Nightmare
Was it a dream or a real beast?27 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your story told is done well. I enjoyed reading it. The style seems complex, though, it seems, too, that you handled it well. Your words flow smoothly with good imagery, I could see this as I read it. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Your story told is done well. I enjoyed reading it. The style seems complex, though, it seems, too, that you handled it well. Your words flow smoothly with good imagery, I could see this as I read it. Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Jan, thank you for the compliment, enjoy your Thrusday!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Bertodi does come up with
some striking artwork. I can see
why you picked it for your poem.
-You did a good job with the form, JLR.
-I like your topic and the story
of Prince Donne and his nightmare
with "the wild beast fangs out."
-I like the open ended question, too.
-Well done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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-Bertodi does come up with
some striking artwork. I can see
why you picked it for your poem.
-You did a good job with the form, JLR.
-I like your topic and the story
of Prince Donne and his nightmare
with "the wild beast fangs out."
-I like the open ended question, too.
-Well done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Pam, thanks much!
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
Yes I do declare, I can remember as a child not enjoying the night, and thought that my bed clothes were my sanctuary, but when the morning came, then so did safety. Well done Jim, great poem, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Yes I do declare, I can remember as a child not enjoying the night, and thought that my bed clothes were my sanctuary, but when the morning came, then so did safety. Well done Jim, great poem, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Roy, thank you -- I remember all too well the ghosts and golbins of inner dreamstates, not too affectionaltely however.
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Well done
Comment from nomi338
Listen, I much prefer a day-mare to a nightmare any day. If I must be shaken from sleep by a dream, I much prefer that I be able to look about me and see what is going on. If it happens at night and in the dark, well that just adds to the terror. No thank you.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Listen, I much prefer a day-mare to a nightmare any day. If I must be shaken from sleep by a dream, I much prefer that I be able to look about me and see what is going on. If it happens at night and in the dark, well that just adds to the terror. No thank you.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Laughing alongside you you on this one, thanks Nomi...I agree fully!
Comment from richie b
JLR,
Your poem blooms with mystique and enchantment.
Fantastic imagery for the reader. The young prince dares
to sleep and dream!
Best wishes in contest,
Richie b
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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JLR,
Your poem blooms with mystique and enchantment.
Fantastic imagery for the reader. The young prince dares
to sleep and dream!
Best wishes in contest,
Richie b
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Richie, thank you very much.
Comment from ameen786
A picture perfect write with descriptive verses and excellent rhyming; the enjambment is superb with great flow; thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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A picture perfect write with descriptive verses and excellent rhyming; the enjambment is superb with great flow; thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Ameen, thank you!
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello JLR,
I hope you are having a good day. Your imagery is remarkably interesting like a puzzle, maybe a nightmare on the rising. It put me in the mood for what is to come. I'm not familiar with the Octavian flow poem, but I like your story trying to figure out if it's a dream or something worst (nightmare). The broken glass was part of the mystery, I guess. Things sometimes will happen crazily in the midnight hour but is better in the daytime. Interesting poem. I like it. Thanks. Happy writing. No errors.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Hello JLR,
I hope you are having a good day. Your imagery is remarkably interesting like a puzzle, maybe a nightmare on the rising. It put me in the mood for what is to come. I'm not familiar with the Octavian flow poem, but I like your story trying to figure out if it's a dream or something worst (nightmare). The broken glass was part of the mystery, I guess. Things sometimes will happen crazily in the midnight hour but is better in the daytime. Interesting poem. I like it. Thanks. Happy writing. No errors.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you, yes that oddity that comes with the happenstance of a nightmare is just too unsettling when one sees it but simp,y can?t explain it.
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You are welcome. Stay safe.
Comment from Gloria ....
Your dynamite artwork choice sets with an emotional tone of intensity right off.
You've wonderfully executed the cross rhymes of the Octavian Flow and told the story of waking from a nightmare with the vivid fear still fresh on the mind.
Excellent poem, J and I wish you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Your dynamite artwork choice sets with an emotional tone of intensity right off.
You've wonderfully executed the cross rhymes of the Octavian Flow and told the story of waking from a nightmare with the vivid fear still fresh on the mind.
Excellent poem, J and I wish you great luck in the voting booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Gloria, thank you and life in America goes on...and on and on
Comment from Boogienights
Awesome. Great story told in an interesting poetic form. I can see why it's been recognized. I'll have to try this myself. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Awesome. Great story told in an interesting poetic form. I can see why it's been recognized. I'll have to try this myself. Good luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Boogienights, thank you!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nightmare
by JLR
Hello my friend
Interesting entry for the Octavian Flow contest. Nightmares most times don't make any sense. I am not sure what yours was about. I think you did well with the Octavian form.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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Nightmare
by JLR
Hello my friend
Interesting entry for the Octavian Flow contest. Nightmares most times don't make any sense. I am not sure what yours was about. I think you did well with the Octavian form.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2020
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I appreciate the support of words for this Octavian poem, my first exposure to this fine format.
