When Eagles Soar
A Triolet36 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your poem. Eagles are such majestic birds. I always enjoy watching them fly above. I don't see them often, but when I do, I pause and take time to enjoy. Thank you for sharing with us.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Eagles are such majestic birds. I always enjoy watching them fly above. I don't see them often, but when I do, I pause and take time to enjoy. Thank you for sharing with us.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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They are magnificent birds and an inspiration - provided one isn't a bunny! Thanks for your review. Appreciated.
Comment from rama devi
As usual, this is eloquent and well crafted, UI especially applaud the alliteration and consonance of P and S in these lines:
with pinions poised and spread for flight.
Such slow-winged power! I'm left in awe.
Shadows loom when eagles soar.
As this rapacious carnivore
seeks for prey, I cower in fright.
Loved reading this aloud!
Your enthusiasm for thier flights is so well portrayed, I felt my blood rush!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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As usual, this is eloquent and well crafted, UI especially applaud the alliteration and consonance of P and S in these lines:
with pinions poised and spread for flight.
Such slow-winged power! I'm left in awe.
Shadows loom when eagles soar.
As this rapacious carnivore
seeks for prey, I cower in fright.
Loved reading this aloud!
Your enthusiasm for thier flights is so well portrayed, I felt my blood rush!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thanks, RD. This is a form that I find quite challenging. There is so much repetition on it and the result is often trite. Glad this one worked for you. All good wishes, Tony
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:-)))
Comment from catch22
Hi Tony, this is a skillfully done triolet with a good repeating line that works well in all contexts it appears. I really liked the slant rhyme of soar and awe--at least it sounds that way to my pronunciation. Excellent write.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Hi Tony, this is a skillfully done triolet with a good repeating line that works well in all contexts it appears. I really liked the slant rhyme of soar and awe--at least it sounds that way to my pronunciation. Excellent write.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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They are magnificent birds and an inspiration - provided one isn't a bunny! Thanks for your review. Appreciated. Someone else mentioned the near rhyme of awe/soar. A perfect rhyme where I come from! How accents differ.
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Accents are very unique indeed, and you are very welcome.
Comment from Pantygynt
I've never liked the triolet
two many lines lost in repeats
I've always got too much to say
I've never liked the triolet
It's good though, what you post today,
but lack of space always defeats.
I've never liked the triolet
two many lines lost in repeats!
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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I've never liked the triolet
two many lines lost in repeats
I've always got too much to say
I've never liked the triolet
It's good though, what you post today,
but lack of space always defeats.
I've never liked the triolet
two many lines lost in repeats!
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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It seems that I have been hoisted by my own petard! The Triolet is a bit of a fizzler, so no real harm done by its explosion. As your response points out, it has two too many repeats!
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Here here!
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
I liked this. I never heard of this poetry form before, so it's great that you introduced it to me. I am going to research it more. Nicely written for sure.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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I liked this. I never heard of this poetry form before, so it's great that you introduced it to me. I am going to research it more. Nicely written for sure.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Amanda. Very much appreciated. Good luck with your own.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I certainly hope that someone saved a six star award for this poem, Tony. This poem takes us on a slow-winged flight that is powerful and a little frightening. I think you do a good job of explaining why eagles draw such emotional response. If their shadow loomed over me, I would cower, and I am not the prey.
Another great poem, Tony.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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I certainly hope that someone saved a six star award for this poem, Tony. This poem takes us on a slow-winged flight that is powerful and a little frightening. I think you do a good job of explaining why eagles draw such emotional response. If their shadow loomed over me, I would cower, and I am not the prey.
Another great poem, Tony.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thanks, Debbie, for your very kind comments and suggestion of six-worthiness! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Shirley McLain
A beautiful poem and presentation. I love eagles. They are such majestic birds. You did an excellent job and I didn't see any errors. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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A beautiful poem and presentation. I love eagles. They are such majestic birds. You did an excellent job and I didn't see any errors. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you so much, Shirley. Very much appreciated.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
My last six for this excellently done triolet not only in following the form required , but also the content is haunting and very well described. The flow is immaculate as it is read
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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My last six for this excellently done triolet not only in following the form required , but also the content is haunting and very well described. The flow is immaculate as it is read
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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I'm delighted that this worked so well for you, Barb, and that you thought it worthy of a sixth star. Thank you very much!
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great poem that is written in this unique form. I am going to book case this one and try this form sometime. you have matched the poem with the perfect picture. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Great poem that is written in this unique form. I am going to book case this one and try this form sometime. you have matched the poem with the perfect picture. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Bill
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Thank you, Bill. Much appreciated. I made some deliberate alterations to the generally accepted meter in this. The Triolet is normally written in consistent iambic tetrameter. Good luck with your poem. I shall look forward to reading it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
They are so awesome to watch when they hunt. We often saw them as they hunted in pairs, whilst living in Spain. The one up high would send the message to the one below after spotting the poor creature that will soon become lunch. I enjoyed reading your Triolet, Tony, it was just as it is when they fly overhead. We lost some cats to the eagles which wasn't very nice. Well done, my friend. A pleasure to read. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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They are so awesome to watch when they hunt. We often saw them as they hunted in pairs, whilst living in Spain. The one up high would send the message to the one below after spotting the poor creature that will soon become lunch. I enjoyed reading your Triolet, Tony, it was just as it is when they fly overhead. We lost some cats to the eagles which wasn't very nice. Well done, my friend. A pleasure to read. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Jim sent me a most amusing response in the form of another triolet, disparaging the darned things! Not really my favourite form either, but an interesting challenge to try to make it work. Eagles are such majestic creatures. We have a pair of wedge-tailed eagles that sometimes circle over the farm in search of careless bunnies and, on leaner days, hopping mice! Thanks for your review. Appreciated, as always. Tony
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I agree with you, it is a challenging style, so much so that I've never written one. I went and had a read of Jim's response, it's hilarious! He has done that to me when he's had something to say about a poem I've written, and he was right. Your triolet was excellent, it was spot on and cleverly written, but Jim's right in that it is a waste of lines. It's a popular style on FS. though. :)) xxx
