O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Phoenix Rysing
a nice haiku, well written. I enjoyed it. I know haikus are short, but more would have been nice. I like it though...unique
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a nice haiku, well written. I enjoyed it. I know haikus are short, but more would have been nice. I like it though...unique
Comment Written 10-Apr-2006
Comment from BellasTales
Hi AW
I love this form-so challenging. You did a great job getting the meaning across
in such few lines. Well Done!
Bellastales
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Hi AW
I love this form-so challenging. You did a great job getting the meaning across
in such few lines. Well Done!
Bellastales
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from Aleksandramarie
when you write these short forms,
I personally think you should just go
ahhhhhh, when your done reading it,
get a great feel, and then maybe go back in for deeper meaning..
but the ahh, didn't come...and the search for a clear meaning
was deeper than it needed to be...
when the author note is longer than the poem,
the piece needs help,
lovely sounds, just missed a bit for me, I am sure you can fix it..smiles, msp
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when you write these short forms,
I personally think you should just go
ahhhhhh, when your done reading it,
get a great feel, and then maybe go back in for deeper meaning..
but the ahh, didn't come...and the search for a clear meaning
was deeper than it needed to be...
when the author note is longer than the poem,
the piece needs help,
lovely sounds, just missed a bit for me, I am sure you can fix it..smiles, msp
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from ShadowKatmandu
Scent of rain
Freshly fallen
Time to Live again
Without stallin'!
Fresh haiku
Like a brand new day
Written well
In a creative way. :)
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Scent of rain
Freshly fallen
Time to Live again
Without stallin'!
Fresh haiku
Like a brand new day
Written well
In a creative way. :)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from sharon fallis
A very nicely written 'Haiku'. You have used the correct syllable count, and the subject is one that is fresh and alive. Thank you for sharing this nice piece. Sharon
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A very nicely written 'Haiku'. You have used the correct syllable count, and the subject is one that is fresh and alive. Thank you for sharing this nice piece. Sharon
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from celebrity_pets
WellI read a few of your comments and realised what it was that I couldnt put my finger on, and thats that the refreshing feel comes only after the comment,and not from the poetry itself, also I find repetition in a haiku a little over powering, A very obscure write, which IS great, but I also had trouble with that middle line, and the word lives...
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WellI read a few of your comments and realised what it was that I couldnt put my finger on, and thats that the refreshing feel comes only after the comment,and not from the poetry itself, also I find repetition in a haiku a little over powering, A very obscure write, which IS great, but I also had trouble with that middle line, and the word lives...
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from grannyeri
Traditional haiku 5,7,5 syllables you have written here - haiku say so much in so few words. Liked this write, do not need any capitals in a haiku - can all be small letters with no punctuation, as you have here. Have been writing so many myself lately, and learning so much about the newer forms of this kind of poetry.
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Traditional haiku 5,7,5 syllables you have written here - haiku say so much in so few words. Liked this write, do not need any capitals in a haiku - can all be small letters with no punctuation, as you have here. Have been writing so many myself lately, and learning so much about the newer forms of this kind of poetry.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from kkholder
I had a harder time with this one... I do love your stuff, though. Even after reading your notes, I felt a little lost. I feel like we are speaking different languages here...
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I had a harder time with this one... I do love your stuff, though. Even after reading your notes, I felt a little lost. I feel like we are speaking different languages here...
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
Comment from Dabbler
Although I never really understood Haiku I see what you are trying to do here. I had to read it several times but could still not quite catch on. You have good technique in the way you have presented it.
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Although I never really understood Haiku I see what you are trying to do here. I had to read it several times but could still not quite catch on. You have good technique in the way you have presented it.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
Comment from dribble
A wonderfully obscure piece. I have enjoyed haikus since grade school. It seems as though I was unable to wrap my head around the theme completely but certainly view the piece as a work of art. An introspective gem.
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A wonderfully obscure piece. I have enjoyed haikus since grade school. It seems as though I was unable to wrap my head around the theme completely but certainly view the piece as a work of art. An introspective gem.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
