Venomous Kiss
A Kyrielle for the Love Bites contest13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This kyrielle, Venomous Kiss, has the proper formatting and tells the sad love story of Antony and Cleopatra which ends with both meeting cruel fates.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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This kyrielle, Venomous Kiss, has the proper formatting and tells the sad love story of Antony and Cleopatra which ends with both meeting cruel fates.
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine story here and I loved the form, the rhymes and flow and love did indeed bite in this instance and your poem is so appropriate for the contest, it is sure to be a winner, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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A fine story here and I loved the form, the rhymes and flow and love did indeed bite in this instance and your poem is so appropriate for the contest, it is sure to be a winner, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This was amazing. My only suggestion is to take 'had' out of the first line because it's the only line in the whole poem that throws off the meter. It would be perfect then. You did a really fantastic job with this poem.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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This was amazing. My only suggestion is to take 'had' out of the first line because it's the only line in the whole poem that throws off the meter. It would be perfect then. You did a really fantastic job with this poem.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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So glad you enjoyed this!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello my friend
Beautiful entry for the
Love Bites writing prompt contest. Wonderful poetic form and presentation. Your well chosen words flow nicely. Well done.
I always liked the story of Marc Antony and Cleopatra. Elizabeth Taylor played her well.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Hello my friend
Beautiful entry for the
Love Bites writing prompt contest. Wonderful poetic form and presentation. Your well chosen words flow nicely. Well done.
I always liked the story of Marc Antony and Cleopatra. Elizabeth Taylor played her well.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written kyrielle about love that sometimes can have a nasty bite and we cannot always accept it as our fate to lose a love we dreamed of for many years, rather die than live on.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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A very well-written kyrielle about love that sometimes can have a nasty bite and we cannot always accept it as our fate to lose a love we dreamed of for many years, rather die than live on.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from Michele Harber
This is an excellent Kyrielle. You tell a full story, give us a bit of a history lesson, and perfectly follow the Kyrielle rules. In each instance, the refrain seems organic, and not merely placed there to suit the Kyrielle pattern. Your rhymes are extremely well chosen, and you fit the "Love Bites" idea not just metaphorically but literally. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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This is an excellent Kyrielle. You tell a full story, give us a bit of a history lesson, and perfectly follow the Kyrielle rules. In each instance, the refrain seems organic, and not merely placed there to suit the Kyrielle pattern. Your rhymes are extremely well chosen, and you fit the "Love Bites" idea not just metaphorically but literally. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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So glad you like it!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
She never thought of that love would bite; she took measures to come out but she could not and had to surrender to bear absolute loss; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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She never thought of that love would bite; she took measures to come out but she could not and had to surrender to bear absolute loss; well said, well done; enjoyed the read; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Thank you!
Comment from pome lover
This is very well written.
Perfect meter, and your verb choices move the story along with descriptive detail until the sad ending.
Good story telling in verse.
Best of luck in the contest.
pome lover
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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This is very well written.
Perfect meter, and your verb choices move the story along with descriptive detail until the sad ending.
Good story telling in verse.
Best of luck in the contest.
pome lover
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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So glad you liked it!
Comment from zanya
Wow - these stanzas powerfully convey the classic story of the love between Anthony and Cleopatra - the strong emotions are almost palpable -what an appropriate pic !
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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Wow - these stanzas powerfully convey the classic story of the love between Anthony and Cleopatra - the strong emotions are almost palpable -what an appropriate pic !
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the positive feedback!
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I think you've drawn a lot from history to tell the story and write a very good poem that fits the contest requirements. I like how you've used the words from the contest title. I always find this story interesting as in many parts it's unusual in he gender roles the characters have - but that I suppose is true of many stories with cleopatra.
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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I think you've drawn a lot from history to tell the story and write a very good poem that fits the contest requirements. I like how you've used the words from the contest title. I always find this story interesting as in many parts it's unusual in he gender roles the characters have - but that I suppose is true of many stories with cleopatra.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
reply by the author on 25-May-2020
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So glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the positive feedback!
