Five Percent
Some quarantines will be the death of you.13 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This Day 20, two-hundred and fifty word story, Five Percent, has the required line and word count and takes us to that troubled last breath as Captain Degas runs out of air. Damn!
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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This Day 20, two-hundred and fifty word story, Five Percent, has the required line and word count and takes us to that troubled last breath as Captain Degas runs out of air. Damn!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Yep, 'damn' is how I felt, too. But with 250 words, there was hardly time for a rescue! lol
Thanks for reading, Bill. Appreciate you.
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a cute story for the contest! And I thought you were out in space somewhere and in danger. Here you were in danger right here at home. At least you had excellent partners to dream about! Good luck with the contest!
Not leaving my name because I am in the same contest.
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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This is a cute story for the contest! And I thought you were out in space somewhere and in danger. Here you were in danger right here at home. At least you had excellent partners to dream about! Good luck with the contest!
Not leaving my name because I am in the same contest.
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I wish you good luck, too, Patty! Thanks for reading and reviewing. :)
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You're welcome!
Patty
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I like your unique twist to the competition. In a way, you show us that catastrophes, such as the recent unfortunate events, have always and will always be with us. And yet, you also help us to extrapolate what you put as a futuristic story to today's events.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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I like your unique twist to the competition. In a way, you show us that catastrophes, such as the recent unfortunate events, have always and will always be with us. And yet, you also help us to extrapolate what you put as a futuristic story to today's events.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Thank you, Rhonda! I appreciate your review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is the most scary story I have read for a long time. I take theattitude that even though it is set many years after Covid-19 nobody answers because in the end Covid did eliminate the whole of mankind in its second, third and endless waves. And me, I'm too young to die. Hence the scary.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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This is the most scary story I have read for a long time. I take theattitude that even though it is set many years after Covid-19 nobody answers because in the end Covid did eliminate the whole of mankind in its second, third and endless waves. And me, I'm too young to die. Hence the scary.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Hello Katherine, and thank you for reading and reviewing.
I hate to say that I'm glad it scared you, but I am glad it scared you. :)
One of my dearest friends says that, for a normally positive person, I have a rather dark side. I suppose that's true!
Glad you read and enjoyed. Thank you again.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Be prepared for a Lockdown
Hello my friend
I love your flash fiction entry for the Day 20 writing prompt contest. It's pretty interesting and intriguing. I love the ending. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Be prepared for a Lockdown
Hello my friend
I love your flash fiction entry for the Day 20 writing prompt contest. It's pretty interesting and intriguing. I love the ending. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you, ma'am. I appreciate your read and review. :)
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This is really great. I got a bleak and anxious feleing just from watching it. Very nicely done. I think you would do great if you expanded this also.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This is really great. I got a bleak and anxious feleing just from watching it. Very nicely done. I think you would do great if you expanded this also.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you, Amanda Louise! I enjoyed writing it andam glad you liked the read. :)
I may consider expanding it some time in the future. What a nice thought!
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a surprising entry for the Day 20 writing contest. The ending was totally unexpected. This is a great story and should do well in the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This is a surprising entry for the Day 20 writing contest. The ending was totally unexpected. This is a great story and should do well in the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you, Rebecca! I was certainly shooting for unexpected, so your review was lovely. :)
I appreciate you reading and reviewing.
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You're quite welcome!
Comment from royowen
How scary, not in pain, but running out of air, and nobody wants to talk to you. It's scary being alone with no one to talk, we soon find out what independence actually means in this situation. It's getting desperate when we we realise that covid is better than Mobid, Well done, an excellent post. Good
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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How scary, not in pain, but running out of air, and nobody wants to talk to you. It's scary being alone with no one to talk, we soon find out what independence actually means in this situation. It's getting desperate when we we realise that covid is better than Mobid, Well done, an excellent post. Good
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Thank you, Roy. COVID is no fun, but, at least from here, there are many things worse.
I appreciate you reading and reviewing!
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That?s right
Comment from kiwisteveh
Good job fulfilling the requirements of the prompt, and also in avoiding the temptation to make this all about current events, while still managing to reference them at the end of your story.
I am reminded of a very famous science fiction story called 'The Cold Equations'.
I like that you leave it up to the reader's imagination to make sense of why you have been abandoned in the quarantine chamber.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Good job fulfilling the requirements of the prompt, and also in avoiding the temptation to make this all about current events, while still managing to reference them at the end of your story.
I am reminded of a very famous science fiction story called 'The Cold Equations'.
I like that you leave it up to the reader's imagination to make sense of why you have been abandoned in the quarantine chamber.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you! I'll have to go find that book now. :)
Comment from Mia Twysted
Wow. This is very well done. I just love it. It goes me chills to think about dying that way. So helpless. I like the way the character faced the end. Thinking of something positive and letting it come because he knew he couldn't stop it.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Wow. This is very well done. I just love it. It goes me chills to think about dying that way. So helpless. I like the way the character faced the end. Thinking of something positive and letting it come because he knew he couldn't stop it.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you! Yep, he did much better than I would. lol
Appreciate your review. :)
