The Black Wall
a 2-4-2 poem23 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I remember when there was a "moving or traveling Wall". It went from city to city. It was a very emotional experience. Then when I was in Washington D.C. I saw the real wall. I looked for my deceased classmate's name but I had a hard time finding it. There were so many. This is a poignant tribute to all those who gave their lives and their loved ones. Thank you.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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I remember when there was a "moving or traveling Wall". It went from city to city. It was a very emotional experience. Then when I was in Washington D.C. I saw the real wall. I looked for my deceased classmate's name but I had a hard time finding it. There were so many. This is a poignant tribute to all those who gave their lives and their loved ones. Thank you.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much Liz! I appreciate your comments.
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
This is a tear jerking entry ..
So much implied in such a few words .
I will alway remember what my mother said .. she was born in 1935 in Holland and was 10 when the war ended.
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Until her generation dies the atrocities of WW2 won't be forgotten .. after that she would say ..God help us!
In general , the younger generations are not in interested in what happened some 75 years ago .. they take being free for granted .. full stop.
It's important to remember instead what happened so we can avoid it happening again.
....we should learn from our errors at least , right?
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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This is a tear jerking entry ..
So much implied in such a few words .
I will alway remember what my mother said .. she was born in 1935 in Holland and was 10 when the war ended.
Quote:
Until her generation dies the atrocities of WW2 won't be forgotten .. after that she would say ..God help us!
In general , the younger generations are not in interested in what happened some 75 years ago .. they take being free for granted .. full stop.
It's important to remember instead what happened so we can avoid it happening again.
....we should learn from our errors at least , right?
Comment Written 30-May-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2020
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Hi Franca... I so agree with your mother and her perception that it will probably be forgotten. I truly thank you for your wise review and comments on this verse.
Melissa
Comment from Gert sherwood
Sugarray77 your 2-4-2 poem syllable tribute deserves a six which I'm minus of. I praise you of how you describe
The Black Wall. And my what a memorable picture.
Gert
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Sugarray77 your 2-4-2 poem syllable tribute deserves a six which I'm minus of. I praise you of how you describe
The Black Wall. And my what a memorable picture.
Gert
Comment Written 23-May-2020
reply by the author on 23-May-2020
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Hello Gert. Thank you for your wonderful review!
Melissa
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Smiles and you are welcome Sugarray77---Looking forward to reading your well expressed words. Gert
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a most emotive short poem, Melissa. It's amazing how much you have stated in so few words.
A fine entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the contest committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This is a most emotive short poem, Melissa. It's amazing how much you have stated in so few words.
A fine entry into this contest and I wish you great luck with the contest committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Hello Gloria. Thank you. We live two hours south of DC, so when I go and stand near the Wall, I am always deeply moved and walk away sober minded. I wanted to convey that in verse.... Thank you for your lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow... an extremely short format that delivers an extremely powerful vision - wonderful one, Melissa! If I had a six, my lady, twould be yours for the emotions you manage to convey in only eight syllables - well done! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Wow... an extremely short format that delivers an extremely powerful vision - wonderful one, Melissa! If I had a six, my lady, twould be yours for the emotions you manage to convey in only eight syllables - well done! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Hi Yvette... thank you very much!! I am moved each time I go to DC and stand near the Wall... a somber experience. I appreciate you and your thoughts on this one!! :)
Melissa
Comment from pharp
Outstanding job in the penning of this heartfelt poem. The artwork is perfect and very few words speaks volume. My husband is a Vietnam and Gulf war vet, my heart goes out to the many families who have lost loved ones. Thanks for sharing, the very best to you in the contest.
Blessings...Portia
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Outstanding job in the penning of this heartfelt poem. The artwork is perfect and very few words speaks volume. My husband is a Vietnam and Gulf war vet, my heart goes out to the many families who have lost loved ones. Thanks for sharing, the very best to you in the contest.
Blessings...Portia
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Hello Portia... thank you very much for this wonderful comment and review!!
Melissa
Comment from RodG
Although Vietnam was my generation, I have never been to the Memorial Wall in Washington, D.C. If I were to go, I know I'd weep. A very powerful poem in so few syllables. Rod
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Although Vietnam was my generation, I have never been to the Memorial Wall in Washington, D.C. If I were to go, I know I'd weep. A very powerful poem in so few syllables. Rod
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you so much Rod!! We live two hours south, so I have visited it and always come away sober minded and sad in spirit. I appreciate your comments.
Melissza
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Amanda Louise Davis
This is a really great 2-4-2 entry, and the picture perfectly goes with it. I think you have done very well with this, and I appreciated reading it very much. Nicely done with so little space.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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This is a really great 2-4-2 entry, and the picture perfectly goes with it. I think you have done very well with this, and I appreciated reading it very much. Nicely done with so little space.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you very much Amanda!
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
What a fitting picture to accompany your poem. Even though years have passed, the sorrow will not go away. People still mourn their lost loved ones. I've never seen the wall, but it must be an emotional experience for those who visit. This should do extremely well in the contest. Best of luck. judi
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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What a fitting picture to accompany your poem. Even though years have passed, the sorrow will not go away. People still mourn their lost loved ones. I've never seen the wall, but it must be an emotional experience for those who visit. This should do extremely well in the contest. Best of luck. judi
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Hello Judi... after seeing the Wall in DC, I was very touched and moved by the list of name after name. I did see weeping ~ it was very solemn there. Thank you for your lovely words.
Melissa
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You're welcome. I think anyone seeing the wall would be moved by it. judi
Comment from Mistydawn
What a powerful poem especially using so few words. A nice tribute to the men at war, how they may be gone but not forgotten. Your artwork is beautiful, perfect for your poem.
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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What a powerful poem especially using so few words. A nice tribute to the men at war, how they may be gone but not forgotten. Your artwork is beautiful, perfect for your poem.
Comment Written 21-May-2020
reply by the author on 21-May-2020
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Thank you so much Misty!!
Melissa
