Comment from royowen

Excellent

I don't understand the sands after the showers, nicely written 5/7/5 my friend, showers certainly ref Refresh the ground and they do give life to the parched ground and flowers, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2021

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I'm not sure what "sands after shower" mean exactly? You might be saying that a breeze cools us on a summer's day here, I hope I deciphered your words correctly, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2021

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

Very nice. I also really liked the accompanying notes and your take on the structure of the poem. Well done. No wonder you are a well-published author.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2021

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Sands after shower!
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat
Wind breeze cools summer.

This is a cool write for your own style Al. one that tries to mimic the 5/7/5.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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Comment from SFattempt

Excellent

Fresh, lively, Cheerful. brings back the summer with all its freshness and breeze.
Short enough to give a person a few minutes of fresh read! Better grab a cocktail...

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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Comment from JohnDope

Good

I like this piece solely on the use of nature, as I too have seen myself using it more in my work. Correct syllable count. Notes were necessary.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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Comment from mizzkris20

Excellent

I can't wait until summer and your poem reminds me why. I'd do anything to have the sun beaming on my skin. It's freezing where I live. Great poem

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your words appeal to the senses of the reader. The feeling of the coolness of the breeze after the rain comes through strongly and reminds the reader of summer.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Perhaps, I'm seeing a difference in the aspects of the seasons between where you live and where I live. I can't discredit the opinions, though, here, summer is considered the 'hot' time, not a cooling one. Once again, for form, the five seven five syllable count is correct and could be considered haiku.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Sands after shower!
Cheer lives, flow fresh dear; past heat
Wind breeze cools summer.

I liked the last line. Where I live, a breeze is welcome to cool the summer heat.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2013

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