O My God and Mother Nature!
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Winter"Appreciation of God and Mother Nature
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Comment from mayflowerbg
Oh, you can be sure I understand the meaning of this rich-poor contrast! I feel it as I feel the alliteration of the 's' sound - the hissing of a snake - that goes on from the first line, stopping for a while and then coming back in the last word. It takes you by the throat just as poverty does!
Now, what about this:
"Rich writes, poor reviews"?
As a new fanstorian I don't know whom to ask if I can use my member dollars for releasing my poetry. Because I don't have a credit card!
Oh, you can be sure I understand the meaning of this rich-poor contrast! I feel it as I feel the alliteration of the 's' sound - the hissing of a snake - that goes on from the first line, stopping for a while and then coming back in the last word. It takes you by the throat just as poverty does!
Now, what about this:
"Rich writes, poor reviews"?
As a new fanstorian I don't know whom to ask if I can use my member dollars for releasing my poetry. Because I don't have a credit card!
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Adora Bayles
Whaddaya mean snow bites souls? I love snow! I like to walk in it while it collects on my safety glasses. And I never pay for my own beer. I was born in the Sunshine state. Maybe that's why I love snow. I don't have much money. But I am richer than the rich, not poor at all. See the contrast?
Adora
Whaddaya mean snow bites souls? I love snow! I like to walk in it while it collects on my safety glasses. And I never pay for my own beer. I was born in the Sunshine state. Maybe that's why I love snow. I don't have much money. But I am richer than the rich, not poor at all. See the contrast?
Adora
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from Dear Essay Reviewer
This Haiku is traditional.
This has 5-7-5 syllable counts.
The poet clearly makes a distinction of passing or enjoying the season.
The poet shows how the rich enjoys both nights and days.
The poor cannot enjoy either and suffer.
This is a nice work with clear message.
This Haiku is traditional.
This has 5-7-5 syllable counts.
The poet clearly makes a distinction of passing or enjoying the season.
The poet shows how the rich enjoys both nights and days.
The poor cannot enjoy either and suffer.
This is a nice work with clear message.
Comment Written 14-May-2006
Comment from tuskantail
As I have just written in someone else's 'Haiku', don't understand the form, but in yours at least I understood the message, which is more than I can say for some. Seems you have done it right from what I've learnt, Haiku wise.
As I have just written in someone else's 'Haiku', don't understand the form, but in yours at least I understood the message, which is more than I can say for some. Seems you have done it right from what I've learnt, Haiku wise.
Comment Written 13-May-2006
Comment from WorstPoetic Reviewer
This Haiku is perfect and very comprehensive with a very common contrast as to how winter is enjoyed by the rich and how the poor suffer many ways. It covers huge matter in a very short space. Excellent work indeed, it is so enjoying and pleasing to read.
This Haiku is perfect and very comprehensive with a very common contrast as to how winter is enjoyed by the rich and how the poor suffer many ways. It covers huge matter in a very short space. Excellent work indeed, it is so enjoying and pleasing to read.
Comment Written 13-May-2006
Comment from CaseyMezera
Hello again,
i wanted to make up for my last reveiw of yours.
This one I like becasue of the last line. to me it speaks truth and description.
Thanks,
Ax
Hello again,
i wanted to make up for my last reveiw of yours.
This one I like becasue of the last line. to me it speaks truth and description.
Thanks,
Ax
Comment Written 12-May-2006
Comment from joelh605
Hi Al,
Hmmm.
Line 1 evokes the classic winter feeling; biting cold that chills you clear to the definition of who you are.
Line 2: a bright winter day, sun unimpeded by clouds, light rebounding and multiplying off everything white or icy. Strong comparison to Line 1.
Line 3? - requires prior point of view to leap in and claim this turf for a sense of social conscience, - huh?.
OK, you believe what you wrote with full force, but that's my own reaction. "Rich wins, poor suffers" is from some other topical universe. Do you want the suffering to be winter? - then where did summer come in (Rich wins)? Not ready to buy this, my friend; two lines superlative, one that just falls flat.
Regards, Gil.
Hi Al,
Hmmm.
Line 1 evokes the classic winter feeling; biting cold that chills you clear to the definition of who you are.
Line 2: a bright winter day, sun unimpeded by clouds, light rebounding and multiplying off everything white or icy. Strong comparison to Line 1.
Line 3? - requires prior point of view to leap in and claim this turf for a sense of social conscience, - huh?.
OK, you believe what you wrote with full force, but that's my own reaction. "Rich wins, poor suffers" is from some other topical universe. Do you want the suffering to be winter? - then where did summer come in (Rich wins)? Not ready to buy this, my friend; two lines superlative, one that just falls flat.
Regards, Gil.
Comment Written 12-May-2006
Comment from Doreen Dulally
Professional and rejects amateur reviews<<<
but head bowed ..forgive please this amateur
buttttttttttttttttttt I need you points
And you know deep down you would miss this ignorant person
I must realy make your chest puff out [smiles]
And I spose I admire you really
Laffin I did all that grovaling for nothing phtttttt .
Professional and rejects amateur reviews<<<
but head bowed ..forgive please this amateur
buttttttttttttttttttt I need you points
And you know deep down you would miss this ignorant person
I must realy make your chest puff out [smiles]
And I spose I admire you really
Laffin I did all that grovaling for nothing phtttttt .
Comment Written 11-May-2006
Comment from Buckshot99
I think you have caught the essence of winter from the freezing nights to the incredibly bright snowblind days. At the same time you have shown that the haves do not suffer as much as the have nots. Very good.
I think you have caught the essence of winter from the freezing nights to the incredibly bright snowblind days. At the same time you have shown that the haves do not suffer as much as the have nots. Very good.
Comment Written 11-May-2006
Comment from Frank Furter
being new i sturggle to feel anything from such short words but if i re read i felt what i think i should feel and i was nearly shivering ty for sharing your work
being new i sturggle to feel anything from such short words but if i re read i felt what i think i should feel and i was nearly shivering ty for sharing your work
Comment Written 11-May-2006