Poems from a Pensive Poet
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Pathways"Verses from my heart
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Comment from roof35
Rhyming perfect. What a nice way to describe a life of love. It was very professional--I could tell you are a writer. The picture was great, too. I am new to writing. Hope I can be as accomplished someday.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Rhyming perfect. What a nice way to describe a life of love. It was very professional--I could tell you are a writer. The picture was great, too. I am new to writing. Hope I can be as accomplished someday.
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and nice comments. If you enjoy writing I'm sure you'll be great at it. FanStory is a wonderful place to start. There are very supportive people on this site.
Beth
Comment from Mia Twysted
I love the story that is within this piece. Finding your path where you were not looking. Lovely piece.
I wonder if the stanzas should have space between them ?
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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I love the story that is within this piece. Finding your path where you were not looking. Lovely piece.
I wonder if the stanzas should have space between them ?
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and the lovly comments. I wanted to put spaces but I went by the example they gave and that didn't have spaces. The last two lines were indented. Shakespeare didn't know about spaces. LOL
Beth
Comment from BambooPoet
A very nice sonnet, the rhyme was excellent.
The foot count was spot on, but the meter was it seems off just a tad not much though. I'd like to see some metaphors with originality. If there was a bit more mysteriousness to it I'd find it more appealing.
All in all a lovely sonnet of your past love.
Keep writing.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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A very nice sonnet, the rhyme was excellent.
The foot count was spot on, but the meter was it seems off just a tad not much though. I'd like to see some metaphors with originality. If there was a bit more mysteriousness to it I'd find it more appealing.
All in all a lovely sonnet of your past love.
Keep writing.
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Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you for the review and the comments. I've not tried writing a sonnet before. I'm disappointed withe the C- rating but I guess you're more of a sonnet writer than I.
Comment from royowen
I have to agree with you on this, that if I'd have seen my life laid out before me as a young man I wonder if I would have been happy, but God had laid a path for me, and had planned my life, despite the paradox of free will. So where I am, what has happened all has a divine purpose to it. This is a great entry in this sonnet poetry contest, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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I have to agree with you on this, that if I'd have seen my life laid out before me as a young man I wonder if I would have been happy, but God had laid a path for me, and had planned my life, despite the paradox of free will. So where I am, what has happened all has a divine purpose to it. This is a great entry in this sonnet poetry contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much Roy, I really appreciate these comments from a poet like you. I don't know if I'm supposed to sign my name or not so I won't.
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It?s a site contest, so everybody has Beth.
Comment from Andrewm
Very nice.I like the way you compared love to a pathway because that's what it is,and can become.You can forge a path together.You never know until go looking for 'it'.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Very nice.I like the way you compared love to a pathway because that's what it is,and can become.You can forge a path together.You never know until go looking for 'it'.
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Comment Written 20-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I've not written many sonnets, so I'm hoping I got the form right. I don't know if this is one you can sign or not I won't.
