Seen at a Small Lake 2
a one scene script with Pez and Pallas6 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
I like the idea of the improvised fishing pole, but it didn't hold up very well. I wonder what Pallas had caught that caused the line to break? In Midsumer Murders it would have been a dead body. I enjoyed the reference to Moby Dick or Wrath of Khan as the case may be. We find out that Pez had known the missing woman. Fun reference to the GED, Pallas saying he was the product of overcrowded public schools. Fun dialogue. judi
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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I like the idea of the improvised fishing pole, but it didn't hold up very well. I wonder what Pallas had caught that caused the line to break? In Midsumer Murders it would have been a dead body. I enjoyed the reference to Moby Dick or Wrath of Khan as the case may be. We find out that Pez had known the missing woman. Fun reference to the GED, Pallas saying he was the product of overcrowded public schools. Fun dialogue. judi
Comment Written 05-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2020
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Pez is the man of many secrets.
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I hope this missing gal doesn't turn out to be what causes Pallas's fishing pole to break. judi
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Well I?ll toss that one out.
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You aren't planning to have a dead body floating about? You'll miss an opportunity. judi
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I have another angle more Germaine to Pez and Pallas.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bill this chapter helped a lot to reveal the potential possibility of each character to crack the case.
It is usually the dumb one who stumbles over the missing dead body and leaves others to write up the reports.
I will wait to see if it happens here.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Dear Bill this chapter helped a lot to reveal the potential possibility of each character to crack the case.
It is usually the dumb one who stumbles over the missing dead body and leaves others to write up the reports.
I will wait to see if it happens here.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Suzanna
Comment from lyenochka
Lots of fun in your dialogue, Bill! That Pez is certainly not showing all his cards but at least he's helping Pallas with his vocabulary. I didn't know Khan could quote Melville...
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Lots of fun in your dialogue, Bill! That Pez is certainly not showing all his cards but at least he's helping Pallas with his vocabulary. I didn't know Khan could quote Melville...
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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In the film, Wrath of Khan, he quotes passages from Moby Dick as Admiral Kirk is his white whale.
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Ah, I see! It's been a while since seeing that movie.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your post is so funny, this constant bickering between dumb and dumber - Pez: I remembered Dolores from Detroit. Her name was Street then.
Pallas: (scoff) Street. Dolores Street became Dolores Lane? Why not Avenue or Boulevard? Why didn't she marry up and become Dolores Interstate Ninety-five.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next part.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Your post is so funny, this constant bickering between dumb and dumber - Pez: I remembered Dolores from Detroit. Her name was Street then.
Pallas: (scoff) Street. Dolores Street became Dolores Lane? Why not Avenue or Boulevard? Why didn't she marry up and become Dolores Interstate Ninety-five.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next part.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Iza
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This story is progressing slowly but surely. The characters are still believable, and the conversation flows smoothly and sounds real. Well done again!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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This story is progressing slowly but surely. The characters are still believable, and the conversation flows smoothly and sounds real. Well done again!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Thanks, TT
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You're welcome.
Comment from nomi338
This plot is about as thick as pea soup and getting thicker by the minute. I love the interplay between Pez and Pallas. You are becoming so adept at taking on different personas that I'm afraid that one of these days you are going to forget who you are and wind up becoming someone else.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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This plot is about as thick as pea soup and getting thicker by the minute. I love the interplay between Pez and Pallas. You are becoming so adept at taking on different personas that I'm afraid that one of these days you are going to forget who you are and wind up becoming someone else.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Nonsense, Dr. Watson. Now let us go. The game is afoot.
