THE CURSE
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Chaos Below"The six book of the Novels of the Breedline
7 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I liked this one off episode Shana. Are you alright? I think this is the first you've ever broken from your episodic writing. You've done a great job with, we didn't actually get anything on how the Lord summoned the battle angels, and this is before Lailah was granted human existence again, well done, dear girl, you are a fantastic story teller, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I liked this one off episode Shana. Are you alright? I think this is the first you've ever broken from your episodic writing. You've done a great job with, we didn't actually get anything on how the Lord summoned the battle angels, and this is before Lailah was granted human existence again, well done, dear girl, you are a fantastic story teller, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, dear friend. Actually... this scene is from Sins of Chaos. I am republishing my first four books because my publishing company is stealing my royalties. I am going back and rewriting and re-editing the books because they need it. I will also give all of them a fresh cover. So... I have to put the new book I'm working on in the back burner. Hopefully it will all work out.
Thanks for all your kind words. I was hoping you would enjoy this chapter. I loved creating all the battle angels. They come in handy for the Breedline.
Always your fan,
Shana :)
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That?s what publishers do, destroyed a friend of mine
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So sorry to hear that. I find that Amazon is the best way to go. I've heard positive things from other authors.
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I think you?re With amazon, these were private companies, the ones that sponsor you when you can?t afford to do fancy publishing. I?m sure you?ll be fine, this was pre Amazon, Shana, sorry for alarming your
Comment from ngage
The artwork here is outstanding, Ms. Shana. Perfect fit for this chapter. I enjoyed how you described each battle angel. Your imagination is fantastic! I could imagine each angel as I read along. The Creator is spectacular as well. Very believable.
I enjoyed it immensely. Keep them coming!
Nate
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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The artwork here is outstanding, Ms. Shana. Perfect fit for this chapter. I enjoyed how you described each battle angel. Your imagination is fantastic! I could imagine each angel as I read along. The Creator is spectacular as well. Very believable.
I enjoyed it immensely. Keep them coming!
Nate
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thanks Nate :)
I really enjoy hearing what you think of my chapters. Thanks so much for your continuous support and kind words.
Hugs,
Shana :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Love this chapter is funny and serious , quite a preparation with the forces of evil. The characterization of one of your warriors is super funny, 100% human behavior and sense of humor:"Lastly, his fourth choice was no ordinary angel. Frigg was one of God's originals, serving as a battle angel for more than a century. With a personality bigger than life, and a doppelganger of Billy Idol--sporting the same trademark bleached spiked hair--Frigg still had a few of his human weaknesses. He loved rock-n-roll, cheeseburgers and old classic movies. Aside from a few bad habits and a smart mouth, the Creator gifted him with the unique power of shapeshifting. Frigg could transform and reshape himself into any living thing.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Love this chapter is funny and serious , quite a preparation with the forces of evil. The characterization of one of your warriors is super funny, 100% human behavior and sense of humor:"Lastly, his fourth choice was no ordinary angel. Frigg was one of God's originals, serving as a battle angel for more than a century. With a personality bigger than life, and a doppelganger of Billy Idol--sporting the same trademark bleached spiked hair--Frigg still had a few of his human weaknesses. He loved rock-n-roll, cheeseburgers and old classic movies. Aside from a few bad habits and a smart mouth, the Creator gifted him with the unique power of shapeshifting. Frigg could transform and reshape himself into any living thing.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, Iza :)
The battle angels are going in to help the Breedline fight a supernatural species called the Fury that are feeding off humans. I enjoy writing and creating new life even if it has something to do with religion. I believe we all need more in our lives and the Breedline characters have a strong faith. It gives me hope anyway.
Thanks again,
Shana :)
Comment from robyn corum
Shana,
Super chapter. Though I don't read much fantasy, I was able to jump in here with both feet and understand everything perfectly - that's super writing on your part. Kudos!
I only saw one tiny nit:
--> "Yes, (C)ommander."
Thanks!
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Shana,
Super chapter. Though I don't read much fantasy, I was able to jump in here with both feet and understand everything perfectly - that's super writing on your part. Kudos!
I only saw one tiny nit:
--> "Yes, (C)ommander."
Thanks!
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, Robyn :)
I appreciate your feedback and for catching my typo. It's great to receive help here. Everyone is so nice on FanStory. Thanks for taking the time to read my chapter.
Sincerely,
Shana :)
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
I think this is a very interesting book chapter. It is not simple SF, although it has many SF-characteristics. It also is very human, with humanly reasoning and sentiments, and fears. (So what if Manual recognizes me?) But to me, it strikes me as also as religious. The angel sent to the earth as a warrior, punishing the Breedlines for bad and sinful behaviour. To save God's children they must face danger and act without delay. All warriors have Greek mythology names. Not coincidental.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I think this is a very interesting book chapter. It is not simple SF, although it has many SF-characteristics. It also is very human, with humanly reasoning and sentiments, and fears. (So what if Manual recognizes me?) But to me, it strikes me as also as religious. The angel sent to the earth as a warrior, punishing the Breedlines for bad and sinful behaviour. To save God's children they must face danger and act without delay. All warriors have Greek mythology names. Not coincidental.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, Marjon :)
I had fun creating my battle angels. They are going to earth to help the Breedline stop a supernatural species that are killing humans. Thanks for all your feedback and great review. I appreciate it!
Sincerely,
Shana :)
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You are so welcome.
Comment from fm wright
I like very much how you have described each angel. In a few words you have described their abilities as well as their particular personalities. It reads very well as one line flows into the next. You've done a good job on setting up the plot and that which may flow from it. I also like the pictures you've chosen.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I like very much how you have described each angel. In a few words you have described their abilities as well as their particular personalities. It reads very well as one line flows into the next. You've done a good job on setting up the plot and that which may flow from it. I also like the pictures you've chosen.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, Faye :)
Glad you enjoyed the scene with the angels. Frigg is my favorite. He's a bit of a handful, but fun to write about. I appreciate your support and awesome feedback.
Sending you big hugs!
Shana :)
Comment from Mistydawn
What an interesting chapter, putting the battle into motion. It's very well-written, interesting start to finish. Your characters really come to life. Reading this now helped me get a better understanding of what I've read, how it all came to be. I don't know why, but I like Frigg the most. He seems to be the most interesting, colorful of all. Be the one who livens things up. I had to laugh at the part at the end. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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What an interesting chapter, putting the battle into motion. It's very well-written, interesting start to finish. Your characters really come to life. Reading this now helped me get a better understanding of what I've read, how it all came to be. I don't know why, but I like Frigg the most. He seems to be the most interesting, colorful of all. Be the one who livens things up. I had to laugh at the part at the end. Nicely done.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, Mistydawn :)
Glad you enjoyed the chapter. I definitely had fun writing this one. It's actually a scene from Sins of Chaos... my boo-boo. LOL! It's hard to keep up with all the stories. Although the battle angels play a part in The Immortal as well. And Frigg is my favorite too! When I created him, Billy Idol popped into my head. He is definitely colorful. Haha!
Thanks again!
Hugs,
Shana :)
