The Warning
A Pantoum46 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Graphic imagery--suck bones/worms need time. Powerful paean! I like the alliterations both aural and visual (We'll WReak Revenge by Wielding dread. Startling closer: kneel gently on his bones. I don't care for the Pantoum form but I won't hold that against you! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Graphic imagery--suck bones/worms need time. Powerful paean! I like the alliterations both aural and visual (We'll WReak Revenge by Wielding dread. Startling closer: kneel gently on his bones. I don't care for the Pantoum form but I won't hold that against you! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thanks for noticing the specific word use in this, Liz. I find the Pantoum an interesting challenge, but like all poems with repeats, there are many pitfalls.
Comment from Monica Chaddick
A very interesting poem, and moving as well. I enjoyed the rhyme, flow, and repetition. Very well written and a wonderful dedication to the memory of Mr. George Floyd.
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A very interesting poem, and moving as well. I enjoyed the rhyme, flow, and repetition. Very well written and a wonderful dedication to the memory of Mr. George Floyd.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you, Monica. I appreciate your very kind words and the sixth star. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Precious Owuamalam
Indeed, may his soul rest in peace. This is very lovely and the image you chose for this piece is grand. A well served combination. My very best wishes, now and always.
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Indeed, may his soul rest in peace. This is very lovely and the image you chose for this piece is grand. A well served combination. My very best wishes, now and always.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you, Precious. Everyone deserves respect.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This is a very errie sounding poem. I think you did a good job of making us feel something with this poem. Nicely done for sure. That is what poetry is supposed to do after all.
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This is a very errie sounding poem. I think you did a good job of making us feel something with this poem. Nicely done for sure. That is what poetry is supposed to do after all.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you, Amanda. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
I really like a pantoum, and you have done a beautiful job with this one. I particularly like the layout. Meter and rhyme are perfect, and the presentation is lovely.
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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I really like a pantoum, and you have done a beautiful job with this one. I particularly like the layout. Meter and rhyme are perfect, and the presentation is lovely.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 31-May-2020
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Thank you, Yvonne. I appreciate your review and kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Shirley McLain
A terribly sad poem to read just as the event it is based on. It can't be called anything but tragic. You did a great job with the poem and your presentation. Have a good evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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A terribly sad poem to read just as the event it is based on. It can't be called anything but tragic. You did a great job with the poem and your presentation. Have a good evening. Shirley
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thanks for the review, Shirley. A tragic event indeed, and one that continues to ignite further tragedies.
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is a very unique and well written poem that uses repetition very well to make your point. What a pathetic commentary on the total lack of respect for a human life. All police departments should do much better than that. Bill
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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This is a very unique and well written poem that uses repetition very well to make your point. What a pathetic commentary on the total lack of respect for a human life. All police departments should do much better than that. Bill
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thanks for the review, Bill. A tragic event indeed, and one that continues to ignite further tragedies.
Comment from Megan3333
This poem is beautiful and so true. I don't think many people understand why he had to die I know i sure don't. He was asking for mercy and it wasn't given to him. This poem explains what is probably going though everyone's heads right now.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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This poem is beautiful and so true. I don't think many people understand why he had to die I know i sure don't. He was asking for mercy and it wasn't given to him. This poem explains what is probably going though everyone's heads right now.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you, Megan. It was an outrage against humanity
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a truly excellent poem, deserving of the 6 I don't have. What WAS him crime--something about a twenty-dollar-bill? Thank GOD the killer cop has been charged. May he do years of hard time. The cops who watched should also go to jail. The arsonists, vandals, and looters should
be jailed. The peaceful protestors should be unharmed while they do what they have a right to do. Oops! I ranted--not at you, of course! :-)
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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This is a truly excellent poem, deserving of the 6 I don't have. What WAS him crime--something about a twenty-dollar-bill? Thank GOD the killer cop has been charged. May he do years of hard time. The cops who watched should also go to jail. The arsonists, vandals, and looters should
be jailed. The peaceful protestors should be unharmed while they do what they have a right to do. Oops! I ranted--not at you, of course! :-)
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thank you, Janice. It was an outrage against humanity.
Comment from ameen786
Hello my friend, this one is a tough cookie for this novice; I get the theme from the eerie verses and picture, but got lost from your notes about Pantoum's description.
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Hello my friend, this one is a tough cookie for this novice; I get the theme from the eerie verses and picture, but got lost from your notes about Pantoum's description.
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 30-May-2020
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Thanks, Ameen. There's probably a better description of the Pantoum on the web. It's an old Malay form of poetry.
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Thank you, I just Googled; I should have done that before.
