering from sitting outside LOL!This is a lovely haiku!well written!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR NICE REVIEW.
Comment from Indie Skreet
another average write, but at least only one exclamation mark in this, so getting better!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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another average write, but at least only one exclamation mark in this, so getting better!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from emjaihammond
I enjoyed this poem and the idea expressed within is refreshing. It brings to my mind how fresh and clean things are after a summer rain. I love the imagery. It has a nice flow to it. I enjoyed reading it. Your work is always fun to think through. Congrats!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I enjoyed this poem and the idea expressed within is refreshing. It brings to my mind how fresh and clean things are after a summer rain. I love the imagery. It has a nice flow to it. I enjoyed reading it. Your work is always fun to think through. Congrats!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR REFRESHING REVIEW.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Another beautifully expressed piece of writing here. You give your reader much to ponder. The read flows effortlessly and does not seem forced. Nice work. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Another beautifully expressed piece of writing here. You give your reader much to ponder. The read flows effortlessly and does not seem forced. Nice work. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
