O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from LateBloomer
Once again our Author shows off his talents.
He says a "mouthful" in only a few lines. I
particularly liked the last line:
"Rich joys, poor suffers!" -- Good contrasts
Regards, LateBloomer
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Once again our Author shows off his talents.
He says a "mouthful" in only a few lines. I
particularly liked the last line:
"Rich joys, poor suffers!" -- Good contrasts
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from ticklechain
volumes spoken with
magical words, vibrant sounds
words of joy abound
You did a nice job with this one. I really enjoyed reading it.
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volumes spoken with
magical words, vibrant sounds
words of joy abound
You did a nice job with this one. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from Mountainstar2
Very good Poem...
Short, which in it's form has alot to say anyway...
Nature is one of my favorites and is always entertaining and Interesting to me.
Keep up your Writing...
Good Luck at the top, I'm sure you will go far with your Work in the Future...
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Very good Poem...
Short, which in it's form has alot to say anyway...
Nature is one of my favorites and is always entertaining and Interesting to me.
Keep up your Writing...
Good Luck at the top, I'm sure you will go far with your Work in the Future...
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from MikeSamford
Winter by ALCREATOR WRITER
This is real nice Writer, and I don't care but i think a Haiku is not suppose to have references to people like suffers, but I am no expert on Japanese poetry. What I know is that it comes to life, a image I find of a very cold young man in a swimming suite.
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Winter by ALCREATOR WRITER
This is real nice Writer, and I don't care but i think a Haiku is not suppose to have references to people like suffers, but I am no expert on Japanese poetry. What I know is that it comes to life, a image I find of a very cold young man in a swimming suite.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from Twigs13
Well I must admit I know nothing about Haiku (traditional or otherwise) your authors note helped me understand a bit more. I like it's simplicity and the meaning of each line comes through well with the required syllable count. Bottom line is it pleased me to read and learn from your work. Thank you!
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Well I must admit I know nothing about Haiku (traditional or otherwise) your authors note helped me understand a bit more. I like it's simplicity and the meaning of each line comes through well with the required syllable count. Bottom line is it pleased me to read and learn from your work. Thank you!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from Kingsland
I don't usually review these types of poems
But I really liked this one
I have no suggestions for this well written verse
this was my pleasure to read and review... John
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I don't usually review these types of poems
But I really liked this one
I have no suggestions for this well written verse
this was my pleasure to read and review... John
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from pbearse
As in everything the rich enjoy while the poor always suffer. One has the fireplace and champagne, while another has a street vent and a bottle of wine. One got better with insurance while one got sicker without. Love the picture
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As in everything the rich enjoy while the poor always suffer. One has the fireplace and champagne, while another has a street vent and a bottle of wine. One got better with insurance while one got sicker without. Love the picture
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from chillynduned
al, if i had a sixth star, buddy, i'd give it to ya... this poem, for me, is the best yet i've read on fanstory. You offer such a great and intense feeling of symbology, and a lot is there, it's just not written. Excellent job, thanks for recommending it to me.
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al, if i had a sixth star, buddy, i'd give it to ya... this poem, for me, is the best yet i've read on fanstory. You offer such a great and intense feeling of symbology, and a lot is there, it's just not written. Excellent job, thanks for recommending it to me.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from starkat
Hi, Excellent winter picture to capture the flavor of your Haiku. I feel the snow chilling all that it covers including my soul. At night the chill can take over and permeate the essence of living beings. The bite can be viscious and freezes its memory into the soul. Daylight will bring welcome happy feelings even though it may still be bitterly cold. Rich.. those elements of the soul and environment that have completely adapted to the Winter season can have much joy. The poor are not so lucky and may even freeze to death after enduring much suffering. The actual cause of joy and suffering means nothing to Winter.. which just exists for its own sake. Enjoyed your thought provoking piece. Cheers. :-)
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Hi, Excellent winter picture to capture the flavor of your Haiku. I feel the snow chilling all that it covers including my soul. At night the chill can take over and permeate the essence of living beings. The bite can be viscious and freezes its memory into the soul. Daylight will bring welcome happy feelings even though it may still be bitterly cold. Rich.. those elements of the soul and environment that have completely adapted to the Winter season can have much joy. The poor are not so lucky and may even freeze to death after enduring much suffering. The actual cause of joy and suffering means nothing to Winter.. which just exists for its own sake. Enjoyed your thought provoking piece. Cheers. :-)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
Comment from terryangelo
As always, a thought-provoking piece packed into a little package! I loved the first line. It grabs the reader with its cold imagery. Wonderful haiku.
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As always, a thought-provoking piece packed into a little package! I loved the first line. It grabs the reader with its cold imagery. Wonderful haiku.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2006
