O My God and Mother Nature!
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Summer"Appreciation of God and Mother Nature
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Comment from volunteer angel
Your picture and Haiku about it are fine. I can see the action in this piece with the sand being blown by the rain and the cool breeze that follows. I wish I had some of that cool breeze here in Florida. Nice job! V.A.
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Your picture and Haiku about it are fine. I can see the action in this piece with the sand being blown by the rain and the cool breeze that follows. I wish I had some of that cool breeze here in Florida. Nice job! V.A.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from texyankeefan
Once again, great rendition of the traditional form.
I especially like the second line:
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat
Since I live in an area with a 2 year drought underway, I would love to be cheered, flow fresh, and get past the heat by a shower.
I liked the picture accompanying this since it showed the contrast between the sands and the cool, refreshing water.
Good job.
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Once again, great rendition of the traditional form.
I especially like the second line:
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat
Since I live in an area with a 2 year drought underway, I would love to be cheered, flow fresh, and get past the heat by a shower.
I liked the picture accompanying this since it showed the contrast between the sands and the cool, refreshing water.
Good job.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from mslink1
Rain is a life giving element that man cannot live without. It cools the sand that lies thirstily in the heat. It refills the dry ponds and is a source of life to all nature. Enjoyed the well penned poem A.W., Mary
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Rain is a life giving element that man cannot live without. It cools the sand that lies thirstily in the heat. It refills the dry ponds and is a source of life to all nature. Enjoyed the well penned poem A.W., Mary
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from E. W. Crowe
Really dig those Haiku's, huh? The only problem I have with this one is I read another one of yours first. It was really good. The one with the line "Rich joys, Poor suffers" It was fantastic and I came in expecting that. This one confused me some. Thanks for sharing.
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Really dig those Haiku's, huh? The only problem I have with this one is I read another one of yours first. It was really good. The one with the line "Rich joys, Poor suffers" It was fantastic and I came in expecting that. This one confused me some. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from cheyennewy
This is an outstanding haiku! Your count is spot on and it is about nature, which I believe what haiku should be about. I love the art work you chose for this write...it is perfect and with so many to choose from you did a good job. Well done....cheyenne
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This is an outstanding haiku! Your count is spot on and it is about nature, which I believe what haiku should be about. I love the art work you chose for this write...it is perfect and with so many to choose from you did a good job. Well done....cheyenne
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from Wendyanne
I understand what you are trying to say in this delightful haiku although I think the way that you word it is different to the way that someone who is fluent in English would word it if you know what I mean. Well done though
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I understand what you are trying to say in this delightful haiku although I think the way that you word it is different to the way that someone who is fluent in English would word it if you know what I mean. Well done though
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from goodnewspraise1
This was a good use of the haiku form and followed the imagery of the artwork attached to it. The phrasing was not quite as eloquent as your "Winter" haiku, but it still worked well enough.
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This was a good use of the haiku form and followed the imagery of the artwork attached to it. The phrasing was not quite as eloquent as your "Winter" haiku, but it still worked well enough.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from jwsteele
Another excellent write. Haiku is facinating and you capture the essence of this great art form with command!
The last line is the best imo.
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Another excellent write. Haiku is facinating and you capture the essence of this great art form with command!
The last line is the best imo.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from Sheila Bruce
Again you lose me on the second line. Perhaps the problem is just a translation issue, but I don't understand it -- I'm sorry. The last line is very good however, and is something I can easily imagine.
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Again you lose me on the second line. Perhaps the problem is just a translation issue, but I don't understand it -- I'm sorry. The last line is very good however, and is something I can easily imagine.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from terryangelo
Your verse reminds me of seeing tadpoles in the desert when I go hiking out west. Also, I loved the artwork you chose. Perfect combination!
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Your verse reminds me of seeing tadpoles in the desert when I go hiking out west. Also, I loved the artwork you chose. Perfect combination!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
