Rapunzel
Free Verse61 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
Rapenzul is an old tale and I am glad you wrote it in this poem. I haven't seen it in a long time. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Well written. Nice work. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Rapenzul is an old tale and I am glad you wrote it in this poem. I haven't seen it in a long time. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Well written. Nice work. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, Raul. I appreciate your review and comments. All good wishes, Tony.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Bichon
This was a very interesting poem. While the photo was cute, the poem itself has a different tone to it. The tone was great and the words were open to interpretation. Awesome work.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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This was a very interesting poem. While the photo was cute, the poem itself has a different tone to it. The tone was great and the words were open to interpretation. Awesome work.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, Bichon. I appreciate your review and comments. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Nice free verse poem and the picture is adorable! I like your meter and and the flow of this piece. The ending question indicates that the princess has left, I hope she returns.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Nice free verse poem and the picture is adorable! I like your meter and and the flow of this piece. The ending question indicates that the princess has left, I hope she returns.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, Loise. I appreciate your review and comments. There have been several different and valid interpretations of my poem. I intended it as an exploration of a dysfunctional father-daughter relationship but left it deliberately vague. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from StrengthInNumbers
Hi!
I wonder if you are writing about a daughter in this poem?
When you say, "Her poem." I think either, its a poem about your daughter, or maybe, like so many parents right now, you are trying to homeschool your children, and in a lot of cases that means the parents doing most of the work and then spending time thoughtfully writing emails to teachers and attaching the work that they had done while the child plays video games. Or, "her poem." Could mean that it is a poem "for" her.
"Where and why did you fly?" This is what makes me wonder again, who is she, and where did she go? Did you lose contact with your daughter? Did she run away? Did she move to the city for a big corporate job and you never hear from her because she is to busy and important?
Your poem, thus, is successful in being thought provoking. Good work!
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Hi!
I wonder if you are writing about a daughter in this poem?
When you say, "Her poem." I think either, its a poem about your daughter, or maybe, like so many parents right now, you are trying to homeschool your children, and in a lot of cases that means the parents doing most of the work and then spending time thoughtfully writing emails to teachers and attaching the work that they had done while the child plays video games. Or, "her poem." Could mean that it is a poem "for" her.
"Where and why did you fly?" This is what makes me wonder again, who is she, and where did she go? Did you lose contact with your daughter? Did she run away? Did she move to the city for a big corporate job and you never hear from her because she is to busy and important?
Your poem, thus, is successful in being thought provoking. Good work!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, StrengthInNumbers. I appreciate your review and comments, which were pretty much spot-on. There have been several different and valid interpretations of my poem. I intended it as an exploration of a dysfunctional father-daughter relationship but left it deliberately vague. It's not autobiographical. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from Barbaraj1
This is a very unusual poem. It has many different interpretations. I thought this is a father talking to his daughter. Is he trying to protect her?
Even though I didn't quite understand it, I did enjoy reading it.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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This is a very unusual poem. It has many different interpretations. I thought this is a father talking to his daughter. Is he trying to protect her?
Even though I didn't quite understand it, I did enjoy reading it.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, Barbara. I appreciate your review and comments. There have been several different and valid interpretations of my poem. I intended it as an exploration of a dysfunctional father-daughter relationship but left it deliberately vague. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, unique and creative. I thought
about the theme of this poem. I remembered the story of Rapunzel from many years ago. The artwork compliments this poem
well. Have a good week.....
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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The author's words are interesting, unique and creative. I thought
about the theme of this poem. I remembered the story of Rapunzel from many years ago. The artwork compliments this poem
well. Have a good week.....
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, Harmony. I appreciate your review and comments. There have been several different and valid interpretations of my poem. I intended it as an exploration of a dysfunctional father-daughter relationship but left it deliberately vague. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Hmm, if this well written poem is to be taken seriously, then I am missing it. It is fun and it is cute. I hope I am not taking it wrong. Sorry if I am. I did enjoy reading.
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Hmm, if this well written poem is to be taken seriously, then I am missing it. It is fun and it is cute. I hope I am not taking it wrong. Sorry if I am. I did enjoy reading.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 26-May-2020
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Thanks, Barbara. I appreciate your review and comments. There have been several different and valid interpretations of my poem. I intended it as an exploration of a dysfunctional father-daughter relationship but left it deliberately vague. All good wishes, Tony.
Comment from ElPoetry001
You have touched on a universal question, spoken or pondered.
Where did I go wrong, was it a declarative song.
Was the path I spoke suggested or directed.
Did my example fail to follow my prose.
Oh, for "a do over," without the gilded cage, a temperament without deprecation or rage.
Would stepping back have been the better choice, in the role of a supporting voice?
Even so I knew the day would come when the migration call would summon you to fly away to a new day, allowing for an independent stay.
I believe that someday a migration call will bring you back my way.
I watch the sky and pray.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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You have touched on a universal question, spoken or pondered.
Where did I go wrong, was it a declarative song.
Was the path I spoke suggested or directed.
Did my example fail to follow my prose.
Oh, for "a do over," without the gilded cage, a temperament without deprecation or rage.
Would stepping back have been the better choice, in the role of a supporting voice?
Even so I knew the day would come when the migration call would summon you to fly away to a new day, allowing for an independent stay.
I believe that someday a migration call will bring you back my way.
I watch the sky and pray.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I enjoyed reading your poetic response, which captured the intention of my verses perfectly. Thank you very much for the accolade of a sixth star. I should be giving you one, too!
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Thank you
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Thank you
Comment from Mistydawn
What a well-written, interesting poem. One that can have several interpretations. It could be about a writer who protects their character in a story, a husband who tries to protect his young naive bride, or a dad trying to protect his daughter (princess) from the cruelties of the world. Like all daughters, she grows up and takes on life's challenges herself leaving the father to worry. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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What a well-written, interesting poem. One that can have several interpretations. It could be about a writer who protects their character in a story, a husband who tries to protect his young naive bride, or a dad trying to protect his daughter (princess) from the cruelties of the world. Like all daughters, she grows up and takes on life's challenges herself leaving the father to worry. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Thank you, Dawn. I appreciate your review and the sixth star. This poem did inspire quite a few different interpretations. I was actually thinking of the dad and daughter scenario, though I can see how the other ones might apply. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Debbie Pope
I just love your way with words. This poem, whether it be hers or yours, is sheer delight. Since you use Rapunzel in your title, I will read the poem as written by a man who "rescued" a woman, who "saved" a woman who did not want to be rescued or saved. Men want to do such things, and women want freedom and self-sufficiency. They don't even want to be put on a pedestal and elevated to princess, at least not in the long run.
There's a lot of life lessons in this charming piece, Tony. I truly loved it.
P.S. You could also read this poem as a father to daughter.
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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I just love your way with words. This poem, whether it be hers or yours, is sheer delight. Since you use Rapunzel in your title, I will read the poem as written by a man who "rescued" a woman, who "saved" a woman who did not want to be rescued or saved. Men want to do such things, and women want freedom and self-sufficiency. They don't even want to be put on a pedestal and elevated to princess, at least not in the long run.
There's a lot of life lessons in this charming piece, Tony. I truly loved it.
P.S. You could also read this poem as a father to daughter.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 27-May-2020
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Another six! I am truly honoured! Your interpretation of the poem is spot-on. I was actually thinking of the father-daughter relationship but the poem also fits a wider context. All the best, Tony
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All your stuff deserves sixes. Congratulations on your sonnet win. I told you that I would be shocked if you didn't win that contest.
