The Warning
A Pantoum46 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
Wow, thank God I have a six left for this brilliant work. When I began reading it, I almost thought it was dedicated to Dean Kuch who was fond of the thriller genre. I've been away from the site for almost three years, I found out about Dean's departure. What a horrible loss.
This is a superb Pantoum filled with passion and outrage. What happened to George Floyd became national news and will disturb generation to come. What a fine tribute to his memory.
We'll wreak revenge by wielding dread
(Floyd pled, and pled... again he pled).
His mortal soul has taken flight...
We'll wreak revenge by wielding dread
This poem is the kind that shakes a reader to core like it did this one.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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Wow, thank God I have a six left for this brilliant work. When I began reading it, I almost thought it was dedicated to Dean Kuch who was fond of the thriller genre. I've been away from the site for almost three years, I found out about Dean's departure. What a horrible loss.
This is a superb Pantoum filled with passion and outrage. What happened to George Floyd became national news and will disturb generation to come. What a fine tribute to his memory.
We'll wreak revenge by wielding dread
(Floyd pled, and pled... again he pled).
His mortal soul has taken flight...
We'll wreak revenge by wielding dread
This poem is the kind that shakes a reader to core like it did this one.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2020
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I appreciate your taking the time to review my work so thoroughly. This is an issue that has reechoed around the world and sparked a new focus here in Australia on the sometimes appalling way in which indigenous aboriginal people here have been and still are treated by law enforcement agencies, government institutions and the discriminatory practices seen among sections of the wider population.
I appreciate the fact that this poem resonated strongly enough with you for the award of a sixth star, and thank you again for your supportive comments.
Once again, I apologise for the lateness of this response.
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Thank you so much, Tony. I thought of Dean Kuch when I started reading it. A powerful poetic reply to one of the greatest tragedies of all time.
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for being inspired by the tragic death of George Floyd to create and share this Pantoum. I admired your rhymes and repeats plus your dramatic prediction. Here's to peaceful change and soon- Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2020
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Thank you for being inspired by the tragic death of George Floyd to create and share this Pantoum. I admired your rhymes and repeats plus your dramatic prediction. Here's to peaceful change and soon- Joan
Comment Written 07-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Joan. Yes, a peaceful resolution would be wonderful. A bitter blow concurrent with Covid-19.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a dramatic and emotional Pantoum Tony, on this tragic event and I think your opening and closing line
Kneel gently on his bones tonight -
is for me the line that has the greatest impact. Well done with this one,
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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This is a dramatic and emotional Pantoum Tony, on this tragic event and I think your opening and closing line
Kneel gently on his bones tonight -
is for me the line that has the greatest impact. Well done with this one,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 06-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Valda. I appreciate your review. That first line was the genesis of the poem. An echo of Dylan Thomas's villanelle: 'Do not go gentle into that good night'.
All good wishes, Tony
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Well done poem. Your wording is excellent and says so much. I too sincerely hope that Mr. Floyd is resting in peace. I don't believe the rioting and looting are what would please him, and it is a discredit to his memory.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Well done poem. Your wording is excellent and says so much. I too sincerely hope that Mr. Floyd is resting in peace. I don't believe the rioting and looting are what would please him, and it is a discredit to his memory.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Louise. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from richie b
Tony,
Your poem to honor George Floyd is awesome.
Your words are deep and strike the reader hard.
Your poem opens our conscious and refuses to allow
the door to close. Thank you for sharing.
Peace,
Richie b
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Tony,
Your poem to honor George Floyd is awesome.
Your words are deep and strike the reader hard.
Your poem opens our conscious and refuses to allow
the door to close. Thank you for sharing.
Peace,
Richie b
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you, Richie. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
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You are welcome.
Comment from Spitfire
It breaks my heart to read this. I liked the completely different take on the line 'For pity's sake' -- so outraged the second time around. Different emotions aroused with the repetition of
Floyd pled and pled... again he pled.
The image of worms needing time to suck his bones--wow!
You garnered my sympathy to 'kneel gently on his bones.'
You are a master of brilliant poetry.
The use of indentation serves to make the reader gasp and absorb the before and after thoughts.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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It breaks my heart to read this. I liked the completely different take on the line 'For pity's sake' -- so outraged the second time around. Different emotions aroused with the repetition of
Floyd pled and pled... again he pled.
The image of worms needing time to suck his bones--wow!
You garnered my sympathy to 'kneel gently on his bones.'
You are a master of brilliant poetry.
The use of indentation serves to make the reader gasp and absorb the before and after thoughts.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much, Shari, both for your affirming review and for the six stars. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Your variation on the Pantoum works beautifully
as the emotion is carried through the lines
and the pathos of the bookend line is perfect pitch.
Sad times, like a thousands mirrors of history.
Well said.
Robert
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Hello Tony,
Your variation on the Pantoum works beautifully
as the emotion is carried through the lines
and the pathos of the bookend line is perfect pitch.
Sad times, like a thousands mirrors of history.
Well said.
Robert
Comment Written 02-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2020
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Thanks, Robert. I appreciate your kind words and the six stars. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Wow, I felt like stepping down in one of those Byron's poem where death and desperation is hurting the soul for an eternity. I must admit there is a certain eerie to this poem:"
Kneel gently on his bones tonight,
for pity's sake.
The worms need time"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Wow, I felt like stepping down in one of those Byron's poem where death and desperation is hurting the soul for an eternity. I must admit there is a certain eerie to this poem:"
Kneel gently on his bones tonight,
for pity's sake.
The worms need time"
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much, Iza, for your review and award of six stars. I appreciate your comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from w.j.debi
You've ripped this right out of the headlines. And it is haunting. The riots and unrest are out of control. It would be nice if we could take some time and honor his life for the good things he has done.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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You've ripped this right out of the headlines. And it is haunting. The riots and unrest are out of control. It would be nice if we could take some time and honor his life for the good things he has done.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much, Debi, for your review and award of six stars. I appreciate your comments. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Louise Michelle
When I first started reading, I had a wise crack for you, but then when I realized it's about Mr. Floyd, I got serious. My country is a mess. I'm concerned about the systemic killing of Black men, I'm concerned about the damage being done to property and I'm concerned about the virus spreading because of the demonstrations. This is a very poignant poem and your words will stay with me next time I watch the news. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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When I first started reading, I had a wise crack for you, but then when I realized it's about Mr. Floyd, I got serious. My country is a mess. I'm concerned about the systemic killing of Black men, I'm concerned about the damage being done to property and I'm concerned about the virus spreading because of the demonstrations. This is a very poignant poem and your words will stay with me next time I watch the news. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Thank you very much, Lou, for your review and comments. These are dangerous times. All good wishes, Tony
