Pet Mac
A Flash Fiction, a sense and sensibility message140 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
A very touching story..you may have written it as a fiction piece but I have no doubt that this could happen in realy life. Pets are very sensitive ..they sense when we are feeling sad or something horrible is about or has happened.
Mac "sensed" Mr Williamson's passing that night and that's why he was silent ...it is also possible that Mr.Willie ,who was attached to Mac and his family (he came over every day), made one last "visit " before moving on.
Anyways , I really enjoyed reading your story .
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A very touching story..you may have written it as a fiction piece but I have no doubt that this could happen in realy life. Pets are very sensitive ..they sense when we are feeling sad or something horrible is about or has happened.
Mac "sensed" Mr Williamson's passing that night and that's why he was silent ...it is also possible that Mr.Willie ,who was attached to Mac and his family (he came over every day), made one last "visit " before moving on.
Anyways , I really enjoyed reading your story .
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
Comment from Cedar
It sounds like your father had a great enjoyment in his bird Mac. Pet's have a way of becoming like family members over time. Your story was very well told. Thank you for sharing...Bill
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It sounds like your father had a great enjoyment in his bird Mac. Pet's have a way of becoming like family members over time. Your story was very well told. Thank you for sharing...Bill
Comment Written 10-Aug-2018
Comment from robyn corum
A.,
I understood everything up until the end, when it seems that Mac performed some sort of memorial act for the dead neighbor, Willie - but I don't have any idea what it might have been. ?? Are you also saying that Mac seemed to sense Willie's death?
Unusual piece. Thanks!
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A.,
I understood everything up until the end, when it seems that Mac performed some sort of memorial act for the dead neighbor, Willie - but I don't have any idea what it might have been. ?? Are you also saying that Mac seemed to sense Willie's death?
Unusual piece. Thanks!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2018
Comment from James Garrity
Great job on the really good image you have created here! Can't wait to see another one of your pieces! Can't really see much that I can say to improve
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Great job on the really good image you have created here! Can't wait to see another one of your pieces! Can't really see much that I can say to improve
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this good comment.
Comment from cajunjoe
Hello Alcreator Litt Dear! Nice name , like the picture of the parrot. Then I looked at the top half way through and see that it is a work of fiction, very believable for fiction, thought you were writing about a real person. I was somewhat disappointed to see that it was not a contest entry. The writing flows smoothly, I found no errors, and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Hello Alcreator Litt Dear! Nice name , like the picture of the parrot. Then I looked at the top half way through and see that it is a work of fiction, very believable for fiction, thought you were writing about a real person. I was somewhat disappointed to see that it was not a contest entry. The writing flows smoothly, I found no errors, and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this nice review and good comment I appreciate.
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you're welcome
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I see this is listed as fiction, but I can imagine it really happening. For the bird to know Willie had died and to pay his respects with silence is probably not likely to happen, but the way you wrote this is so believable I almost think Mac was psychic. :)
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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I see this is listed as fiction, but I can imagine it really happening. For the bird to know Willie had died and to pay his respects with silence is probably not likely to happen, but the way you wrote this is so believable I almost think Mac was psychic. :)
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this super review and comment I appreciate.
Comment from apky
Now this one was a scream and I did laugh.
PP's son - what next?
It is brilliant how you poignantly show us that particular nature in us that often turns childlike, isn't it? Better than technology. Humanity and socialising competence that we indeed live to work instead of working to live. Too attuned to the technologies that urge us to get this and have that and swallow this to avoid that. We are a lot easier communicating with devices than with fellow human beings.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Now this one was a scream and I did laugh.
PP's son - what next?
It is brilliant how you poignantly show us that particular nature in us that often turns childlike, isn't it? Better than technology. Humanity and socialising competence that we indeed live to work instead of working to live. Too attuned to the technologies that urge us to get this and have that and swallow this to avoid that. We are a lot easier communicating with devices than with fellow human beings.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this awesome review and comment I appreciate.
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Dr ALCREATOR,, What a gorgeous story I really enjoyed this and it did remind me of the day my father died and how his dog Lassie howled and howled we couldnt stop her she knew Dad had died and we all cried with her. Animals and Birds have much more intelligence and emotion than we give them credit for A great story Thanks for sharing Mac!s story. I thought your writing style, punctuation was engaging and easy to read . Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Hi Dr ALCREATOR,, What a gorgeous story I really enjoyed this and it did remind me of the day my father died and how his dog Lassie howled and howled we couldnt stop her she knew Dad had died and we all cried with her. Animals and Birds have much more intelligence and emotion than we give them credit for A great story Thanks for sharing Mac!s story. I thought your writing style, punctuation was engaging and easy to read . Cheers Christine
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this authentic review and comment I appreciate.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a really good story, and one I can actually believe in. They do learn to speak and copy mannerisms easily, but the main point of this story, (I believe) is how he knew 'Willie' had died. Animals do have this inner knowledge that we only rarely show, (identical twins...) it's fascinating. Did Willie visit Mac after he had died, and that was what Mac was listening too? I believe he did. I loved the your father's character, I could just see him sitting there teaching Mac and being so proud of him. Wonderful story, and beautifully told. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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That was a really good story, and one I can actually believe in. They do learn to speak and copy mannerisms easily, but the main point of this story, (I believe) is how he knew 'Willie' had died. Animals do have this inner knowledge that we only rarely show, (identical twins...) it's fascinating. Did Willie visit Mac after he had died, and that was what Mac was listening too? I believe he did. I loved the your father's character, I could just see him sitting there teaching Mac and being so proud of him. Wonderful story, and beautifully told. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this great, gracious and gorgeous review and comment I appreciate.
Comment from meeshu
what an engaging story, I like the surprise that Mac had in store and the writer's father seems to be quite a character. excellent, ALCREATOR...............meeshu
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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what an engaging story, I like the surprise that Mac had in store and the writer's father seems to be quite a character. excellent, ALCREATOR...............meeshu
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2018
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Thank you for this good review I appreciate.
