Of War and Rattling of Windows
War and Peace, History's play things.12 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker
Frank,
Your poem conjures eerie images of a field illuminated in warm time. I feared for the children, and I kept hopping they would be safe on the hill. I never want to insult anyone who has fought in a war--but war really is hell so I've been told. I your poem you have my emotions with the children. I also love your refrain "..,rattling at the window of my soul."
Excellent work.
Best wishing, Cindy
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Frank,
Your poem conjures eerie images of a field illuminated in warm time. I feared for the children, and I kept hopping they would be safe on the hill. I never want to insult anyone who has fought in a war--but war really is hell so I've been told. I your poem you have my emotions with the children. I also love your refrain "..,rattling at the window of my soul."
Excellent work.
Best wishing, Cindy
Comment Written 04-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2020
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Bless you Cindy, thank you for your thoughtful comments and excellent rating. I'ts true that children are often the innocent victims of war but another point that I wanted to make with this poem was that when it comes to war, adults often act like children, but of course, those adults are not so innocent.
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Dear Frank, I?m sorry I missed that the first time. I read your poem a second time, carefully, and it?s symbolic meaning became clear to me. I love your poem even more. Thank you for taking the time to explain it to me; sometimes the meaning of more complicated poetry eludes me. An excellent contest entry.
Have a wonderful weekend, Frank.
Cindy
Comment from TheMissRed
Each line captured more of my attention that the previous, and I found that I was reading a compelling story and no simple poem at all. I love the imagery and symbolism used here. You are clearly very skilled in this area.
I also really appreciate your explanation at the bottom. As I read the poem, I was trying to piece together the meanings and intentions of the author, especially when it came to the A's and F's. Very interesting!
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Each line captured more of my attention that the previous, and I found that I was reading a compelling story and no simple poem at all. I love the imagery and symbolism used here. You are clearly very skilled in this area.
I also really appreciate your explanation at the bottom. As I read the poem, I was trying to piece together the meanings and intentions of the author, especially when it came to the A's and F's. Very interesting!
Comment Written 24-May-2020
reply by the author on 24-May-2020
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Blessings MissRed, and thank you so much for this insightful review and genereous six star rating. Part of the premise was that it really doesn't matter if our bombs are "smart" if the information we and our enemies receive about actual accomplishments or failures is being manipulated. Many times the public behaves like gullible parents, pretending that they don't notice that their child's report card has been altered - turning F's to A's.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written war poem about all the aspects of war. The children don't know what happens and they keep playing and laugh as normal, only when they are grown up they find out what was going on.
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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A very well-written war poem about all the aspects of war. The children don't know what happens and they keep playing and laugh as normal, only when they are grown up they find out what was going on.
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Blessings Sandra, thank you for your excellent rating and review. I appreciate you taking the time to read, I know it's not the most pleasant of topics.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You concentrate on children suffering in war in your poem and they are probably the most resilient because they accept the status quo as normal and forget the trauma and adults so not. If you have suffered war yourself you are speaking from personal experience here and the scenes you have seen have had a profound affect on you and the haunting sounds of children laughing and crying. This is a powerful write about war, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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You concentrate on children suffering in war in your poem and they are probably the most resilient because they accept the status quo as normal and forget the trauma and adults so not. If you have suffered war yourself you are speaking from personal experience here and the scenes you have seen have had a profound affect on you and the haunting sounds of children laughing and crying. This is a powerful write about war, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Blessings Dollie, thank you for your excellent review and rating. No, Thankfully I have never personally suffered through the horrors of war. That's the point however, because most of us have not- we depend too much on a deceptive politicians and media to tell us what war is like. Even those who are suffering through war right now are usually being lied to by their leaders as well. Sometimes war is inevitable but history teaches that most of the times it was inevitable but liars and manipulators have led millions to their deaths.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Of War and Rattling of Windows
Epic entry for the
War Entry contest. I remember Operation Desert Storm and the first Gulf War. War has become impersonal and part of entertainment... it's a disgrace.
Well done my friend.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Of War and Rattling of Windows
Epic entry for the
War Entry contest. I remember Operation Desert Storm and the first Gulf War. War has become impersonal and part of entertainment... it's a disgrace.
Well done my friend.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings and thank you for your excellent rating and comments. Sadly, over the years war has become ever more impersonal as well as more horrifyingly used as entertainment.
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
This poem is a well written and thought provoking tale of the perils and repercussions of war. It is the innocents whose suffering cannot be justified and who never had a chance that will scream in our consciousness forever. I agree with the point of view you share in this work and your summation about the senselessness of it all.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This poem is a well written and thought provoking tale of the perils and repercussions of war. It is the innocents whose suffering cannot be justified and who never had a chance that will scream in our consciousness forever. I agree with the point of view you share in this work and your summation about the senselessness of it all.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings Louise, Thank you so much for your thoughtful review and generous rating.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The war it's the boogie man that leaves for real on its trail orphaned children, widows and crippled physically and mentally to deal with the after war Apocalypse. - the laughter and the screaming of the children
That on that morn, my own frail peace abruptly stole
When it came screaming, rattling at the window of my soul.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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The war it's the boogie man that leaves for real on its trail orphaned children, widows and crippled physically and mentally to deal with the after war Apocalypse. - the laughter and the screaming of the children
That on that morn, my own frail peace abruptly stole
When it came screaming, rattling at the window of my soul.
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings Iza, thank you for this excellent review and rating.
Comment from January L'Angelle
I can feel the sorrow in this poem. The pain that goes with the death and destruction, especially of children. I like that you related the war to a soccer game and saw the correlation between the two. It was heart wrenching. This is a powerful message to everyone. Hard for me to say that I enjoyed it, due to the subject matter, so lets say that I respect it and I respect you. This was really well written. -January L.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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I can feel the sorrow in this poem. The pain that goes with the death and destruction, especially of children. I like that you related the war to a soccer game and saw the correlation between the two. It was heart wrenching. This is a powerful message to everyone. Hard for me to say that I enjoyed it, due to the subject matter, so lets say that I respect it and I respect you. This was really well written. -January L.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings January, I too had difficulty writing this one. Hard to admit that even our own leaders play these games of war that in real life hurt so many. Thank you for this excellent review.
Comment from Bill Pinder
Great job with this creative way of expressing your frustration with war and how it is often spun in whatever way the media of that country chooses to use it for their own agenda. I like how you use the every day occurrence of the soccer game to contrast the playfulness of the children with the suffering and horrors of children being Killed as casualties of war. Bill
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Great job with this creative way of expressing your frustration with war and how it is often spun in whatever way the media of that country chooses to use it for their own agenda. I like how you use the every day occurrence of the soccer game to contrast the playfulness of the children with the suffering and horrors of children being Killed as casualties of war. Bill
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings Bill, and thank you for your wonderfully insightful review. I appreciate your excellent rating.
Comment from Mary Furlong
This is truly a provocative and compelling piece of writing. The juxtaposition of war scenes and a soccer match makes your point perfectly, as do the repetition of the children screaming image and the action of the small child at the end. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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This is truly a provocative and compelling piece of writing. The juxtaposition of war scenes and a soccer match makes your point perfectly, as do the repetition of the children screaming image and the action of the small child at the end. Well done.
Comment Written 22-May-2020
reply by the author on 22-May-2020
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Blessings Mary, thank you for your excellent review. I was pleasantly surprised to find that many such as you, got the soccer match analogy. As I was writing it, I thought how true that in war as in soccer the head is seldom used.
