O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from NettieC
Hi Alcreator Writer,
I love that your Author notes are longer than your poem!
Even gentle breezes can sweep away the summer heat bringing relief of all kinds. You do the haiku so well.
Thank you
love Nettie
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Hi Alcreator Writer,
I love that your Author notes are longer than your poem!
Even gentle breezes can sweep away the summer heat bringing relief of all kinds. You do the haiku so well.
Thank you
love Nettie
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from AlvinTEthington
a really good haiku. you have good nature imagery in the first two lines, and you manage to do what few haiku writers can do--put the break (i. e. the semicolon) in the middle of the second line. The poem divides nicely into a phrase about nature (the first two lines) and a satori (a moment of insight) in the last line. Nice use of alliteration, especially in the beginning silibants of the first line, and in "flow fresh". Excellent work.
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a really good haiku. you have good nature imagery in the first two lines, and you manage to do what few haiku writers can do--put the break (i. e. the semicolon) in the middle of the second line. The poem divides nicely into a phrase about nature (the first two lines) and a satori (a moment of insight) in the last line. Nice use of alliteration, especially in the beginning silibants of the first line, and in "flow fresh". Excellent work.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from GRSaine
Hi ALCREATOR WRITER,
Your haiku,"Summer" tells in a very cute manner, how wonderful the simple things in life can be. Nothing more wonderful than a shower and a nice cool breeze to make a day complete.
GRSaine
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Hi ALCREATOR WRITER,
Your haiku,"Summer" tells in a very cute manner, how wonderful the simple things in life can be. Nothing more wonderful than a shower and a nice cool breeze to make a day complete.
GRSaine
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Georgina Lenty
It doesn't get much simpler than the haiku format! I liked your choice of wording here - nice and easy read! Very well written!
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It doesn't get much simpler than the haiku format! I liked your choice of wording here - nice and easy read! Very well written!
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from drivenbackward
I never had such a short poem make me think so much. I'm on the verge of completely figuring out what you're trying to say. I enjoyed the approach.
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I never had such a short poem make me think so much. I'm on the verge of completely figuring out what you're trying to say. I enjoyed the approach.
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Swtdreamz
Sands after shower!- sands...hmmm *thinking*
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat- it always smells fresh after a shower
Wind breeze cools summer. - eh...not if it's a hot breeze
good job
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Sands after shower!- sands...hmmm *thinking*
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat- it always smells fresh after a shower
Wind breeze cools summer. - eh...not if it's a hot breeze
good job
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Irina
Very lovely haiku!
My friend lives in the desert; and I have many wonderful pictures from there. I know what the desert summer means! You show it by the best way!
Thank you for such a warm gift!
Irina
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Very lovely haiku!
My friend lives in the desert; and I have many wonderful pictures from there. I know what the desert summer means! You show it by the best way!
Thank you for such a warm gift!
Irina
Comment Written 29-May-2006
Comment from Snitz
A rather revealing writ you have here. I am not an avid Haiku fan... but I do like this one. It reveals the beauty that can be brought to a dessert and calm that is brought to the sands that oft swirl with the dessert winds. Your count was great as always, you put to words so much with so little.. Good job! Snitz
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A rather revealing writ you have here. I am not an avid Haiku fan... but I do like this one. It reveals the beauty that can be brought to a dessert and calm that is brought to the sands that oft swirl with the dessert winds. Your count was great as always, you put to words so much with so little.. Good job! Snitz
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from tuskantail
Well chosen words to describe so much in so few. You describe a summer shower so well. I think it takes a talented poet to attempt a Haiku and succeed.
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Well chosen words to describe so much in so few. You describe a summer shower so well. I think it takes a talented poet to attempt a Haiku and succeed.
Comment Written 28-May-2006
Comment from Emily_69
Great haiku for my favorite season. I like you use of vivid imagery and still keeping that "heat" of the season. I truly enjoyed reading your piece.
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Great haiku for my favorite season. I like you use of vivid imagery and still keeping that "heat" of the season. I truly enjoyed reading your piece.
Comment Written 28-May-2006
