Comment from MikeAG

Excellent

Excellent, and well written. Strong imagary, good use of words, and yes, the contrasts are vivid and strong. The pacing is good.

Keep it up.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Babette Francis

Excellent

This is a real unique piece, and well written.
I understand that -- Snow chills, bites night souls -- means =poor suffers
and
Cheers, feels bright sight in daylight --- means= Rich joys
but I was wondering if it would be more meaningful if you had wrote it like....

Snow chills, bites night souls
Cheers, feels bright sight in daylight
Poor suffers, rich joys!

Just a thought.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from sandramarie

Excellent

You've done it again, AL. You certainly have mastered the Haiku. I had been complaining about the heat and humidity, but you reminded me that our Maine winter will be here in no time. The artwork is beautiful and enhances your words quite well.

Thanks for sharing.

Sandy

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Sheila Bruce

Good

I adored the imagery in the first line, but you sort of lost me in the second -- only to re-capture me in the third. I might suggest making the second line's meaning a bit more obvious, though I THINK I know what you are saying, I'm not sure.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from justswf

Excellent

This is a very deep piece...Says a lot without saying hardly anything...As any good Haiku should...I love the artwork provided...It sets the scene and feeds to the imagery and flow...I really enjoyed this piece and it should do well for you...

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from BeautysMessenger

Excellent

Nicely done. I like your unique subject verb combinations.

This a particularly good Haiku AlCreator. You're the man when it comes to that form.

The two subject verb combinations at the end are the ones I like in particular.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

Excellent Haiku, since I can't write them I enjoy others
and yours is very good. In a few words you described
winter. The picture was a good choice as well. In this
80 degree weather reading your little poem was very
refreshing.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Hetty

Excellent

Hi Alcreator,

An excellent little haiku - your brevity of words seems to excel in this form.
Not a hundred per cent about the grammar on the last line but hell - who cares? The message is there!

Excellent!
Hetty

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from Nescher Pyscher

Good

Hmm.

This one was a bit of a mouthful, I think.

The overuse of puralization "cheers, bites, souls" made me think that some of it needed a possessive 's'. It made for a bit of a confusing read, part way through.

I'm not sure I got it, but who'm I to judge?

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006

Comment from trailblazer101

Excellent

Your poem reminded me of a night when I was hitch-hiking in the winter. Damn near died from frostbite when no one was traveling.

Snow chills, bites night souls

Few words but working around the pix it stands out.
I liked it.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2006