The Adventures of Justin Thyme
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6 total reviews
Comment from Tsukuyomi969
That was one of the best things I've ever read on this site. You managed to get character and story into such a low word count, I'm honestly so impressed, and hope I can one day write as well as this. Cheers.
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That was one of the best things I've ever read on this site. You managed to get character and story into such a low word count, I'm honestly so impressed, and hope I can one day write as well as this. Cheers.
Comment Written 27-May-2020
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I really enjoyed reading this contest entry. I think you have this contest nailed. This was a perfect story from beginning to end. I doubt you will need it but I wish you the best of luck.
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I really enjoyed reading this contest entry. I think you have this contest nailed. This was a perfect story from beginning to end. I doubt you will need it but I wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 25-May-2020
Comment from Diana Kane
Great storyline. Fantastic telling of the clues and the ultimate conclusion. I did get a kick out of the detective is growing in number every time they were mentioned. Love love love how he got the name 20. Fantastic job! Good luck in the contest.
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Great storyline. Fantastic telling of the clues and the ultimate conclusion. I did get a kick out of the detective is growing in number every time they were mentioned. Love love love how he got the name 20. Fantastic job! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
Comment from Lucy de Welles
Contest rules say that this is supposed to be a SHORT story.
Story is well written with interesting characters and a threaded mystery. Very dark and back-alley. Author obviously an experienced writer. Smoothly flowing text, dialogue appropriate for story setting. Cute that "Twenty" is really 16!
"Eye" supposed to be "Aye."
Thank you for the opportunity to view your work.
Carry on!
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Contest rules say that this is supposed to be a SHORT story.
Story is well written with interesting characters and a threaded mystery. Very dark and back-alley. Author obviously an experienced writer. Smoothly flowing text, dialogue appropriate for story setting. Cute that "Twenty" is really 16!
"Eye" supposed to be "Aye."
Thank you for the opportunity to view your work.
Carry on!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
Comment from royowen
This is an extremely fine post and entry in this contest, I think it's one of the better, you held back the identity of Twenty, for the right amount of time, and the surprise of his true identity and how he obtained his name. An excellent plot, characters entry, well done good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : A rat slowly scuttle by(e) 2: Murty's eyes were swim(m)ing...
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This is an extremely fine post and entry in this contest, I think it's one of the better, you held back the identity of Twenty, for the right amount of time, and the surprise of his true identity and how he obtained his name. An excellent plot, characters entry, well done good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : A rat slowly scuttle by(e) 2: Murty's eyes were swim(m)ing...
Comment Written 24-May-2020
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
I like this adventure of the series of adventures of Justin Thyme aka Twenty, the taletelling of this case of death is organized and narratively realistic, I have enjoyed a few dialogues so realistic and contributory; I could not enjoy the intro or beginning for it is not so catchy as I find it is too long and descriptive, but I like the interesting ending, well said, well done; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR
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I like this adventure of the series of adventures of Justin Thyme aka Twenty, the taletelling of this case of death is organized and narratively realistic, I have enjoyed a few dialogues so realistic and contributory; I could not enjoy the intro or beginning for it is not so catchy as I find it is too long and descriptive, but I like the interesting ending, well said, well done; thank you for sharing this; keep writing. Good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 24-May-2020
