O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from EMB
Nice. You don't see many Haiku running around. I must admit, the message/meaning eludes me. I kinda sorta get it when I think about it as an afterthought, but that's the beauty of it as well: I can at least develop theories. It's not totally out there.
It's definitely one of those though provokers!
For that, I say good job.
Ed
Nice. You don't see many Haiku running around. I must admit, the message/meaning eludes me. I kinda sorta get it when I think about it as an afterthought, but that's the beauty of it as well: I can at least develop theories. It's not totally out there.
It's definitely one of those though provokers!
For that, I say good job.
Ed
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from marion
Hi AWriter
I love it, one of my favourite forms.
Word perfect.
Photo-art excellent , falling straight into the words.
I read it four times!
marion
Hi AWriter
I love it, one of my favourite forms.
Word perfect.
Photo-art excellent , falling straight into the words.
I read it four times!
marion
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from Lucious Thudthocker
I liked this line, "Snow chills, bites night souls". It pulled me in for the ride, but "Rich joys, poor suffers" drops the floor out from under me. The brevity of the Haiku form is, to me, to reduce one thought or vision to but a few controlled syllables. I struggle to see the what is being said here. The commas are distracting.
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I liked this line, "Snow chills, bites night souls". It pulled me in for the ride, but "Rich joys, poor suffers" drops the floor out from under me. The brevity of the Haiku form is, to me, to reduce one thought or vision to but a few controlled syllables. I struggle to see the what is being said here. The commas are distracting.
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Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from E. W. Crowe
I really liked the contrasting differences especially in the last line. You leave it open as well for interpretation for your readers. What does he mean rich joys, poor suffers? For me it meant that during winter you receive rich joys and the poor times suffer, they aren't existing. Good Hiaku.
I really liked the contrasting differences especially in the last line. You leave it open as well for interpretation for your readers. What does he mean rich joys, poor suffers? For me it meant that during winter you receive rich joys and the poor times suffer, they aren't existing. Good Hiaku.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from Donaya Haymond
A lovely haiku. I hadn't known before that activation, materialization, and tradition were the three phases of haiku, so you have educated as well as diverted me.
A lovely haiku. I hadn't known before that activation, materialization, and tradition were the three phases of haiku, so you have educated as well as diverted me.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from rl dubour
Winter---this is a perfect Haiku style that has been composed, the syllable count is perfect bottom line is an excellent piece of work, great job, ron
Winter---this is a perfect Haiku style that has been composed, the syllable count is perfect bottom line is an excellent piece of work, great job, ron
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from goodnewspraise1
This was a very sound use of tactile imagery to produce a complete picture through haiku format. It matched the accompanying artwork perfectly. Thank you for sharing this work.
This was a very sound use of tactile imagery to produce a complete picture through haiku format. It matched the accompanying artwork perfectly. Thank you for sharing this work.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from volunteer angel
I can see how the poor would suffer in the winter. No money to pay the heating bill.
Yet the rich wouldn't mind the cold at all. The homeless would be the worst off in this kind of chill. "Cheers, feels bright sight in daylight", was a little confusing to me. I guess you mean that to some the bright daylight isn't so bad with the cold weather. Nice Haiku. V.A.
I can see how the poor would suffer in the winter. No money to pay the heating bill.
Yet the rich wouldn't mind the cold at all. The homeless would be the worst off in this kind of chill. "Cheers, feels bright sight in daylight", was a little confusing to me. I guess you mean that to some the bright daylight isn't so bad with the cold weather. Nice Haiku. V.A.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
Hi Alcreative writer
Have to say that your haiku or should it be a senyru just didn't really work for me at all.
Thought the first line worked, as for the second-well it confused me completely.
the third line, in my opinion(what do i know anyway), was far too simplistic.
No offense intented.
Best wishes Peter
Hi Alcreative writer
Have to say that your haiku or should it be a senyru just didn't really work for me at all.
Thought the first line worked, as for the second-well it confused me completely.
the third line, in my opinion(what do i know anyway), was far too simplistic.
No offense intented.
Best wishes Peter
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006
Comment from empress2k
I loved this!!! This is my kind of poetry. Minimalistic and impactful like a cut from a butcher's knife. If you ever get a chance, take a look at my poems. I think you will appreciate them as well.
I loved this!!! This is my kind of poetry. Minimalistic and impactful like a cut from a butcher's knife. If you ever get a chance, take a look at my poems. I think you will appreciate them as well.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2006