O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from National Scholar
This Haiku is exceptional at each point of writing. The glimpses of winter are symbolic and realistic. There is a nice contrast. It has a very nice human concern. My good wishes ever to you. Let us see an All Time Best at FS. This deserves for six stars but I cannot being a standard member.
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This Haiku is exceptional at each point of writing. The glimpses of winter are symbolic and realistic. There is a nice contrast. It has a very nice human concern. My good wishes ever to you. Let us see an All Time Best at FS. This deserves for six stars but I cannot being a standard member.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2006
Comment from One Tooth Smile
You know, it's just my personal preference. But, I think haiku is much more powerful and profound when it DOESN'T rhyme. Having said that, this is an interesting twist on winter and followed the syllabic form well.
Thanks for sharing, One Tooth :)"
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You know, it's just my personal preference. But, I think haiku is much more powerful and profound when it DOESN'T rhyme. Having said that, this is an interesting twist on winter and followed the syllabic form well.
Thanks for sharing, One Tooth :)"
Comment Written 10-Apr-2006
Comment from celebrity_pets
wow you certainly covered a heck of a lot of ground in this haiku...and rhymed it too!!! one of the best I've read...OK i dont like haikus much for they leave me wanting in most cases.. but yours...left me wondering and thats a good thing! love to "feel bright sight"..you offer more with those three simple words than most do in a lengthy address...well done:)
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wow you certainly covered a heck of a lot of ground in this haiku...and rhymed it too!!! one of the best I've read...OK i dont like haikus much for they leave me wanting in most cases.. but yours...left me wondering and thats a good thing! love to "feel bright sight"..you offer more with those three simple words than most do in a lengthy address...well done:)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from ShadowKatmandu
Winter is going
You wrote about this I see
Soon it is over
Both night and season
Are filled with cold sights and sounds
Drink heavier now. :p
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Winter is going
You wrote about this I see
Soon it is over
Both night and season
Are filled with cold sights and sounds
Drink heavier now. :p
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from grannyeri
I don't think haiku usually rhyme, so this is a very unusual haiku you have written. Because this verse deals with people, it could also be called a senryu - which deals with human nature. This is traditional haiku, 5,7,5; modern haiku have much less syllables, maybe up to only 12 syllables. It is said that haiku should show, not tell something. Some things I have learned lately writing my own haiku for contests on other sites. If I am incorrect about this, please let me know.
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I don't think haiku usually rhyme, so this is a very unusual haiku you have written. Because this verse deals with people, it could also be called a senryu - which deals with human nature. This is traditional haiku, 5,7,5; modern haiku have much less syllables, maybe up to only 12 syllables. It is said that haiku should show, not tell something. Some things I have learned lately writing my own haiku for contests on other sites. If I am incorrect about this, please let me know.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2006
Comment from darlene snyder
Sorry, I didn't get it. I liked the first line...but I couldn't get the connection with the rest of the poem. It did rhyme though and I liked the style and your color choices on the layout.
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Sorry, I didn't get it. I liked the first line...but I couldn't get the connection with the rest of the poem. It did rhyme though and I liked the style and your color choices on the layout.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
Comment from shelley kaye
uhh okay the first line i get
but what does the second and third line have to do with winter?
sorry but i just can't see the connection :-(
thanx for sharing though :-)
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uhh okay the first line i get
but what does the second and third line have to do with winter?
sorry but i just can't see the connection :-(
thanx for sharing though :-)
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
Comment from Missy01
This goes to show just how much can be said and how vivid the picture can become if you choose the right words to draw your picture.
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This goes to show just how much can be said and how vivid the picture can become if you choose the right words to draw your picture.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
Comment from mslink1
Love your choice of colors...bright and cheerful. These few words, speaks volumes. I love the contrast between the rich and poor. Great poem, Alcreator Writer
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Love your choice of colors...bright and cheerful. These few words, speaks volumes. I love the contrast between the rich and poor. Great poem, Alcreator Writer
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
Comment from Gert sherwood
Dear Alcreator,
I really liked this Haiku . I am glad winter is finally leaving here in Vermont, so we can feel the warmth of spring. Good write.
Have a good weekend
Gert sherwood
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Dear Alcreator,
I really liked this Haiku . I am glad winter is finally leaving here in Vermont, so we can feel the warmth of spring. Good write.
Have a good weekend
Gert sherwood
Comment Written 08-Apr-2006
