O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from A L Horan
I had to read this a few times. Very powerful, especially the last line. This doesn't need anything else, there is a lot of debt in your three lines.
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I had to read this a few times. Very powerful, especially the last line. This doesn't need anything else, there is a lot of debt in your three lines.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2006
Comment from nkmwriter
"Souls" and "suffers" should be swapped. It will fit in the point brought out in the poem. Do souls suffer? Even poor may have the heart to enjoy the beauty. the poem must define what it is aiming at.
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"Souls" and "suffers" should be swapped. It will fit in the point brought out in the poem. Do souls suffer? Even poor may have the heart to enjoy the beauty. the poem must define what it is aiming at.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2006
Comment from zhaphyr
Truly well done haiku. I like your contrasts and impressions compressed into such a small amoung of syllables. Keep it up.
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Truly well done haiku. I like your contrasts and impressions compressed into such a small amoung of syllables. Keep it up.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2006
Comment from HappyB8888
Hey Al!! Great li'l short short! Works well with the art too! Much can be said in few words and you certainly accomplished this! Thanks for sharing it!
That Happy Chica,
Marcia Ellen
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Hey Al!! Great li'l short short! Works well with the art too! Much can be said in few words and you certainly accomplished this! Thanks for sharing it!
That Happy Chica,
Marcia Ellen
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from Eternal Muse
Great job in these three lines. Complimented by a picture, this work creates a powerful image of winter... I even feel the chill when I read these words. You have managed to capture this season exceptionally well in just three lines.
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Great job in these three lines. Complimented by a picture, this work creates a powerful image of winter... I even feel the chill when I read these words. You have managed to capture this season exceptionally well in just three lines.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from thedarkhorse
Snow chills, bites night souls
Cheers, feels bright sight in daylight
Rich joys, poor suffers!
I really cant see what it is you are contrasting, this is very confusing and lacks somethin, seems incomplete.
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Snow chills, bites night souls
Cheers, feels bright sight in daylight
Rich joys, poor suffers!
I really cant see what it is you are contrasting, this is very confusing and lacks somethin, seems incomplete.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from azulazul
ACELERATOR WRITER,
You have done a wonderful job with this Haiku. A very well selected scene to acompany such powerful words.
Cheers
Azulazul
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ACELERATOR WRITER,
You have done a wonderful job with this Haiku. A very well selected scene to acompany such powerful words.
Cheers
Azulazul
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from IreneSJ
Certainly give the old grey cells a bit of a workout! I wasn't aware of the three phases of the traditional Haiku so thanks for the lesson. This fits well and achieves great imagery within the strict confines of this style.
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Certainly give the old grey cells a bit of a workout! I wasn't aware of the three phases of the traditional Haiku so thanks for the lesson. This fits well and achieves great imagery within the strict confines of this style.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from mariejames
Nicely done! A wonderful little Haiku-my appreciation for this form is growing with each one I read as I find they are rich with metaphors and meaning, while using a few purposeful words. Thanks so much for sharing:)
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Nicely done! A wonderful little Haiku-my appreciation for this form is growing with each one I read as I find they are rich with metaphors and meaning, while using a few purposeful words. Thanks so much for sharing:)
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
Comment from writeryak
Haiku. Gotta love em! I liked your haiku a lot, maybe because I love winter itself, maybe because I adore haikus. I don't know. Regardless, I see nothing wrong with your poem and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing.
-Yak
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Haiku. Gotta love em! I liked your haiku a lot, maybe because I love winter itself, maybe because I adore haikus. I don't know. Regardless, I see nothing wrong with your poem and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing.
-Yak
Comment Written 15-Jul-2006
