Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 5-7-5, Life's Journey, has the right set up and notes the subtle forming of pairs in God's plans for the world going forward. The 'arc' is well played here in this eye/ear word fun.

 Comment Written 23-May-2020

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reply by the author on 23-May-2020

Thanks for noticing the poem's intention.

Comment from jaded831

Excellent

Simple yet powerful. Your poem meets the contest requirements, and your picture compliments your words. Yet to me you are also referring to going through life as a couple with its ups and downs.

 Comment Written 23-May-2020

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hello my friend

Lovely entry for the 5-7-5 Poem writing prompt contest. Good syllable count. Beautiful presentation. Good connection between lines. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-May-2020

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reply by the author on 23-May-2020

Thank you!

Comment from Amanda Louise Davis

Excellent

I would put an S on 'circle' because of you not being able to put the in there. Does that make sense? It will be like you're running around in circles. Either way, I liked this.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 23-May-2020

Thanks for your comments. I don't want them running around in circles though - it refers to 'the circle of life' (I changed 'in' to 'the' in my poem) like in the song from The Lion King... also as a continuation of the arc curve making a circle.

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

A very clever poem! Extremely likable poem. The picture is perfect and totally enhances your poem. Of course, looking at the picture brings the whole story of Noah's Ark which makes the whole thing makes perfect sense.
Good luck with the contest!
Patty

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 23-May-2020

Thanks for reviewing, Patty.

reply by Patty Palmer on 23-May-2020

You're welcome!

Comment from Cass Carlton

Excellent

This has much to recommend it. The syllable count is correct, the piece stands on its own as a Haiku. BUT there is one word which I would change (If it was my work) I would change "in" at the beginning of the third line for the word "the". It would work better than the words you have at present
(IMHO) cheers Cass

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 23-May-2020

Hi Cass,
thanks for the recommendation to change the word. It does read better with that amendment.

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 about having a close friend is always better than to be alone but when we have no friend to share our thoughts with we can try to be our own best friend and not being too hard on ourselves.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Thanks for your review.

Comment from zanya

Excellent

yes it's true we take our chances and perhaps we'll be lucky and find someone to share life's journey if that is what we want -thanks for sharing -lovely pic

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Thanks for your review. I am solo on life's journey, but for life to continue there needs to be a couple. I am last of my family left.

Comment from amada

Excellent

This is a 5-7-5 words poem, but it says volumes in its contest. That is an art. I admire your precision of words and the playful meaning and sound of "two by two we go..." It reads like a song.

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Thanks for your comment saying the phrase reads like a song - the first poems were songs so I like that link with the past.

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

Wow, I love this poem in its simplicity speaks about the greatest truth of all:"Two by two we go
on a continuous arc
in circle of life."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with the poem

 Comment Written 22-May-2020

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reply by the author on 22-May-2020

Thanks for your review. I am solo on life's journey, but for life to continue there needs to be a couple. I am last of my family left.