A Force to be Reckoned With: #3
Mother of all storms! PART THREE15 total reviews
Comment from bnair
"I appreciate your hospitality, truly, I do--but, really, we're much, much more comfortable at the motel."- Wow!!
I miss reading things with a higher vocabulary. I love how things are described.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020
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"I appreciate your hospitality, truly, I do--but, really, we're much, much more comfortable at the motel."- Wow!!
I miss reading things with a higher vocabulary. I love how things are described.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate your thoughtful remarks--you clearly engaged with the piece. It was cathartic! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Excellent humor, sharp concise word use, and my Mother-in-law to a tee. Have you ever looked at the writing contest at the Saturday Evening Post. Somehow your writing reminds me of the winner about five or six years ago. Then again I've been out of the loop so long that that contest may not be around any more. Best of luck with this.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Excellent humor, sharp concise word use, and my Mother-in-law to a tee. Have you ever looked at the writing contest at the Saturday Evening Post. Somehow your writing reminds me of the winner about five or six years ago. Then again I've been out of the loop so long that that contest may not be around any more. Best of luck with this.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Carol--what a lovely ssssssurprise! So nice to see you again (I refer to your recent vote!) I am delighted by your high praise--so pleased you enjoyed the piece. Stop by anytime. (Parts One and Two are not presently listed for pay--feel free to grab them from my portfolio.)
Comment from Wendy G
A very enjoyable read, with very real-life characters. One can almost picture this as a TV sit-com. I enjoy your wit. I will look forward to the other two parts.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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A very enjoyable read, with very real-life characters. One can almost picture this as a TV sit-com. I enjoy your wit. I will look forward to the other two parts.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2020
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Thanks for stopping by Wendy--always a pleasure! Parts One and Two are not presently listed for pay--feel free to grab them from my portfolio.
Comment from Rhianna Robins
What a great capture of this visit with your mother. Reading it feels oddly familiar to my visits with my own. :)
I was a little confused by the beginning in italics. I understand that is reminiscent of a past encounter and 'childhood memories' but personally I think the piece does quite well without it. You're able to capture her quirks and character well enough through the present day story, I don't think the beginning is necessary - but that's just one humble opinion.
Great job with this piece. The vulnerability you share writing about your mother without appearing to have any affliction, is wonderful. Bravo! xx
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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What a great capture of this visit with your mother. Reading it feels oddly familiar to my visits with my own. :)
I was a little confused by the beginning in italics. I understand that is reminiscent of a past encounter and 'childhood memories' but personally I think the piece does quite well without it. You're able to capture her quirks and character well enough through the present day story, I don't think the beginning is necessary - but that's just one humble opinion.
Great job with this piece. The vulnerability you share writing about your mother without appearing to have any affliction, is wonderful. Bravo! xx
Comment Written 01-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Rhianna. I appreciate your thoughtful remarks--you clearly engaged with the piece. So pleased you can relate; it was a catharsis! Cheers. LIZ
Re the background info--I am intrigued by your remark that the story stands without it--I wrote this 22 years ago and upon rereading my original copy I became confused by the change in tenses and felt the reader would as well, hence the italics--perhaps as you say I could have simply omitted those portions!
Comment from estory
Another fantastic piece. You always seem to create these wonderful caricatures and here the dialogue reveals in sharp relief the proverbial overbearing mother, constantly harping on short comings of her children and husband to reinforce the necessity of herself to all these people around her. You can never make it without her. She is the one who has to say your shopping habits are inadequate, she has to remind the husband to take his medicine, and that last parting shot, 'We're really more comfortable at the hotel' was just perfect. The sense of humor, the biting sarcasm is perfect for these caricatures. And it reveals so much about life and relationships. Those tangled webs that hold us to each other. estory
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Another fantastic piece. You always seem to create these wonderful caricatures and here the dialogue reveals in sharp relief the proverbial overbearing mother, constantly harping on short comings of her children and husband to reinforce the necessity of herself to all these people around her. You can never make it without her. She is the one who has to say your shopping habits are inadequate, she has to remind the husband to take his medicine, and that last parting shot, 'We're really more comfortable at the hotel' was just perfect. The sense of humor, the biting sarcasm is perfect for these caricatures. And it reveals so much about life and relationships. Those tangled webs that hold us to each other. estory
Comment Written 06-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2020
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Once again--I thank you for the second ssssssurprise--my lucky day. I'm delighted you engaged with the piece. Thanks for stopping by! Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This last part three in narrative taletelling about childhood memories of life with mother; backed with balanced and progressing plot development; fostered with appropriate and realistic dialogues to the thematic maturation, good beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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This last part three in narrative taletelling about childhood memories of life with mother; backed with balanced and progressing plot development; fostered with appropriate and realistic dialogues to the thematic maturation, good beginning and curious ending; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 04-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Spitfire
Hilarious ptomaine teasing started by Doug. Seems Mom verbally abuses Dad too. He takes it too. Seeing those family dynamics influenced your forthright personality. Love the phrase 'shrills operatically'. A delightful read.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Hilarious ptomaine teasing started by Doug. Seems Mom verbally abuses Dad too. He takes it too. Seeing those family dynamics influenced your forthright personality. Love the phrase 'shrills operatically'. A delightful read.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for sssssstopping by! I appreciate your sticking with the story--and pleased you found amusement--many readers were to overwhelmed by the negativity to appreciate the dark humor. My mother was quite a character--a consummate control freak. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! You did such a superb job with this. I lost count of how many fish-related puns you included in the first part. It's amazing your mother survived raising children if she had so many fears about food. It's good she stayed at the hotel. Who knows what she and Ajax would have done to your bathroom!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Lol! You did such a superb job with this. I lost count of how many fish-related puns you included in the first part. It's amazing your mother survived raising children if she had so many fears about food. It's good she stayed at the hotel. Who knows what she and Ajax would have done to your bathroom!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate your sticking with the story. My mother was quite a character--a consummate control freak. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from Ric Myworld
The six is for your outstanding skill with letters and words, more so than your story that reminds me of a sore toe or constant pounding on my head with a croquet mallet. LOL. The excruciating throbs ignited by the very thought of my own mother, and now yours too. The last line says it all best. Even trying to be nice, they are sarcastic, vindictive pains in the arse. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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The six is for your outstanding skill with letters and words, more so than your story that reminds me of a sore toe or constant pounding on my head with a croquet mallet. LOL. The excruciating throbs ignited by the very thought of my own mother, and now yours too. The last line says it all best. Even trying to be nice, they are sarcastic, vindictive pains in the arse. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2020
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Thanks for stopping by, Ric--with a bonussssss! I appreciate your sticking with the story whilst suffering the mother-of-all-headaches, so to speak. My mother was quite a character--a consummate control freak. Cheers. LIZ
Comment from LisaMay
I read this when I came upon it in May and I have the same sick feeling now as I did then. I think I'd be able to stomach it better if it were in third person, not first... that I didn't know it was you exposing your relationship with your mother. I guess i'm sensitive to this because I'm writing a spill-your-guts story and if i am reacting to YOUR story as I am, then perhaps i should not be writing my own story.
Your writing in inventive, with clever phrases and linguistic somersaulting, but the burning negativity and awfully domineering personality leaves me with ash in my mouth.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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I read this when I came upon it in May and I have the same sick feeling now as I did then. I think I'd be able to stomach it better if it were in third person, not first... that I didn't know it was you exposing your relationship with your mother. I guess i'm sensitive to this because I'm writing a spill-your-guts story and if i am reacting to YOUR story as I am, then perhaps i should not be writing my own story.
Your writing in inventive, with clever phrases and linguistic somersaulting, but the burning negativity and awfully domineering personality leaves me with ash in my mouth.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2020
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Oops--I'd hoped part three was an upper compared to part two. Sorry to have caused you distress--you are not alone in your reaction. Cheers (?) LIZ
